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That was intense! I liked it a lot, especially how you treated the tunnel vision and adrenaline rush that come in a fight.

Based on the pieces below, I really think we need to get better at expressing our emotions and trusting Marianna. She deserves better than a self-loathing child soldier.

Thus, I vote for the one option that sounds like we're expressing something other than anger, apathy or self-loathing.

[X] "I wish it never came to it, I suppose."

"Thank you, Mariana," you say, releasing her hands to go. "You're a good wife." For some reason, despite the distance, despite the stain of Eve, despite the time and growing distance, you nearly say something starting with L. Odd.



"It was such a pretty ear," she says, putting on a wistful tone. You snort. "I really do mean it."

"Thank you, Mariana." There's an iron rod where your spine should be all of a sudden.

You've forgotten how to do this. Tenderness. Maybe you never knew how. Flashes at the foot of the marriage-bed, speaking in tongues and calmed by her hand. Is this something you can go to God for? "I didn't really feel anything this time around," you say. "Besides feeling like I needed to get the job done."
 
[X] "I wish it never came to it, I suppose."
Being blood-thirsty or vainglorious isn't really in character for Stanislaw. He's more a resigned determination kind of a fella, he did what he had to but he's not really a man of fantasy
 
[X] "He had it coming. He got what he asked for."

The duel is very well written.

In case you need any more references, you can have a look at the classic duel from The Deluge. Widely considered one of the best and most realistic fencing sequences ever filmed, it's a gold mine of ideas and practical information about how men fought back in the day. Aye, the quick action of upper slash-riposte-upper slash-riposte was a staple of the "cross art" (sztuka krzyżowa), as swordsmanship was known back then. The name comes from a horizontal and vertical slash, which together formed a cross (since it went along nicely with the surprisingly similar ritual of blessing oneself). The excessive riposting was meant to judge the mantle of the opponent, to check how fast and skilled is he at parrying and attacking. If he can't keep up, he'll earn a nasty scar if he won't back down.

There were no fencing schools in the Commonwealth, unlike the untold scores of them back West. A noble was trained by his father, uncle or other relative, while adding real-life experience later on. In the case of the rich, a servant or a trained swordmaster did the job. Our Prince did excellent. Scars are absolutely no problem here. In fact, a scarred veteran was considered by many ladies to be as handsome as a young model, since he obviously knew how to fight, how to survive and (hopefully) earned those scars in defense of the Commonwealth. Nobles without fingers, ears, noses and other small body parts were very common. Sabres were less lethal than rapiers, since more serious cuts could have been stopped by the bones, while a thrust to the torso is an almost certain death. Thus any quarrels or bar fights quickly ended after the first few blokes lost an ear or two, along with any more steam to continue fighting, preferring to get back to heavy drinking and partying.
 
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[X] "He had it coming. He got what he asked for."
Eh, keep a stiff upper lip.

A little Ukrainian language lesson. Ukrainian has different words to describe honour, the main one being "chest'," but there is also a literal word "honor". Technically a synonym, it, however, has a different aspect to it, noting someone prideful and defensive of that honor. Someone who has "honor" is the one that stands their ground, does not excuse insults, carries a mark of superiority upon them. This is another mark of the Commonwealth's noble culture, where honor was not just a high ideal, but a thing of great pride and, thus, related prideful actions in defense of it.
 
[X] "I wish it never came to it, I suppose."
 

Scheduled vote count started by Rolman on Mar 4, 2024 at 11:42 AM, finished with 23 posts and 20 votes.
 
“Sub Specie Aeternitatis.” March 2, 1574. Wawel, Kraków, Polish Crownlands.
"I wish it never came to it, I suppose."

"Because you don't like hurting people?" asks Mariana.

"Nobody else seems to mind. It's arrogant and brazen and offends God and nature. It's sick, is what it is."

"Well," she says, "God and nature permit such things every day. Cain and Abel, wolves and sheep." You blink at her. "Something can be expected, true, normal — without it being alright."

You give a little huff yet feel some gratitude for some reason. "Ah, well, that humanistic stuff…" you wave it away. "The Christ is Christ because of his mercy and compassion. By G— it's right there in the Commandments!"

"Yes, but," she says, looking thoughtful. "When I was a little girl I thought that, too, especially because I'd always see angels at that age. I thought: 'how could they?' But it's simply the stain of Sin."

You sigh. "I guess I have trouble accepting that."

"It hurts to watch, I know. Can I ask you something, husband?"

"Yes?"

"Why is it that the things that bring us pleasure send us to Hell, do you think? Dancing, drinking, feasting, pleasing the flesh."

You've talked about this a good deal with Friar Gosiewski. "Because they're distractions above all. The Book has much to say about their sinfulness, yes, but in my mind: they're distractions."

"Go on..."

"The reason things got so bad was the wine. How I threw up all over the pheasant in front of those Swedes," you say. It's only embarrassing if you let it be.

"Yes. That's when you started to… grow serious."

"I mean, it was mortifying. But it taught me — showed me — that I had forgotten the greatest gift ever given to mankind, a mercy so unimaginable…" you nearly get emotional. "On that I can and will subsist."

Mariana looks a little tentative; she says it anyway. "But are you happy?"

Happy. Happy. Are you happy? Are you happy? "I'm not quite sure. But I feel peace and that'll bring it in its due time." You quote the Friar: "happiness and piety are sisters, not twins."

"A few years ago, back when I was a proper virgo, I thought I wanted to become a nun. I just started having my first flowers." She contorts her face. "Oh-h-h-h the pain was terrible, but then these fell moods began to take over me. Pain or no pain, I just didn't want to rise. I felt like a stone and I'd cry at anything."

"Sounds like melancholia."

What? What's that look on her face? "Mhm," she continues, straining for memories yet speaking as an orator. "and there was a convent around wherever we were staying at the time – we weren't at Kodeń – oh, the nuns." She beams. "Peaceful, peaceful women, in their black habits all embroidered with holy images. Father let me spend time with them."

"They're special women," you agree. "Married to Christ."

Mariana nods. "And I began to hate my fine things, my dresses and my fur hats and cloaks, knowing that I'd be married to some man ten years older. This life is a bit of a prison, you know."

"Finally someone–"

"But one cannot defeat excess with… With deprivation. Stanisław, you mortify your body like you're bound for the Pit tomorrow!"

"Don't speak lightly of Hell!"

She puckers. You've never seen her like this. "Oh, yes, and you, the blue-wearing oblate, tilting and getting into duels like you're Sir Marszowski, who you hate all of a sudden!" She extends her arms out at her sides. "You weren't thinking on your sins then, were you, all clouded up by – you only ever cared about getting better when you embarrassed yourself in front of everyone!" she spits it out and wipes her eyes. "Have you ever done anything for yourself ever?"

"This, Mariana," you growl. "I am giving myself this. I am giving myself control and discipline and clear eyes and a little spiderweb-thin line to God for once in my life. I am at peace for once." You pinch your nose. "Why do you talk to your husband this way?"

"Because I cannot stand to see him suffer," she says with a sniff. "As a wife I cannot abide by it. I know I'm being out of line." The two of you exhale in unison. "The night we met, when we danced – were you thinking of Paris then?"

You can't answer that, you don't want to. She's winning.

"Did I not bring you back into your senses on our wedding night?" she asks

"What are you implying, Mariana?" You can't bring yourself to unball your fists just yet.

"You are being ruled over, Stanisław," she says with a conviction never-seen. "Not by Saint Benedict's Rule, not by God, but by a man – and what that man is telling you to do."

Have you really just been taking orders? Again? You swallow. "No…"

"The writings of the Saints aren't infallible, anyway, you know. Didn't you say you argued against Aquinas at university?"

Oh, that. "I didn't know what I was doing back then," you say, waving at the air to make it go away. "It was very sinful in retrospect."

"Says who?" Mariana snaps, "the Bible? God? The Lord does not test anybody more than He wants to. Why test yourself? What'll satisfy you? You've killed men, won a joust, won a duel! And you're in bandages for it all." She sighs.

Is she being hysterical? No. It's undeniable. She's making some points, she's shaking you.

"I haven't seen much of the world," she says. "But I've seen enough and read enough to know that there are men who rule through hatred – you should know that – that there are men who rule through despair and fear and making a man hate himself."

You don't know what to say.

"And life should be anything, anything, everything but living under that. Under the thumb of such people."

"You dishonor God and the Saints, Mariana." Why must you feel like shaking?

"Think on it. Please, think on it."

You must.
 
XI. March 2-April 1, 1574. Orsza, Witebsk Voivodeship, Grand Duchy of Lithuania.
You were closing in on Orsza by late March.

Marszowski, van Gistel, Friar Gosiewski, dear Mariana, and just short of a hundred attendants, bodyguards, and ladies-in-waiting. Your little village is on the move; the baggage train is loaded-down with bedframes and tables, a kitchen's worth of cookware, gingerly-handled paintings and tapestries. All are aware that they are going home, a near-punishment to last until the King finds satisfaction. There's no telling how he feels about the outcome of the duel – or maybe it doesn't need to be told. After all, alive and (relatively) unscathed or not, you're still bound for a frontier town where a man named Kmita – probably a minder – awaits you.

The forests and marshes of the west give way to the scrublands, birch forests, and rolling hills of the east. Of course, given the season, everywhere has turned to mud, and the beauty of the land lies dormant behind gray skies. But there is always some excitement to see lands undiscovered.

You couldn't find any suitable high ground to view the city from afar, but its stone castle rose above it – your new home for the time being. A good deal smaller than Dubinki and rather unimposing, yet shining-clean and well-maintained on account of its relative youth and proximity to the hated Muscovite. At the intersection of the little Orszica and the mighty Dniepr, it holds a defensible position and hangs over the city as a symbol of Grand Ducal authority, to be executed by your hand.

It's weighty, to be sure, but at least the town is small. A few thousand cramped into muddy lanes and hugging the twin rivers behind half-wood half-stone city walls. They're a diverse bunch: like a microcosm of Kijów, one could find as many Jews, Armenians, and Calvinist transplants from the Crownlands and Lithuania proper as they could Ruthenians. Things seem harmonious enough, with only a few rabble-rousers and gangs bothering the townsfolk, the threads of the quilt holding, praise God.

You quickly come to understand that this is a river city. Despite its upstream position on Dniepr, Orsza bears the distinction of being great Smolensk's only downstream neighbor – everything that city produces, bound for Kijów and beyond, must pass through Orsza.

As your servants get to work unpacking a new life into Orsza Castle, the local officials begin to file through, introducing themselves: the military tribune, the magistrate, the steward, the standard-bearer. It's the Starost, this Kmita fellow who so intrigues and frightens you, who comes last.

He looks like a damned Zaporozhian! A fantastically drooping mustache adorns his weathered face, and it seems like there may be very little hair under his cap. He bows with a flourish. "Your Serene Highness: your starost, sir, Filon Kmita of my family's Radwan banner. I have been most eager to meet you."

"Likewise, Lord Kmita." He seems more like a hussar than a web-weaver. "Your reputation precedes you!"

"Does it now?" he grins. "Dashing or duplicitous, Your Serene Highness?"

"Well, they frequently come tied together, no?" you joke; he laughs. "A courageous horseman is a cunning one."

Kmita brushes off his shoulders, feigning modesty. "Well, I am good with the cavalry…" he looks to you for a laugh which you willingly provide. Even if he's a threat.

"I'm told you're most capable, Lord Kmita," you emphasize. "In subterfuge and in battle; I'm glad to have you on our side, sir."

Nothing wrong with buttering him up. "And it is good to make the acquaintance of Your Serene Highness!" he points and chuckles like an uncle. "Look at that ear! That's fresh."

"Indeed. I'm learning fast," you say with some weariness.

"Clearly! Well, Your Serene Highness, if I may get down to business?"

"Please."

"Well," he begins, looking to the ceiling in a search for words. "Well… It's been a long while since we've had a castellan here. Really doing castellan's work, that is. So, well…"

"Yes?"

"Well, the Voivode — you've met him?"

Lord Stanisław Pac, in Witebsk. No, you haven't. Perhaps he's waiting for you to come to him. "I have not."

"He reckons me to be the authority around here and, to be frank, I agree," Kmita says. "I've done eight years here now, and have done and seen a very good deal against Iwan; the soldiers, the spies, I even manage the courts."

You decide to answer directness with directness. "So you're saying I'm in your house, sir?"

"In a word — yes, Your Serene Highness. But I know your superior rank and title and so I very much hope to work closely with you."

"That can be done. Well, so, the first thing you can do is tell me of this place, as one who truly lives here." You want to let him know here and now that there isn't an imperious bone in your body, such is a man born under Cancer. So say those apostates, that is.

And Lord Kmita does: it's a proud diatribe about his spies in the high halls of Moskwa, his crack squadrons of Zaporozhian riders and noble hussars, capable of stopping any raid by Tatar or "Caesar" alike. He points a thumb at himself: "and the taxmen hardly dare skim off the top anymore!"

After a few weeks, it's apparent that it wasn't bluster: this section of Witebsk Voivodeship runs like clockwork. The peasants leave each other be, the taxes are paid, the ferries come and go on time and do so unmolested. Muscovite riders dare not cross the border, but are taken care of when they do — the hanging trees your brother Krzysztof once boasted of are scattered across the scrublands.

This is a predicament. Are your hands bound?

[] Let's to Witebsk to meet with Voivode Pac.

While not necessarily coming in appeal, showing some deference in spite of your princely rank to your colleague and pseudo-superior could open doors, unfog some stunned eyes. Kmita would accompany and there would likely be the tone of a summit.

[] Begin working with Kmita closely.

Attempt to learn more about this character of a man from the source itself; he'd be spying on you in any event should he indeed be a spy, you figure. This is his little fiefdom and, while refusing open deference, you're sending a clear message of cooperation and consensus, however naïve you may wind up being.

[] Investigate Kmita.

A spy is a spy and may just be a *spy.* But where to begin? Who to find out from? As far as you're aware, there's no French liaisons in town. Right? Embedding some of your men amongst Kmita's riders — framed as an act of good faith — could yield answers. Or is this paranoia for nothing, risking angering a true spy's spy?

[] Kick back and relax.

This is a gilded cage. Or maybe a bronze cage or some such. Maybe just a cage. Why not make the best of it? After all, you have your own little castle, Mariana, your retainers, and most importantly God. Focus on personal ties, spirituality, and sport as you wait out the Frenchman.
 
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