I'm well aware that I'm a noob author, so I don't proclaim the story to be any good. As such I would appreciate your comments, critiques, reviews, flames, etc. All feedback is welcome. That said, without further ado I present to you the prologue of Ouroboros.
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We gathered at Helios Square, the most powerful metas humanity had to offer. I looked at the lower right corner of my field of vision to check the time: 11:59:28.098418754. I breathed out, a little over 30 seconds left. This was it, millennia of preparation about to bear fruit. Serenity approached from behind and I felt my nerves loosening and my heart rate slowing the closer she got. She hugged me and I felt absolutely tranquil even as some errant thoughts tried to distract me. Some might consider such thoughts rude, especially considering she was an empath and would be well aware of them, but because she was an empath and a very beautiful woman, she should be used to dealing with such things. Emperor stood to my right and King to my left. I took another breath, I was ready. Everything was in place, failure was not an option. I looked upon the eponymous Tower; the 10km tall monstrosity pierced the heavens standing as a testament to humanity's might. That same defiance was replicated among those gathered here today. We all knew our part, we all knew what must be done, and judging by the emotions filtering across the empathic link Serenity had set up, we all had the necessary resolve.
Thank you everyone, that defiance, that determination, your resolve. I swear by Katherine it shall not be in vain.
I checked the time again, 11:59:55.186923513. The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror, alighting upon Helios Tower. It spread out its wings – all six pairs of them – and roared. It was a terrible thing, a million cats clawing on a million chalkboards and the shrieking of a thousand banshees. And that was with the state of the art protective gear I had on, I could only imagine how painful it would have been for the normals who would have been ill prepared. I felt a wave of fear wash over me through the empathic link even as Serenity worked to counter it. I radiated absolute confidence and defiance as I let a grin creep across my face. The darkness was pierced by a ray, nay a beam of light as Sovereign descended in all his glory. The fear gave away to hope and then to confidence. Heh, we'd timed this perfectly. Of everyone on the planet and of all the countless worlds he'd visited, the thought that Sovereign could lose was absolutely unthinkable. I smiled, I had no intention of letting that legend end.
King blinked and we were on an endless barren field. King, myself, Emperor, Serenity and Spectre, and of course the two stars of the show. Everyone else would be a hindrance, they were there more for moral support and to present a united front than for any real hope in combat. Sovereign could take on all the armies of the multiverse and emerge victorious – and he had in a timeline that was – even the five of us that had come had no hope of actually tangling with the dragon. Our skills were ideal to support Sovereign and thus here we were. As the two monsters got busy in the skies above us, I lay down to rest. Something like distance, or even the physical laws were concepts that applied to Sovereign only when he wished it; I couldn't follow their battle even if I so desired. No, that was Emperor's role.
"Bahamut".
I looked up at Emperor.
"Come again?"
"Bahamut, the Dragon of the End. That's who we're facing."
"Well that's not ominous at all. How do we beat him?"
Emperor flinched and began hyperventilating. Serenity's tranquility field intensified, and he calmed down. I jerked and hurriedly rose to my feet. In all the time I'd known him – several centuries at the least – he'd never radiated anything other than cool unassailable confidence. To see him so visibly shaken…
"That, I cannot currently see a path to victory".
"Huh? We're talking about Sovereign here, avatar of Combat, very personification of conflict, the High Lord of Escalation himself! You told me yourself 'Sovereign absolutely cannot be defeated'."
"Bahamut is the myth to end all myths".
I felt like saying something, denying Emperor's proclamation, but I knew it was pointless. If Emperor's Absolute Comprehension said that there was no way to defeat Bahamut, then it was pretty much settled. Sovereign would lose this. A part of me had hoped that it wouldn't be like this, that Emperor would see the perfect plan to let Sovereign prevail, but of course it couldn't be that simple. Escaping my prison just couldn't be that easy. Aah, this was going to be a very long day.
Hours passed as the battle continued. Sovereign crashed into the ground. I waited to see if Sovereign was going to rise, but Emperor shook his head. Spectre rushed over to us, grabbing Emperor's arm and mine, and the last few hours of Emperor's memories rushed into me. I looked up at the Dragon to broadcast as much defiance as I could. I checked the time: 16:23:34.568157842.
You were the myth to end all myths? Then I shall just end your myth.
Bahamut sang.
The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
King blinked, we were in an endless, barren field.
"Delta".
Spectre turned towards me and nodded. She ran and grabbed hold of Emperor and myself. The last 5 hours of my memories flooded into Emperor. I collapsed to the ground feeling a little winded. Within seconds I was already feeling better. Sovereign was a telepath, so he could read the memories I just transferred and take advantage of Emperor's Absolute Comprehension. Emperor was the brains behind the operation, Sovereign the brawn, Spectre to enable Emperor send messages across time, Serenity for mental stability, and myself to give us as many opportunities as needed. We were only just beginning.
"I cannot currently see a path to victory".
Sovereign crashed into the ground. Emperor shook his head. Spectre rushed over for the memory transfer. I checked the time: 16:23:34.542.
Bahamut sang.
The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
I checked the time: 16:23:34.542.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
"Bleurgh."
"Hnn, hnn, hnn, hnn. This is a little rough on me".
Serenity touched me and I felt my weariness fade away.
I checked the time: 16:23:34.542.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
I checked the time: 16:23:34.543.
I grinned.
Bahamut sang.
The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
I wiped the blood from my mouth, even as Serenity began healing my mental strain, the nanites would heal any physical strain the stress was causing on my body.
I checked the time: 16:23:34.543.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
My wounds were taking longer to heal. Irrelevant, such was grossly insufficient to make me falter.
I would END Bahamut!
I checked the time: 16:23:34.544.
I was giddy.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
Rising was very painful, but I could still manage to sit up. Using the blood of my finger I crawled across the ground.
I would END Bahamut.
I checked the time: 16:23:34.545.
"He he he".
My smile was brighter than the sun.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
I couldn't even sit up. That didn't matter, I didn't need to sit up to function.
I checked the time: 16:23:34.546.
I put a supernova to shame.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
Emperor was staring down at me. Huh? Why did he have a frown on his face? He really shouldn't be marring his unbelievably pretty face with something as ugly as a frown. We've been making progress, just a few more iterations and Sovereign would prevail.
"You're killing yourself".
"And so? It is one life vs an infinite number of lives, even the most brain addled virtue ethicists would agree this is the right course of action. Besides, it's a win - win for me, either we manage to successfully defeat Bahamut in which case whatever happens to me is irrelevant, or I successfully kill myself. Either way, I can finally leave this prison. Just make sure that if I do die, the world knows who they owe their lives to. Anyway, you have nothing to worry about. Even when my brain stops functioning, I've already instructed Katherine, you guys would still be able to use me"
I checked the time: 16:23:34.547.
And Emperor doubts. Have more faith Emperor. Hold on just a little longer and we will prevail.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
"I have little interest in continuing this exercise in futility."
"This again? The math is very straightforward, as long as there is even the slightest chance of victory, then sacrificing one life to save a literal infinite is the right choice".
"I am not convinced the probability isn't zero".
"Heh, are you slipping? We're still looping, which means this isn't an infinite loop or I wouldn't experience it at all and Katherine would return me to Origin".
"While it is true your fragment of infinity could simulate an eternity and thus determine any endless loops, I'm not convinced this isn't a case of your fragment being unable to accurately simulate itself, Bahamut and Sovereign".
"Heh, have more faith".
I checked the time: 16:23:34.548.
Slowly but surely, we're getting there.
Bahamut sang.
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The wind howled, the skies darkened, and night covered the planet. From the heavens, the Black Dragon descended in all its terror.
"What repetition is this?"
"Katherine said we crossed the 100th Busy Beaver number a few iterations ago".
"I see".
Bang!
The pool of blood around me dramatically grew in size. Shit! At this rate the nanites wouldn't be able to mend me fast enough.
"I'm sorry, Ouroboros, we've failed".
I checked the time:16:23:34.556.
Bahamut sang.
And the world ended.
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Apart from suggestions to improve my writing or the story, I'd like to hear the following:
- What do you know of the world?
- What do you know of the characters involved in your brief interactions with them?
- What was confusing to you or you felt could be clarified?
- What emotions did the story make you feel?
I intend to turn this story into a quest, but I'm not posting it there yet because:
- I might end up not going anywhere with it, and I'd feel worse about abandoning a quest than a story.
- I'm only posting this now — instead of after I've done some more writing and am confident I'll see it through — in order to get feedback.
- I wouldn't be writing chapter 1 for a while, as I'd like to flesh out the setting and characters more.
I intend to turn the quest into a story though, so maybe I'll be updating this thread with the story chapters.