Vote Tally. No Ten Minute Warning yet, however.
Vote Tally : Renascence: A Homura Quest | Page 267 | Sufficient Velocity
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[x] Tone
- [x]Polite
[x] "Of course. I'm glad you could join us."
[x] Stand up and pull out a chair for Nanoha.
[x] Apologize for our over-reaction last night, and explain that it's one of the hazards of expending too much magic too quickly.
[x] Introduce her to Mami, and explain that this — and the theater — are actually in her territory, and that she's the most skilled Magus we're aware of.
[x] However, we're here for dinner. I haven't had anything proper to eat since breakfast, and it would be nice to have something to eat while we're talking.
-[x] Order anything you like; I'm paying.
-[x] Kyouko, a cheesecake is not a proper meal.
-[x] Order extra biscuits. Make sure Kyouko can't steal them.
[x] Once food is ordered (with a pause when food arrives), and we can start talking...
-[x] First, a few introductions. Tomoe-san, Kyouko and I are Puella Magi — magical girls of a very specific sort.
-[x] Nanoha-san is... Nanoha, as far as I can tell. How she managed to end up in our world, I don't know, but she seems like the real deal.
-[x] And Sayaka is... well, do you want to tell them yourself?
-[x] Give a summary of the events last night to Mami: A conglomerate "witch"; Kyouko destroying the barrier; Nanoha destroying the angel; Sayaka killing the witch.
-[x] And the confrontation over the confusion about the nature of witches and grief seeds and such. Which is what Nanoha here is hoping to learn more about.
-[x] Provide the "official" version of propaganda for Puella Magi.
-[x] Details the basic consequences of living as a Puella Magi: The duty and need to hunt witches, grief seeds, and similar matters.
-[x] Explain that grief seeds are
not Lost Logia. Logia are the artifacts of an ancient civilization. Grief seeds only come into existence with the defeat of a witch; they simply do not exist before the witch is created, nor are they the product of some actual Lost Logia.
-[x] However,
even if they were Lost Logia, it's still foolhardy to simply take them without consideration of the consequences of your own actions. Consider a man with a weak heart, who's only able to survive because of a Logia he possessed. Taking it away from him merely means that he's now going to die.
-[x] For Puella Magi, these [grief seed] are what we need to "not die".
--[x] Demonstrate the use of a grief seed on your own soul gem.
--[x] If Kyouko overreacts, direct her (via telepathy) to ask Sayaka about it later, but assure her that it had nothing to do with SAO.
[x] Focus on the meal for a while, to get past the awkwardness of the conversation.
[x] In any case, what's more important right now, for us, is the future. In addition to what I mentioned to Tomoe-san, there are implications of Nanoha herself being here, as well as the angel-witch. In fact, there are a number of things I've come across recently that make me uncomfortable — things that
shouldn't be here.
[x] This isn't Nanoha's universe.
-[x] Ah, speaking of which, you are holding up OK, right? You mentioned you hadn't been able to contact your friends.
[x] Discuss some of the anomalies that have been encountered, and suspicions that a wish may have changed the past.
[x] However, even aside from that, there's still the issue of Walpurgisnacht. It's not a witch we can just ignore or dismiss, or even run from. <the last to Nanoha, specifically>
[x] It is possible to defeat it. The trick is figuring out how to do so without losing something you're not willing to sacrifice.
[x] I'm working on figuring out exactly how to go about that.
[x] Try to switch to more light-hearted topics when we can get to dessert. We can always talk about more the next time we get together.
No. of Votes: 2
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Random Tale
[X] Tone
- [X]Polite
[X] Tell her ...
- [X] Apologize for our over-reaction last night, and explain that it's one of the hazards of expending too much magic too quickly.
- [X] Introduce her to Mami, and explain that this - and the theater - are actually in her territory, and that she's the most skilled Magus we're aware of.
- [X] If she has any questions about Witches, answer them as safely as we can.
- [X] Explain Puella Magi to her, and the two main varieties (nice ones like Mami, ones who are ... less nice like ourself and Kyouko).
- [X] *After Dinner*
If she's calm, Walpurgisnacht.
[X] Don't tell her ...
- [X] Too much about ourselves and our motivations; Magi often have secrets they don't like telling anyone.
[X] Ask her ...
- [X] How she got here.
- [X] If she needs help with anything / How she's holding up.
No. of Votes: 1
Entropy Judge
Total No. of Voters: 3
You'll presently be following the plan in
Green.
I will attempt to use whichever plan is put forward...but I would like to remind you of two things and teach you a third.:
1) Wordsmithing's value is greatly diminished if you write in precise dialogue...if what you write is superior to the results Wordsmithing would give, that's great, but you'll suffer the consequences if you don't work hard on the dialogue you do write in. This is not a statement as to the quality of either of the above plans (or their proposed explanations), only a reminder that doing so is taking a risk.
2) Remember, detailed actions limit Homura's ability to react in real time to changes in context, while general actions might miss out on certain important details you wish to include. Finding a balance of the two is important to constructing good plans.
3) The below structure might be a good option when creating complex or lengthy votes.
[] Set Parameters (Tone, Battle Attitude, Activate Abilities and Traits, etcetera.) Ex: (Tone = Polite. Activate Akemi Madness. Speak in English when addressing Mami.)
[Note: Some of these have primacy...Akemi Madness overrides any Tone that conflicts with it, or else twists it into something appropriate. A general rule is that Abilities > Traits > Normal Instructions, when they conflict.]
[] Set Objective (What are you trying to accomplish this update?) Ex: Explain things to Nanoha while maintaining her goodwill.
[Note: Homura will take this into consideration when performing General Actions. Detailed Actions will override her intuition (unless she forces an Ego roll), as I will assume that you know what you're doing if you're being that specific.]
-[] General Action (A phase of your plan for achieving your Objective.) Ex: Create a casual atmosphere to engender empathy. Make her view your group as people, not just problems to be solved.
[Note: You should always have General Action at this tier, with Detailed Subactions subordinate to it if need be. This way, Homura knows what to do if you veer off your expected course.]
--[] General/Detailed subaction. (Ex: Scold Kyouko for stealing your biscuits./"Don't steal my biscuits, Kyouko!")
[Note: Detailed Subactions can override Parameters, Interfere with Skills, and make Homura ignore her intuition. This can be good when Homura doesn't know what she's doing. General Subactions offer guidance and place faith in Homura to work out the details.]
---[] General/Detailed 2nd Tier Subaction. (Ex: Use dog training commands./"Bad Kyouko! My Biscuit!"
[If you've got a Detailed Subaction, you probably don't need this section at all, as it will already be handled by its predecessor. If you have a General Subaction, this can help refine Homura's methods, although it does still limit her agency somewhat.)
--[] General Contingency (If X happens, take Action Y. Ex: If Kyouko steals your biscuits, Time Stop and take the back.)
[There's no reason to
not include Contingencies, but they're especially important if you want to do something contrary to common sense/Homura's instincts. Running from a Witch upon sight, for example, rather than trying to kill it, would require a written Contingency in most situations.
---[] General/Detailed Subaction of Contingency. (Ex: Don't let anyone spot you transforming./Use a flashbang to blind everyone, in order to conceal your transformation.)
[Note: The same deal as a Subaction, applied to a Contingency.]
You don't have to use the above structure...but it will probably make it easier to keep things coherent. Also, the explanation should also give you some insight into how I decide what happens with your votes.
