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"When the tree leaves dance, one shall find flames. The fire's shadow will illuminate the village, and once again, tree leaves shall bud anew."

I recalled those words fondly as I died, protecting someone innocent. Never did I expect to awaken as a babe, ripped from my family, with no hope of ever seeing them again. As I navigate this world of secrets, tumbling through the darkness that chokes the shinobi world, I hold one thing close to me. Sapere Aude, Uchiha Miho. Dare to Know
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1.01: Miho

Miho Chan

One with too many ideas
Location
Hummelstown
Pronouns
She/Her
No one can truly tell you what dying feels like. The hope of a better next life, the crushing disappointment in ones' self, the desire to do more, the burning need to say goodbye one last time… All these emotions and more poured through me as I laid dying on the floor of a local store, my lifeblood pouring out of me.

Don't get me wrong, I knew my life was over. I knew that my wound was fatal. But the heart… the heart yearns for something beyond logic, something beyond cold, hard facts. So my heart cried out, "Why is this happening? Why does a single, selfless act have to result in my death? Why is life so cruel, so unfair?"

Little did I know that whoever heard that little plea had a… sense of irony rivaled by none, based on the place I ended up. A world embroiled in war. A world full of unfairness, where one is never born equal. A world full of strife, of families slaughtered, one that had hoped for a better future, yet would require a river of blood to reach it.

The world created by Kishimoto Masashi. The Ninja World.

Excerpt from Uchiha Miho's Journal, Volume I. Published Post Mortem.​



A baby generally comes into the world crying. This is a known fact. A baby does not, however, come into the world full of memories of a past life, sobbing. I wasn't aware when I was in the womb, thank god, but the instant I was pushed out of it, the vague sensations of warmth transformed into the cold reality of my situation. My family was gone. My previous life was over. Nothing in my power could stop that.

"It's a girl, Uchiha-san." A voice called softly as I stared up at the blurry figure I guessed was speaking, "Seems like- That can't be right."

"What's wrong Sarutobi-san?" A male voice called, "Is my child-"

The blurry figure's head shook, even as my vision began to clear. What- What the hell were they talking about? I recognized some of the names, Sarutobi and Uchiha were familiar to me, but- Shit.

"Her sharingan is awakened." The woman holding me stated flatly.

"Impossib- Kami above! It is!" The male voice cut in again before his vitriol turned to awe. "How is this possible?"

The blurred figure's arm reached down towards me, covered in green light.

"I don't know, but it's straining her chakra network."

Having been silent for a few moments as I contemplated in shock exactly what my situation was, I groaned internally. I wasn't familiar with Japanese anymore, though I could speak it, somewhat, conversationally. This was going to suck.

"Is there something you can do, Sarutobi-san?" A female voice called, "I don't want anything to happen to my daughter."

My vision was finally clear now, and- Oh lord. I could see what must have been the chakra of the three in the room, and-

My family. They were my new family. Some inner, base instinct told me this. I rebelled against the very thought. My family was still alive… just forever out of my reach.

My sobs renewed themselves after a full minute of silence, and I tuned out the frantic ramblings of my new birth parents and the med-nin as I wailed to the sky, cursing whatever it was that had sent me here, unable to watch over my family even in death.

Within my eyes, I felt something shift as I mourned the loss of all my loved ones, all those I had cared for, unaware of my newly acquired sharingan slowly leaking tears of blood as it morphed into something more.



Awakening the Mangekyo Sharingan at the tender age of a few seconds old shocked my parents something fierce. The truth was needed, and something I, unfortunately, couldn't communicate till my grasp of Japanese was good enough. Until then, I continue to write my journal twice over, once in English, once in Hiragana. Not much else happened in my younger years. I was fully depressed for a solid year before I finally kicked myself into gear. No more lamenting what was lost. Not without moving forward. Not without living the life my loved ones would have wanted me to live. I think it was the night of the Kyuubi that knocked some sense into me. The sheer terror I felt when swamped by Kurama's killing intent was enough to kick my survival instincts and pride into overdrive. I would never be as afraid as I had been during that night ever again.

So, I trained. Because I knew where I was. I knew what world I resided in. The Ninja World gave zero shits if you were innocent. You either were strong, or you died. I hated it. I hated it so much it hurt. But that was the laws of this world, and by God was I going to live a good life.

So, on the eve of my fifth birthday, I told my parents the truth. In return, I asked for only one thing. "Teach me how to be an Uchiha."

Excerpt from Uchiha Miho's Journal, Volume I. Published Post Mortem​



"-Once again, I'm sorry… haha-ue, chichi-ue." I finished, tears leaking from my activated sharingan.

Neither of my parent's eyes were dry, either. Both had cried at points in my story, not out of sadness, but the very fact I was calling them by what they had always desired from me. Simply to be my mother and father. And this was the first time I had even referred to them as such. In reflection, I had been a terrible daughter, and I was fully intending to fix that, even if I couldn't do so all too well.

"Miho." My father spoke, drying his eyes, "I am proud of you. Proud of you for telling us the truth. Proud of you for breaking out of your depression on your own. Most of all, proud of you for giving us this chance."

My mother nodded, drying her eyes as well. "Thank you, Miho. You are forgiven, my child."

I sniffled wetly. It felt good to unbear the burden that I had shouldered for so long, throwing my tiny arms around my mother as I tackled her in a hug. It was nice, finding it in myself to love someone again, especially in the sense of familial love. Uchiha Naori and Uchiha Naka more than deserved the chance that I had given them, one could even say I owed it to them.

"Now, Miho, my daughter." Father- no, dad- spoke after a solid ten minutes of silence, "you asked your mother and I for additional training. We will begin tomorrow, after the party that Fugaku-sama is holding in your honor."

I blinked. "May I ask why I am receiving Fugaku-sama's favor, papa?"

"He is aware of your Mangekyo-Sharingan, and it is traditional for the Clan Head to celebrate the awakening of a child's sharingan. It is also traditional to mourn the awakening of a Mangekyo."

I blinked, deactivating my sharingan. "Mourn?"

Mom nodded. "Yes, mourn. We mourn the experience our clanmate had gone through to receive one. Power is not everything to the Uchiha, at least, not since Madara's time as Clan Head."

I nodded slowly. It made sense. It also humanized the Uchiha clan quite a bit and made Madara an outlier instead of the standard. Which was nice, in a way.

"Now Miho, I will provide you with the scroll for the coming of age Jutsu. I expect you to have the basics down before the party tomorrow." Dad said, smirking. "Now that I know you're mentally older, I'll be expecting far more out of you during training."

I gulped, before nodding. "Fair enough, papa."



"Again, Miho." Mom stated.

I nodded, settling into the basic stance of Taka-no-Mai as I repeated the kata that mom had me memorize, nodding in satisfaction as I performed it correctly, and within the time limit given.

"Now, sharingan on. Watch my movements, and figure out how to best implement it into the Interceptor's Dance."

Uchiha Naori rapidly ran through a series of more advanced kata from the Uchiha's taijutsu as I watched with my sharingan activated, each movement being ingrained into my mind as I copied it. Mentally running through how to implement the movements into my body, I flowed through the original kata mom had asked me to run through, adding the fluid movements that my mother had gone through to the taijutsu style.

"Good. Take a break for self-study Miho. I know you've been itching to look at the scroll your father gave you."

I nodded happily, running quickly over to where I had left my belongings and grabbing the scroll detailing the use of Katon: Gōkakyū no Jutsu. Knowing my dad, it was probably a solidly comprehensive guide that I would just barely be able to understand, but would give me, upon comprehension, the ability, theoretically, to perform it much faster than the traditional method. I could, of course, cheat and copy it, but that was frowned upon.

A solid hour later, and I was ready to try my hand at the jutsu, running through the handsigns slowly to get a feel for how they kneaded my chakra, not actually releasing the jutsu or actively channeling the chakra into the technique. Another thirty minutes later, I was finally satisfied that I had somewhat of an idea of what I was doing. I breathed deeply, turned to face the sky, and ran through the handsigns as rapidly as I dared.

"Katon: Gokakyu no Jutsu!" I called, expelling the chakra from my body through my mouth, making sure that the entire portion of my body that the flames would travel through was shielded by chakra. It worked. The decent-sized fireball flew from my mouth into the sky, detonating sometime later as the chakra holding its shape destabilized.

"Well done Miho!" mom called my side, engulfing me in a hug, "your first try, even!"

I blushed, muttering something along the lines of 'not really', and explaining my methodology to my mother, who nodded.

"That is generally how chunin and jonin level ninja approach learning new ninjutsu, well done. No wonder you got it on your first "active" try. You knew exactly how to mold your chakra. Still, impressive."

"Why don't genin-level ninja practice that way?" I asked, panting lightly.

"They generally cannot sense their chakra as well as chunin and jonin, Miho-san, and have less chakra than a chunin or jonin, as a general rule." An unfamiliar voice stated. Mother turned and bowed at our guest.

"Fugaku-sama, what can I assist you with today?"

The newly named Clan Head nodded in my direction. "I was training on another field when I noticed the Gokakyu from this field. Imagine my surprise when Miho-san here was the one responsible for it, at such a young age as well."

Mom puffed up in pride, though with much more subtly than I did. "Thank you, Fugaku-sama." I replied, bowing, "Father's scroll helped a lot."

Fugaku nodded. "Uchiha Naka was always good with Ninjutsu, even if it did get him into some trouble. Do not follow down his former path, young Miho. It will only end in tears. Thankfully, your mother sacrificed much to teach your father the errors of his ways."

I looked at my mother, asking a silent question. She shook her head slowly. "Later, Miho." She replied, "Fugaku-sama, how are Satsuki-sama and Itachi-sama doing?"

Fugaku gave my mom a smile, something that I learned later was something he rarely did. "Satsuki is learning the arts of our clan well, though she is not quite advanced as young Miho here. Itachi has joined ANBU, as you are aware. He is currently deployed as one of the Sandaime's guards on the yearly trip to Sunagakure-no-Sato."

Mom frowned. "I had thought Itachi was assigned to Uzumaki-san."

Fugaku nodded. "He is. Uzumaki-san accompanied the Hokage on his trip, by her request, and by the Third's will."

I made a low, keening sound as I comprehended what they were talking about. Oh, fantastic. I was in a different version of Naruto than canon, seeing as the main characters were both female.

"Is something wrong, Miho-chan?" Mom asked, turning her attention to me. I shook my head, mouthing 'later', not even attempting to be subtle. Mom nodded, accepting my wish for privacy for what it was. Fugaku, in a move that shouldn't have been surprising, kept silent, respecting my wish for privacy as well.

"Regardless, Uchiha Miho." I stood straighter as Fugaku-sama addressed me directly, "You have earned the right to wear our clan's symbol. You are now, in the eyes of the Clan, a full-fledged member of the Uchiha Clan."

I bowed deeply, "Arigatou, Fugaku-sama. I will wear the symbol of our clan with honor."

"See that you do, Uchiha Miho." He stated, his posture softening. "And, regardless of how you obtained your Mangekyo, the Clan mourns with you, and for you. You are not the same individual you once were. We honor your courage in pressing forward in the face of such loss." Fugaku paused. "Uchiha Naori!"

"Hai, Fugaku-sama." Mom replied.

"Your request is granted. You are permitted to seek out an Uchiha med-nin to perform the procedure, after the traditional mourning period. May you and your child's light never be lost."

Mom bowed deeply, "Thank you, Fugaku-sama. I will not abuse this trust."

The Clan Head grunted, smiling. "You have not thus far Naori. I doubt your selflessness would allow you to be anything but a splendid kunoichi for the leaf." The clan head paused, then sighed. "It was your daughter and Naka that gave the council pause. It was not too long ago that Naka abused his power and ability with a kinjutsu, requiring you to stop him with a kinjutsu specifically developed for that situation. As a result, two of my best shinobi are now blind in their right and left eye, respectively."

Mom flinched but nodded. "Naka has changed. You know this. The council knows this. I know this."

Fugaku simply nodded. "We shall see. We shall see indeed. I wish you a good night, Uchiha Naori, Uchiha Miho. I shall see you tomorrow for Miho's Birthday."

A few minutes after Fugaku-sama had left, I turned to face my mom. "What was that about mom?"

Mom shook her head. "Not now Miho-chan. I'll tell you when we get home. Your father needs to hear this too." With that, mother turned on her heel, beckoning me to follow. "We're done training for the night. You have a break from training tomorrow, Miho."

I sighed, nodding. "Okay, mom. I'm coming. Give me a second to collect my stuff."



AN: Welcome to Sapere Aude, or, Dare to Know. This story started out as a response to the "Puppetmaster Naruto" snippet written by @CmptrWz in his snippet thread, and evolved into so much more, for the better or worse. The intent behind this story is to explore some of the unexplored segments of Naruto, and play around with some of the tropes I'm familiar with. It is safe to say this World is completely AU. I don't like canon following stories. Canon is a tool, not a path to tread. As such, elements of this world are different from Kishimoto-san's world, while other elements remain similar, or the same. As another major note, I'm ignoring most, if not all of Boruto at the moment. I simply do not want to deal with the stuff revealed in Boruto in my story, not because I dislike the franchise. Finally, I'd like to thank my Patreons: Ttw1, Adrian Tucker, and J Frost. I thank you for your support and hope you enjoy the story.

AN 2: Updates will be weekly for the first three chapters, then will take on a Bi-Weekly schedule.
 
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Your story looks interesting. Hm... A lot of pressure to stop the massacre....
 
So she's the kid of that guy that was abusing Izanagi and that chick who invented the Izanami to stop him. Which means she'll likely learn both. That's neat.
 
I like it, it's a good start. And fair enough for making it an AU, if I wrote something Naruto related I'd probably tag it as au, but for me that's because of my terrible memory, and not a conscious decision. And on the note of the Patreon thanks, you're welcome.
 
Your story looks interesting. Hm... A lot of pressure to stop the massacre....
As far as Miho is aware, yes. There is a lot of pressure on her to stop the massacre. That will be averted temporarily by the AU elements, but I have plans :D
If it will even happen given that this is an AU verse, not the canon one.
Correct. The AU Elements will prevent the canon massacre, though I have, as stated above, "Plans" for the Uchiha.
So she's the kid of that guy that was abusing Izanagi and that chick who invented the Izanami to stop him. Which means she'll likely learn both. That's neat.
Glad someone noticed. Uchiha Naka and Uchiha Naori were two Mangekyo users I found, I really liked their story. So, I married them, and gave them a kid :p
On another note, there is another reason I gave Naka and Naori a child. I'll confirm it roughly... a month from now in the chapter I'm currently working on, when that finally gets posted :D Look forward to it.

(Note that the next chapter is still coming next week)
 
"He is. Uzumaki-san accompanied the Hokage on his trip, by her request, and by the Third's will."

I made a low, keening sound as I comprehended what they were talking about. Oh, fantastic. I was in a different version of Naruto than canon, seeing as the main characters were both female.

This could also mean Kushina is alive.
Just to make your charater go even more crazy wondering about AU elements.
 
1.02: Satsuki
"Otoosan, why do I have to wear a mourning kimono?" Satsuki whined, tugging on her father's own kimono. She didn't want to wear black today, darn it!

Fugaku sighed, "As I explained to you yesterday Satsuki, we are mourning the awakening of a Mangekyo Sharingan. Uchiha Miho evidently awakened hers at birth, due to circumstances that are both a village and clan secret. We are mourning her loss today since she recently decided to voluntarily release the information to us. We've known since her birth, due to a Yamanaka mindwalk, but were unwilling to press the issue."

Satsuki nodded slowly. "Why are we mourning Miho's Mangekyo? Doesn't the Mangekyo make you stronger otousan?"

Fugaku nodded. "It does make an Uchiha stronger. However, to awaken the Mangekyo requires you lose someone close to you. Someone you love with all your heart. The Uchiha and Senju feel emotions fiercely, my daughter. To lose a loved one is not easy for us. Thus, our clan mourns with Miho for her loss, and supports her as she overcomes the loss."

Satsuki made a noise of understanding, before scrambling to put her mourning kimono on. "Sorry otousan, I didn't know."

Fugaku gave his daughter another of his rare smiles. "You asked. And learned. Which is all that matters, my daughter."

Satsuki smiled happily as her papa helped her into her black kimono, taking a moment to look herself over as her mama had taught her before nodding in satisfaction. "Thank you otousan!" She chirped, "I'm gonna go get okaasan's help with my hair now!"

Running out of the room at a decent clip, the little girl made a beeline towards her mother's dressing room. Fugaku smiled from behind her, taking it upon himself to clean up his daughter's room.

"Okaasan! Otousan helped me into my kimono, can you help me with my hair?" Satsuki chirped as she barged into her mother's room, catching Mikoto in the midst of putting her own hair up.

"Hello Satsuki-chan," Mikoto replied, smiling at her daughter, "I'll help you with your hair in a minute dearest. Let me finish up with my own."

Satsuki humned in approval, sitting down near her mother, fidgeting as she waited patiently.

A few minutes later, as promised, Mikoto was brushing her daughter's hair, putting it into a nice braid that had her daughter giggling in delight. She always did like braids, after all.

"Kaasan?" Satsuki asked, "Is aniki going to be there? I haven't seen him in a while."

Mikoto shook her head, "Unfortunately no, Satsuki-chan. He left yesterday to escort his charge and the Hokage to Sunagakure no Sato."

Satsuki pouted briefly, before sighing. "I wish aniki wasn't in ANBU. I could spend more time with him if he wasn't."

Mikoto lightly tapped her daughter's forehead. "Now now, Satsuki-chan, Itachi is doing his best to serve the village, and our clan. You should support him too."

Grabbing her forehead, the young Uchiha grumbled softly, clearly not satisfied with the state of affairs. She didn't object, however, knowing that her mother was somewhat correct.

"Mikoto, we're expected at the Naka Shrine in ten minutes!" Fugaku called from the entrance of the room, "Is Satsuki ready?"

"Yes she is Fugaku, we're coming out now." Mikoto called back, picking up her daughter. "Come now Satsuki, let's go to the site of the gathering.



Satsuki fidgeted as her cousin, Uchiha Miho, was brought to the center of the Shrine, her face set grimly, and her hair done up in an unfamiliar style.

"We gather here today to mourn our kin's loss." Fugaku intoned, standing behind Miho.

Satsuki stopped fidgeting, rigidly sitting in her seiza as she watched her father speak.

"We gather here to celebrate her will to continue, and recognize her as a full member of the Uchiha Clan." Fugaku continued, his voice no longer as grave as it was.

Muttered whispers erupted from around the clan, mutters of approval and disbelief.

"Uchiha Miho performed the coming of age jutsu last night, witnessed by myself and her mother, Uchiha Naori. Her Sharingan is fully matured as well. I hereby welcome her as a full member of the clan."

Satsuki looked wide-eyed at her cousin, who, upon seeing her look, gave her a wink, and mouthed something that Satsuki couldn't decipher.

"Now, let us feast in remembrance of our fallen kin, and celebrate the coming of age of another Uchiha!" Fugaku roared, "A toast to family, a toast to Uchiha Miho!"

"A Toast!" the clan cried in reply, before they too stood up, and began mingling. Briefly, Satsuki noted that Cousin Miho was coming towards her.

"You're Uchiha Satsuki?" Her cousin asked, smiling at her. "I'm Uchiha Miho. It's a pleasure to meet you, Satsuki." She continued, bowing.

Satsuki bowed in return. "It's good to meet you too, Cousin Miho." She paused, "What were you trying to tell me during the ceremony?" She asked curiously.

Miho blushed, before shrugging, "I was just wondering if you wanted to hang out at some point. You're one of the few kids my age in the Uchiha clan, and I don't get along with the rest of them."

Satsuki nodded happily, "I don't get along with them either. They're mean sometimes."

Miho cracked a smile, "They do seem rather full of themselves, yes." Pausing, Miho looked over at what Satsuki assumed to be her parents, "Apologies Satsuki, it appears that my parents are calling me. I'll be at the Uchiha training grounds later today and tomorrow if you'd like to join me."

"Okay! I'll see you there!" Satsuki chirped, her smile lighting up the room. "I'll see you later Miho-san!"

The slightly older girl nodded happily, before making her way towards her parents, the Uchiha fan on the back of her kimono making Satsuki ache with jealousy, before she shook it off. Miho had more than earned it, according to papa, so it was no issue. She forced herself to not continue thinking it, even as she continued to socialize with her peers and kin, talking to the adults politely, and her fellow children with slight hesitation.

A tug on her sleeve had Satsuki looking for the individual who had committed such an act, only to smile widely once more, "Izumi-neechan!" She cried, wrapping her arms around Itachi's best friend, "How are you doing?"

The new genin smiled at her crush's younger sister as she returned her hug. "Hello there Satsuki-chan, I'm doing well. How have you been? Being good for Itachi and your parents?"

"Unn!" Satsuki hummed, nodding her head rapidly, "I made a new friend too! Miho-san seems really nice!"
Izumi's smile turned brittle, "She is, yes. But, Satsuki, be careful around her. The rumors surrounding her aren't nice."

Satsuki cocked her head to the side. "What rumors?"

Izumi looked around, before sighing. "Nothing substantial, and honestly, likely false. She apparently had a Mangekyo at birth, which… disturbed some of the Elders. Only Fugaku-sama, Naori-san and Naka-san know the truth, apparently."

"And I'd like to keep it that way, Izumi-san." Izumi froze as Miho's voice called from behind her, "But I can run over the basics if you'd like?"

Izumi chuckled weakly, "Sure…?"

Miho sighed, "Come join me outside the Shrine." she said simply, patting Satsuki's shoulder on her way out.

"Izumi-nee, we should follow her, right?" Satsuki stated, following her new friend, only to pause when she noticed Izumi wasn't following.

"Go ahead Satsuki. I'm going to stay back here, and attempt to not put my foot in my mouth the rest of the night." Her honorary older sister replied, gulping. Unknown to Satsuki, Uchiha Naori had been giving Izumi a death glare, one that Izumi had no intention of ignoring.



"Katon: Goukakyuu no Jutsu!" Miho called, blowing a stream of fire out of her mouth. Satsuki made an awed sound, as did the rest of the five children surrounding their cousin.

"I thought the Goukakyuu was a fireball…" One of her fellow Uchiha children commented, an awed tone in his voice.

Miho rubbed the back of her head, "It is, but you can change it to a flamethrower by changing how you shape it, and through intent."

"So, you're teaching us the coming of age jutsu, Miho-san?" Another Uchiha asked.

Miho nodded, "Yeah, Satsuki-chan asked me to, and you all somehow heard about it, so I guess I'm holding an impromptu lesson. Are you all familiar with the hand seals?" She asked, receiving a nod from all those involved. "Okay, I want you to run through them, but not shape any fire chakra. Just get a feel for how the hand seals manipulate your chakra.

Satsuki nodded in determination, running through the hand seals slowly, but surely. Miho had said that getting a feel for how the hand seals worked was the most important part, so going slow made sense to the young prodigy. "Miho-nee," Satsuki asked as she ran through the seals a fifth time, "Is it supposed to be coating my insides with chakra?"

Miho nodded in satisfaction. "Yes. That's the chakra that'll shield you from spewing a fireball from your lungs. Anyone else feel the chakra coating their lungs, throat, and mouth?"

Two other Uchiha children nodded, the rest frowning, and running through the seals again. A good five minutes later, everyone had confirmed that, yes, they could feel the coating of chakra around their body.

"Okay, the next step is to change our neutral chakra to fire chakra. The hand seals should do most of the work, but you need to figure out a mental trigger to switch it from neutral to elemental chakra." Miho explained, "Make sure the mental trigger is one you can use on the fly, it really helps if it's short and concise as well."

Satsuki furrowed her brow in concentration, running through the hand signs rapidly, imagining the sound of kunai striking another kunai. Feeling the neutral chakra within her change to elemental chakra, the young girl mentally cheered for herself, before she refocused. "Katon: Goukakyuu no Jutsu!" she yelled, spitting a fireball towards the target dummy on the field.

Clapping immediately followed the fireball, from Cousin Miho, who, Satsuki noted, had her sharingan activated. The other children grumbled, then redoubled their efforts to produce a goukakyuu.

"Well done, Satsuki-chan," Miho stated, smiling. "Just remember to practice." She continued, "I'm going to go correct the ones that are doing it wrong."

With that, her cousin departed, gently correcting her kin on what they were doing wrong. By the end of the session, two more of the Uchiha children had managed to produce the jutsu, and Satsuki had managed to do a continuous flamethrower before almost collapsing from chakra expenditure. All in all, it was time well spent, in her opinion.




AN: Well, I wanted to shift my update schedule a bit, so all of you get an early update. One more chapter till I run out of accumulated backlog, and go to a bi-weekly schedule for some time. And, as always, a special thanks to my Patreons: Tale Swapper, J Frost, Omida, Twt1, and Adrian Tucker.
 
After all, the flame-thrower is just one of many steps needed to become a Dragon!
Remember, Always be Yourself! Unless you can be a Dragon! Then become a Dragon!
 
1.03: Naruko
Hiruzen Sarutobi sighed softly to himself as he watched over his ward, Naruko Uzumaki, as she swung on the swings alone. It was always painful watching over the child he considered his granddaughter, and realizing that she would not be alone during her childhood, such was the hatred that the village he ruled over held towards her.

A hatred that was about to be proven once more. The Sandaime swore as several of his more troublesome citizens swaggered up to Naruko, clearly intent on causing the girl harm. He made no effort to think where the girl's ANBU guard was. The woman had abandoned her post, just as Hiruzen had suspected she would. Blast the woman, at least Dog would intervene.

Dog's intervention was swift and precise. The masked form of Kakashi shimmered into view, lazily eyeing the crowd through his mask, calmly ordering them to disperse.

They did not, much to Dog and Hiruzen's surprise-

Then Hiruzen was running, not having thought one of his own damn ANBU would dare betray his village by attacking his ward. The Old Hokage's killing intent was palpable, so much so that the Village was briefly reminded of the Nine-Tails' fury as he raced towards the playground.

Carnage would meet him there. Dog had slaughtered the ANBU recruit, only just managing to remember to keep the scum alive for interrogation. Hiruzen would be having words with the ANBU recruiter for allowing the woman into the group, but for now, he needed to stabilize his granddaughter.

"Hokage-sama, I've subdued Rat. Your orders?" Dog snarled, having noted that his leader had arrived. The young man was clearly furious, electricity crackling around his right hand almost involuntarily.

"Take her to Ibiki. Find out what her motives were." Hiruzen barked, his palms glowing with the mystic palm technique as he attempted to stabilize his ward. "I want nothing held back. As of now, Rat is a traitor to the Leaf."

"Understood," Dog grunted, hefting the unconscious kunoichi on his shoulder, and springing to the rooftops. Returning his focus to Naruko, the Hokage sighed in relief as the Nine-Tails' chakra began to heal her, the beast not willing to die quite yet. Good. The more it helped Naruko, the less he had to do to stabilize her.

This incident would be the last time Hiruzen trusted a single person outside of Dog, Jiraiya, and a few other ANBU with his granddaughter's safety.



"Jii-chan, you're taking me with you to Suna?" Naruko chirped from her place at Hiruzen's side, walking with him towards one of the few places Hiruzen trusted to feed his granddaughter. Ichiruka's might not have been the healthiest place to eat a few years ago, but the Ramen Bar had evolved into so much more when the Sarutobi Clan had begun investing into it, something the Old Hokage owed his brother greatly for. Nevermind the fact that various other clans had gotten involved, including the Hyuuga and Uchiha, not wanting to be outdone in preserving the legacy of the Uzumaki and Fourth. The business had thrived since then, catering mostly to the Shinobi and the civilians that were capable of giving Naruko a fair shake.

"Yes Naruko, I still do not trust most of the guard with you, and I did promise I would take you with me whenever I was required to leave the village," Hiruzen replied, looking fondly at his charge. "We'll be meeting a friend of mine on the way there."

Naruko perked up even more, "Who Jii-Chan? Do I know him?"

"You do not, Naruko. However, he was a friend of your parents." Hiruzen replied, smiling. "He's sticking along because he hasn't had an opportunity to see you, due to his duties to the village."

Naruko's brilliant smile immediately made the old man perk up, such was its sincerity and intensity. "Okay! Looking forward to meeting him Jii-chan!"

How she can remain so innocent is a mystery to us all. Regardless, that, and smiles like hers, are why I protect this village. Hiruzen mused, patting his ward's head. "Now Naruko, we do have to go over some ground rules for this trip." He continued sternly, "You must remain with me, Jiraiya- Your parent's friend, or one of my ANBU guards for the duration of the trip. Do you understand me?"

The five-year-old nodded solemnly. "Yes, Jii-Sama. I'll stay with you."

Hiruzen nodded firmly. "Good. I expect you to keep your word, Naruko." With his piece said, the older man continued to walk in silence, continuing down the beaten road towards Ichiruka's.

After a few moments, the young child spoke up again, asking a question that had been burning at her since the incident a week ago. "Jii-Chan, why do they hate me? What did I do to deserve it?"

Hiruzen winced. This- This was not a question he was prepared to truly answer, both because it was a state secret- No, while that was true, Naruko had proven in the past the ability to keep secrets. Regardless, he could not tell her right now. Danzo would get on his case, and with his old teammate's political pull, that could cause… issues.

"That's a state secret Naruko, one that I cannot share with you at this current moment."

"Why?" His ward replied, frowning. "Shouldn't I know why they hate me?"

Hiruzen sighed. "Yes, you should. But the law is the law, for now, at least. However, I promise that I will tell you at some point. I just cannot blurt such a secret out in the middle of the street, Naruko."

The five-year-old seemed to brighten at that and nodded. "Mkay! So you can tell me during our trip!" Groaning internally, Hiruzen did not comment, simply entering the Ichiruka's restaurant, the pair had arrived as they chatted.

"Hokage-sama, Naruko-chan, how are you today?" The head waitress, Ayame Ichiruka greeted, waving over a host, "Hanamura-kun, if you could seat them in the VIP section?"

"Ohayou Ayeme-nee." Naruko greeted, waving at one of her older sister figures, "gambare!"

Ayame briefly stopped to ruffle Naruko's hair, before heading back to work, barking orders at her gaggle of waitresses and waiters, intent on getting everything she needed to get done, done.

"If you'll follow me, Sandaime-sama, Naruko-chan. I'll take you to your reserved table." The host greeted, a smile on his face. He was young, under sixteen for sure. "Would you like the normal menu or the adult menu, Uzumaki-chan?" He asked as he collected menus from his podium.

Naruko pondered that for all of three seconds before answering, "Adult menu, please. Not enough ramen otherwise."

The host nodded. "Indeed. I've heard quite many tales of your prowess in consuming our ramen Uzumaki-chan. I'll get you the adult's menu."

"Thank you, young man." Hiruzen added, "Naruko will appreciate it."

The young teen shook his head. "Just doing my job, Sandaime-sama." Quieter, he muttered, "And to think that my parents believe this young child is a demon. Pah, I can't wait to move out."

Hiruzen made no comment, though his heart warmed at the teen's comment. Those who supported Naruko may be few, but their numbers grew every day, the earnest girl's personality and natural charisma drawing people to her side without effort.

No more chatter was exchanged as they were led to their table on the second floor, seated on the balcony overlooking the street.

"Do you require anything else, Sandaime-sama, Naruko-chan?" The teenage host asked.

"No thank you, Hanamura-kun. Here." Hiruzen stated, passing the boy a decent tip, "For being the very picture of professionalism."

Startled, the teen nodded, accepting the tip, and placing it in his apron. "Thank you for your kindness, Sandaime-sama. Now, if you'll excuse me, someone will be with you as soon as they're free."

Hiruzen nodded, spending the next few minutes entertaining Naruko, which, to those unaware, was a surprisingly easy task. Naruko, even at her young age, desired to be a ninja, and thus, Hirzuen's stories were generally enough to keep her silent and sitting in one place, a look of wonder on her face as Hiruzen recounted his genin days.

Almost five minutes later, Ayame walked up to the table, smiling at her two favorite customers. "Hello Sandaime-sama, Naruko-chan. What can I get you today?"

"The Uzumaki Special Ayame-nee!" Naruko chirped, smiling up at one of her favorite people.

"Remember to say please Naruko." Hiruzen scolded lightly, nodding in satisfaction as his ward corrected herself. "Tell Teuchi-kun to surprise me Ayame-chan, if you'd please."

"Understood. Your standard drinks, I presume?" She said, jotting down notes.

"Hai. Thank you Ayame-chan." Hiruzen replied.

"I'll be back with those momentarily then," Ayame stated, heading back towards the kitchens.

Naruko fidgeted for a while, once more being calmed by stories of his more active youth, until their drinks came, the young girl drinking the ramune that Ayame had brought her slowly, savoring the taste.

The pair continued to chat, simply spending time with each other until their order was delivered, both parties digging into the food with gusto. Teuchi was a fantastic chef, after all.

Finally, their bellies full, and Hiruzen's funds only ever so slightly depleted, the two headed out of the restaurant, waving goodbye Ayame. On their way out, the host from earlier, Hanamura, came up to them, bowing.

"Sandaime-sama, Uzumaki-chan. Thank you again. Have a good day."

"You're most welcome Hanamura-kun. Enjoy your day as well." Hiruzen replied.



"Jii-Chan," Naruko asked from her place on his shoulders, "Is this the place we're meeting my parent's friend?"

Their trip to Suna had started a day ago, the Hokage and his three guards departing the village at dawn with little fanfare.

Hiruzen nodded. "Yes, this is the place. Jiraiya should be here shortly."' He replied, signaling the ANBU to come to a halt. "We'll set up camp here for lunch, then break camp. We should be halfway to the border by sundown, then we'll set up camp for the night.

"Sir." The ANBU guards replied, moving to rapidly set up a temporary camp, one that excluded tents, simply having a small shaded area, and a firepit. Sealing scrolls helped the ANBU here a lot, allowing them to quickly set everything up.

"What are those scrolls Jii-Chan?" Naruko asked curiously, eyeing the storage scrolls with a hunger that rivaled the way she eyed ramen.

"Those, chibi, are scrolled inscribed with a storage seal." Another voice replied boisterously. "Hello there chibi. I'm Jiraiya, the friend of your parents that Sensei mentioned."

Naruko looked up wide-eyed at the rather tall ninja with a mane of white hair, seemingly quite impressed with him. "Hello, Jiraiya-san! I'm Naruko Uzumaki 'ttebane!" she chirped, smiling up at Jiraiya.

"Jiraiya-kun, what have I told you about sneaking up on me?" Hiruzen scolded lightly, discreetly putting away the kunai he had pulled out. "And yes, Naruko. Those are storage seals."

"What ninja art makes them?" Naruko asked, "I wanna be able to make them!"

Hiruzen and Jiraiya looked at each other briefly, then nodded. "Fuuinjutsu, Naruko. An underappreciated ninja art that deals with the sealing arts."

"Can I learn them Jii-Chan?" The girl chirped excitedly, "They seem cool!"

Once more, the two men shared a look, before Jiraiya nodded. "I'll teach you chibi, but you need to pay careful attention, and we're going to have to work on your calligraphy first-"

"No need on the calligraphy front Jiraiya-kun, I taught her that myself," Hiruzen stated, acknowledging that man's thankful nod a moment later. No way in hell was Naruko going to grow up without at least some preferential treatment, being a main branch Uzumaki. Hell, she was the heir, should any surviving members be found. Clan life wasn't doable, but Hiruzen could give her small things like this.

"Right, chibi, show me." Jiraiya said, "Use this paper and calligraphy kit." He continued, unsealing a basic set of brushes, inks, and paper. Naruko nodded, her eyebrows screwed up in concentration as she painted her name onto the paper, making little to no errors that Jiraiya could discern. She was more than competent at calligraphy, it seemed.

"How is this Jiraiya-san?" The child asked, looking rather pleased with herself.

"Good chibi, good. Your handwriting is better than most apprentices." Jiraiya praised honestly, smiling at the Uzumaki heir, whether she knew it or not. "Come over here, I'll start teaching you how to make a Type One storage seal."

"Do not get too into the lesson Jiraiya-kun." Hiruzen stated, "We will be breaking up camp after lunch."

Jiraiya gave a nod of confirmation, sequestering the young Uzumaki away under the pavilion, claiming a portion of the table for himself. The sound of giggles and minor explosions could be heard while Hiruzen sorted through the sealed lunch, selecting something that he hoped Naruko would appreciate.

A good ten minutes later, Hiruzen was finished heating the food, and, once satisfied, called out to his student and ward.

"We're eating now Jiraiya, Naruko. Please clear the sealing from the table." The Third called almost ten minutes later. The two complied, Jiraiya expertly stowing his supplies, and handing Naruko the beginner's sealing kit she had been using.

"Keep it chibi. You'll get more use out of a beginner kit than I will." He said, patting the little girl on her head. "Your parents would want you to have it, anyway."

Hiruzen sent Jiraiya a look, scolding him silently for mentioning Naruko's parents, if only in passing. There was a reason her lineage was a state secret, after all. Jiraya shook his head, signaling Hiruzen in Konoha Field Sign Language. 'I'm not going to tell her who they are, but I reserve the right to if I believe she can stay silent.'

Hiruzen groaned internally, though he signaled an affirmative in response. It was Jiraiya's right to tell Naruko, Minato and Kushina had ensured it. He wasn't about to overturn the Fourth's law regarding godparents, regardless, since it was intended to be broader than Naruko anyway.

"What's for lunch today Jii-Chan?" Naruko asked, oblivious to the silent conversation. She was sitting not quite patiently at the table, occasionally fidgeting with the scroll that Jiraiya had given her, strapped across her back.

"Udon, Naruko. One with fried tofu." Hiruzen replied, "Teuchi-kun prepared it for us, so please make sure you enjoy it, not wolf it down."

"Hai." The Uzumaki heiress intoned in response, accepting the bowl of noodles and broth happily, "Itadakimasu!"

The rest of the group, including the ANBU, echoed Naruko, digging into their food steadily. The meal was mostly silent, Naruko occasionally asking Jiraiya a question, and receiving an answer, mostly about fuuinjutsu.

Less than twenty minutes later, the shinobi were back on the road, heading towards Suna at a steady clip, though not ninja-running. They were, after all, in no particular hurry. For now, at least.



"You want me to examine her seal, sensei?" Jiraiya queried, carrying the sleeping form of his goddaughter. "I'm almost certain it'll be solidly tight, but I'm happy to study it if you'd like. Minato certainly went all out with it, and more time to study it would let me understand it more."

"Yes, I would like you to check it. I'm not being paranoid, but I simply wish to reassure my advisors that the seal is tight. Having it checked by a Sealmaster seems to be the only way these days."

"Danzo being a pain in the ass again?" Jiraiya inquired, lifting his goddaughter's shirt just enough to see her stomach, then placing his hand against it. "I keep telling you to kick him off the council, but you never seem to listen."

Hiruzen sighed as his student got to work, watching with great interest as Jiraiya manipulated the seal with the skill of a master, checking each aspect of it for integrity, stability, and various other factors. Sealing arts were extremely complex, and no two individuals used the same language, not entirely. Jiraiya entirely deserved his title of a Grandsealmaster, awarded to him by Uzumaki Mito before she died. And Jiraiya's skill in the art had only grown over the years. In truth, he was only surpassed by the Uzukage, and Minato Namikaze. Kushina herself was also arguably better than Jiraiya at seals, but that was an entirely debatable subject.

Jiraiya's growl of anger brought Hiruzen out of his musings. "Which bastard placed seals on my goddaughter Sensei. I sincerely hope you had nothing to do with this, or there will be a reckoning."

Hiruzen froze, only for fury to ignite within him moments later. "Where."

Jiraiya pointed out a sealing matrix. "Here, and here. And- Shit. She's got seals across her whole torso. Which sick fuck put these on her?!"

Hiruzen snarled, his fists clenched. "Jiraiya, what does the seal do, and who are my primary suspects."

Jiraiya snapped to attention, "Some are nasty, but some are general. One's a tracking seal, one that's more subtle than most. Another one is one that I haven't seen before but seems to be the source of some of the unreasonable anger we've seen towards her. I can't exactly decipher what it does, but it seems to encourage negative emotions around the sealed individual. Damn, it's subtle too. If I had to guess, it'd be something to do with memories that the sealed individual evokes. It's casting a mild, continuous genjutsu on her."

"Jiraiya, I need you to do a full examination. I'm going to keep Naruko unconscious, she doesn't need to be awake for this yet."

Jiraiya grunted, nodding in agreement. The pair worked fast, stripping the young girl and carefully checking the rest of her body for seals, finding several more. One that inhibited her chakra control, one that made her more impulsive, a poor attempt at a mind slave seal, one that's clearly a dud, but made both men cry out in fury when they recognized it, and a few seals of Uzumaki origins, likely ones that Kushina had placed on her daughter before she died. Those they ignored, knowing the Uzumaki Clan usually did put beneficial seals on their children, as well as ones to protect them.

An hour later, every sealing matrix was copied onto a scroll, and they carefully redressed the young child.

"Jiraiya, likely culprits?" Hiruzen ordered, "ANBU, you may return to your previous posts. I will inform you of this as necessary."

"Hai, Hokage-sama." The masked individuals responded, disappearing into the night to resume their posts.
"Someone that had access to Naruko, and presence wouldn't cause any confusion amongst the orphanage or… someone did indeed take her captive when she was kicked out of the orphanage and put these seals on her. Do you know who my immediate thought is Sensei? Danzo. He's one of the few people in the village with the skill to place these seals, and the only one with the means to truly pull it off, outside of you."

Hiruzen's brow furrowed, then he sighed. "You may be correct. I'll have to investigate this closely. Damnation, I do not need to deal with this while the Uchiha Clan plots to increase their status in the village, if not outright revolt."

"They're not satisfied with the concessions you proposed?" Jiraiya replied, looking confused, "They were some pretty hefty concessions too."

Hiruzen shook his head. "The Council refused to release the funds. They managed to convince the Daimyo, so there was nothing I could do. I'm back to square one with the Uchiha."

Jiraiya looked thunderous. "Sensei, you need to remind them that Konoha-"

Hiruzen held his hand up. "Jiraiya, I know. However, Uchiha Fugaku and I are in talks for an alternative concession. It should work relatively well, though… Danzo will likely be firmly against it." Hiruzen looked around subtly, before sighing. "Regardless, now that we've removed all the malicious seals on Naruko, your report on the Kyuubi's seal?"

Jiraiya made a noise of annoyance, before he sighed, "It's fine. Absolutely zero danger from it to the village or Naruko. Minato's work still stands strong."

Hiruzen sighed in relief. "Good, then we can rest for the night. Go to sleep Jiraiya. We'll speak more of this when we return to the Leaf."

Jiraiya nodded. "I'll have to leave after a day or two since I can't leave the network unattended for too long."

"That is more than enough time."



"Jii-chan, Suna's walls are very pretty." Naruko said tiredly, "M'thristy again Jiraiya-san." She continued, yawning. Jiraiya barked out a laugh, reaching for his waterskin and putting it up to the little lady's lips.

"Drink chibi. You don't want to get dehydrated in the desert, even if we have reached Sunagakure no Sato."

Naruko, too busy gulping down water from her godfather's waterskin did not comment, simply drinking greedily.

Hiruzen sighed, "ANBU, show yourselves. We don't want there to be any misunderstandings between us and Suna."

The ANBU complied, dropping their concealment jutsu without fanfare, dropping into the sight of Suna's gate guards, who, upon confirming via a chakra pulse that they were all that were present, waved them into the village, "Welcome to Sunagakure no Sato, Hokage-dono. Rasa-sama is awaiting your party at the agreed-upon location. One of your ninjas will be along to guide your guests to the guest estate your party will be staying at."

Hiruzen nodded in thanks. "Thank you for your hospitality. I apologize for bringing Naruko-chan here with us, she requested to be present."

The Suna nin shrugged, "Rasa-sama already approved it. She will be under tighter guard than your other guest, for obvious reasons."

Hiruzen nodded, "I appreciate the Kazekage's adaptability in this."

The ninja nodded. "We appreciate you coming this entire way to sign the renewed treaty, Hokage-dono. Apologies, but I must resume my duties now. Have a productive time in Sunagakure-no-Sato."

Hiruzen nodded once more and walked through the gate, making haste towards the Kazekage's mansion.

"So, chibi, what do you want to see in Suna first?" Jiraiya asked, the ANBU having disappeared along with the Hokage. Naruko yawned, stretching. "Got it, we're going to check in at the hotel, first."

With his sleepy goddaughter in tow, Jiraiya navigated his way through Sunagakure-no-Sato with practiced ease. Which, of course, was why he was utterly surprised when two of Suna's own special forces appeared in a shunshin in front of him.

"Jiraiya-san, we must ask that you take another path. We are currently suppressing our jinchuuriki, who has gone out of control, again." The obvious leader asked, "Please-"

Of course, by this point, Jiraiya had noticed the sound of combat within the village, and, of course, had already disappeared, leaving the two Sunagakure spec ops sighing in defeat.

Meanwhile, Jiraiya calmly ran towards the seemingly out-of-control jinchuuriki, Naruko on his shoulder. She would be safest there, for now, at least. Less than ten seconds later, the Toad Sage had found his target, and, upon seeing the sand, frowned.

"Jiraiya-san," Naruko stated from his shoulder dizzily, "Don't go so fast…"

Jiraiya huffed, "Sorry chibi, I have to suppress the one tails temporarily." Taking the girl off his shoulder, he placed her on the ground, setting up a solid barrier around her. "Stay here Naruko. I'll be back shortly."

Naruko looked in fascination at the shimmering barrier of pure chakra surrounding her, "Okay Jiraiya-san! Oh… He's already gone."

A solid five minutes later, Jiraiya returned, prompting an excited outburst from the small girl, until she saw the unconscious redhead in his arms and Jiraiya's thunderous look.

"What's wrong Jiraiya-san?" Naruko asked quietly, making herself as small as possible.

Jiraiya's gaze softened before he sighed. "I'm not angry at you, chibi. Come on. We're going to go see the Kazekage.




AN: Right, so there is a bunch of fanon stuff in here, such as the villagers actively trying to kill Naruko, but it's all there for a reason, not because I want to bash Konoha. All will be explained eventually, but for now, I ask you to be patient. On that note, as of now, we're moving to a bi-weekly update schedule till I have backlog again, at which point I'll move to a weekly. I'll let you know when that happens, and I apologize in advance for the wait.

AN 2: As always, thank you to my wonderful Patreons: Tale Swapper, J Frost, Omida, Twt1, and Adrian Tucker
 
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Jiraiya snapped to attention, "Some are nasty, but some are general. One's a tracking seal, one that's more subtle than most. Another one is one that I haven't seen before but seems to be the source of some of the unreasonable anger we've seen towards her. I can't exactly decipher what it does, but it seems to encourage negative emotions around the sealed individual. Damn, it's subtle too. If I had to guess, it'd be something to do with memories that the sealed individual evokes. It's casting a mild, continuous genjutsu on her."
... you know, unless it's a more common trope than I thought I think this is the first time (that I've read) someone has actually explained the hate beyond "oh the idiots can't see the container is not the prisoner". I think I've heard of Danzo messing with the rumor machine to give Naru a worse reputation than they should have but an actual seal? That's new to me. Hell, negative emotion strengthening like that would ruin any guardian adopting her simply because even if they didn't hate they'd feel sadness at minimum being around her, and this world (in canon) doesn't have the best track record with healthy emotional expression.
 
Right, I had a bunch of quotes but that was on mobile and I'm not going to wait till I'm back home, I have to raise a point that stuck with me: gratuitous japanese, like here:
"Ohayou Ayeme-nee." Naruko greeted, waving at one of her older sister figures, "gambare!"
Especially since the next paragraph you have an anglicization of Sandaime-sama which I haven't seen much and it grates
...Oh, yeah, names in Japanesse can be both male and female and since naruto is made up you could have left it as is (I don't like Naruko due to... let's say trauma ;))

Otherwise, good job, characters all behave as they should (accounting for AU-ness) and it's the most important thing after grammar, which is good too.
 
Right, I had a bunch of quotes but that was on mobile and I'm not going to wait till I'm back home, I have to raise a point that stuck with me: gratuitous japanese, like here:

Especially since the next paragraph you have an anglicization of Sandaime-sama which I haven't seen much and it grates

...Oh, yeah, names in Japanesse can be both male and female and since naruto is made up you could have left it as is (I don't like Naruko due to... let's say trauma ;))

Otherwise, good job, characters all behave as they should (accounting for AU-ness) and it's the most important thing after grammar, which is good too.
I've been meaning to go back through and and fix the angelicazations. I can totally Japanify them, I just need to comb through and fix the lack of honorifics over angelicazations.
 
Hmm. Truth be told, there are some fanon plot elements I dislike, but this isn't the first fic I've read of yours, so I'm willing to give you benefit of doubt there. That said, however, I really really dislike the intermixing of English and Japanese. It's not you personally, I've always hated it for things like this. There's no real reason for it since all the words you've used have clear English translations. I'd consider it fine for things like 'nakama' in which the official English translation doesn't quite catch it, but it's seems to be sprinkled about haphazardly, with no indication that in-universe there's multiple languages. Anyway, I've said my piece, I just think there shouldn't be multiple languages in a single story unless there's actual plot reason for it, like bilingual characters.
 
Ichiraku's

since it's Japanesse culture, Sarutobi shouldn't tip unless he thinks the waiter is not paid enough and it's rather rude.
I missed that, thank you for catching it. I'll get it in an editing pass!
Hmm. Truth be told, there are some fanon plot elements I dislike, but this isn't the first fic I've read of yours, so I'm willing to give you benefit of doubt there. That said, however, I really really dislike the intermixing of English and Japanese. It's not you personally, I've always hated it for things like this. There's no real reason for it since all the words you've used have clear English translations. I'd consider it fine for things like 'nakama' in which the official English translation doesn't quite catch it, but it's seems to be sprinkled about haphazardly, with no indication that in-universe there's multiple languages. Anyway, I've said my piece, I just think there shouldn't be multiple languages in a single story unless there's actual plot reason for it, like bilingual characters.
I tend to like using at the very least honorifics, and I get my habit of sprinkling in Japanese Words from back when I spoke fluent Japanese.

Edit: As for fanon, I tend to hate a lot of it too, but would you mind specifying the specific bits you hate? I can probably put some of those worries to rest, if needed.
 
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I tend to like using at the very least honorifics, and I get my habit of sprinkling in Japanese Words from back when I spoke fluent Japanese.

Edit: As for fanon, I tend to hate a lot of it too, but would you mind specifying the specific bits you hate? I can probably put some of those worries to rest, if needed.
Honorifics I consider under the umbrella of 'Japanese that doesn't cleanly translate' so that doesn't bother me. It's more things like using otousan or kaasan instead of dad and mom, respectively, especially when it's referred to later in the descriptive part of the same sentence as father or mother.

As for fanon, it's mostly the stuff with Naruto, or rather Naruko. As I said, I trust your skill as an author enough to have it not be pointless bashing, but I'm not a fan of the 'adding extra abuse to the og story's protagonist's childhood' thing. It comes up the most with Naruto and Harry Potter fics and I've just never really liked it. It's not a deal breaker in terms of readership, but it does leave a bit of a sour taste.
 
Honorifics I consider under the umbrella of 'Japanese that doesn't cleanly translate' so that doesn't bother me. It's more things like using otousan or kaasan instead of dad and mom, respectively, especially when it's referred to later in the descriptive part of the same sentence as father or mother.

As for fanon, it's mostly the stuff with Naruto, or rather Naruko. As I said, I trust your skill as an author enough to have it not be pointless bashing, but I'm not a fan of the 'adding extra abuse to the og story's protagonist's childhood' thing. It comes up the most with Naruto and Harry Potter fics and I've just never really liked it. It's not a deal breaker in terms of readership, but it does leave a bit of a sour taste.
I'll do my best to reduce the egregious use of Japanese in that case. Thank you for pointing it out! As for the extra abuse, that's all there is to it. I can confirm that Naruko's life will only get better from here. I hate the pointless bashing too, so I understand your viewpoint.
 
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