Monkeying around in the 41st Millennia (DBZ/40k)

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The entire Saiyan race gets transported to the Warhammer 40k galaxy right before Frieza wiped them out.
Chapter 1

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King Vegeta hated himself right now. He should have never so much as associated with damn lizard he thought as he watched the massive orange ball of death blot out the entire sky as it approached the planet that bore his name. So many years wasted working for that tyrant and just as much embarrassment suffered to appease him and yet he blows them off the map anyways!

He closes his eyes. At least now he can be with his wife once more. "Tomata i'm coming" he whispered to himself. But no death came for him. No excruciating heat, no explosive death, nothing.

Opening his eyes he saw that the giant orange ball of death had vanished.
In addition Firezas fleet had also vanished. The most strangely the giant red sun that had basked the planet in its crimson radiance for billions of years staining the planet's atmosphere red had also vanished replaced with much smaller yellow orb and accordingly the atmosphere began to morph into a more bluish green hue. This didn't make anysense.

Turning to his two immaculately dressed royal guards who were now beginning to recompose themselves after a near death experience. He began to issue orders quick and concise his thoughts racing a mile a minute. "Order the Saiyan army to begin rounding up all the Technicians, Engineers and other skilled alien labour now! And tell them to begin preparations for assaults on all Frieza Forces garrison forces on the planet.

Planet Vegeta had a population of 10 million. An almost comically small population for a planet of its size but even that small total was misleading as only 7.5 million of them were actually Saiyans. The other 2.5 million being other races from the Cold Empire. When King Cold took over their planet and forced the then young King Vegeta to kneel before him the "benevolent" lizard decided to "gift" them with hundreds of thousands of Engineers, Technicians, Scientists, Architect and dozens of other forms of skilled labour that the saiyans either completely lacked or had in very very sparse numbers. They of course brought their families and after a few "incidents" that the king was half convinced were staged the tyrant lizard King began to station large numbers of Garrison forces on the planet. Capturing these skilled labourers and their families and taking out the garrison forces as quickly as possible will be key to future if the Saiyan race as a whole.

"Yes sir!" One of the two guards replied before running off to tp relay the command to one of his two generals that were on the planet. With that the King walked back into his palace to sit on his throne and await news of the operation and think about his options and his future. There was nothing else he could do at the moment unfortunately.









"Ha!" Bardock yelled as his Ki blast exploded the head of purple skinned alien.

Bardock had no idea what the hell to think of the last couple hours. First he and his wife Gine had a tearful goodbye as they sent their young son Kakarott into space in fear that Frieza might be planning something then not even an hour later they proven right as that orange ball of death descended on the planet. Then not even an hour later he and his squad were assaulting the main Hospital of Vegeta City the capital of the planet to kill the Frieza Force soldiers guarding the hospital and capture any and all Civilian doctors.

He lets out a curse as half a dozen ki blasts collided with his ki shield. While they were harmlessly dissipated by his Ki shield a cloud of smoke obscured his vision. A warcry was the only warning as one of the Frieza force soldiers charged him. Before the soldier could reach him a more feminine war cry pierced the air and when the smoke cleared he saw Fasha, his female 3rd in command with her hands around the Frieza Forces soldiers neck. A red skinned alien with two small horns popping out of the top of his head.

Watching there comrade choke out a final strained gasp before his eyes go blank beneath the fierce Saiyanness. They lose their nerve. Turning to frantically run from the hallway they'd been ordered to guard but before they could get very far a war cry sounded filled the hallway. "Leek Death Bolt!" And a black mass of crackling ki energy slammed into them completely vaporizes the poor souls.

Bardock turned to his squad mate leak who had his arms outstretched and was panting aggressively. It was clear the Saiyan was at the ends of his ropes in terms of endurance. "Leek take the doctors and head outside the hospital me and Fasha can take it from here.''

The young Saiyan looked dismayed. "But sir I can still fight!"

"Leek you've done your part. You can go now. That's an order."

The young Saiyan hesitated for another second before turning to leave ushering the half dozen alien doctors that had been following them with him.

Bardock pressed the squad communication button on his Scouter. "Tora this is Bardock we have cleared out the hallway to the west entrance of the healing pod room. Me and Fasha our preparing to take the healing pod room right now. What's your situation looking like?"

The voice of his ever loyal lieutenant sounded through the scouter. "Borgos took a nasty hit but the doctors assured me he will be fine. Me and Shugesh are clearing out the east hallway now. Feel free to breach before us if you want though we'll be right behind you"

"Ok. See you in there." He turned to Fasha as she got off the the suffocated Frieza soldier. "Fasha are you ready"

She just turns to Bardock and nods. "Always!"

With that Bardock uses one of the keycards they got from one of the doctors to open door and he and Fasha burst into the room. The room was the largest room in the entire hospital. Dozens upon dozens of Healing Pods covered almost every inch of wallspace stacked two or three high. In one corner a dozen doctors, nurses, and medical technicians sit taped and gagged with medical tape and in the center of the room stood five Frieza Forces soldiers. Four of them raised there blasters when the two saiyans burst into the room but the last one, a green reptilian man that vaguely resembled a walking talking crocodile, merely raised an open palm.

"Hold it right there monkeys! See this remote here." He says holding a remote control in his other hand. "I press a button on this and every single pod in this room floods with poison. A poison so strong not even you Saiyan and you're bullshit immune system can handle! You don't want that now do you?"

Bardock grimaced. While he could probably shoot the bastard before he pressed the weapon if by some chance he either missed or the guy survived he'd doom the over two dozen wounded saiyans floating in the healing pods to a horrid death. He looked to Fasha to see that she was similarly conflicted.

Luckily there confliction resolved itself as the door on the other side of the room opened and small Ki blast exploded on the back of the crocodilians hand sending the remote flying across the room. With a grin both he and Fasha charged forward.

Bardock barreled into the Crocodile man knocking on to the cold metallic ground. The crocodile opened his mouth to scream a curse but it was muffled as Bardocks fist entered the toothy crocodile maw. A final look of sheer terror crossed its reptilian face before a ki blast detonated in its jaw covering the white metallic floor with brain and crocodile teeth.

A loud crack echoed through the room as Fashas leg collides with another Soldier's head snapping his neck and making the bird like Frieza Soldier do a very convincing and fatal owl impression.

Bardock raised his arms and let loose another ki blast into another Soldier bruning the soldier black as Tora does the same to an another soldier.

The last soldier, a diminutive furry fox like women begins to back away from the three Saiyans a look of sheer and utter horror on her face as she looks at her fallen, burned and mutilated former comrades.

Every drop of blood in her body freezes simultaneously as she feels herself walk into a wall where there shouldn't be a wall. As the wall wasn't a wall at all but instead the mountain of pure saiyan muscle that was Shugesh. Shugesh massive hand wraps around the small foxes head before the fox lets loose one final canine yelp before her head implodes under the pressure Shugesh was applying to her cranium.

Bardock took a second to admire the carnage his squad had inflicted on the Fireza Soldiers and the wounded Saiyans they had saved before he turned to Fasha. "Fasha free the medical staff and Tora get in contact with high command and inform them that the hospital has been fully secure-"

Bardock was cut off as all there scouters activated at once and a voice familiar to any Saiyan on the planet began to fill their ears.
"All Saiyans of Planet Vegeta this is your King speaking. I'm sure many of you are confused as to what is happening but allow me to explain all that I know. Frieza betrayed us and set out to destroy our planet and our entire species as a whole with it. And as many of you saw that he almost succeeded but through an unknown force our entire planet was transplanted to a new galaxy. I have concerted with the top Astronomer on the entire planet and confirmed that not only are we in a new galaxy its a galaxy that is completely unknown to the Cold Empire. Rejoice my subjects for the Saiyan race is now completely free from the Cold Empire!"

Looks of disbelief were shared by every member of Bardock's squad.







"Im sorry but I don't think this repairable." The young Saiyan known as Beets said as he checked over the damaged ship that had gotten them here.

A grimace crossed the veteran warrior Saiyan Paragus as he registered Beets words. He originally planned on rescuing his son and taking him to a more habitable planet to raise him away from that treacherous King Vegeta but it appears that planned been shot to hell. He'd be trapped on this acidic hellscape for the foreseeable future.

Thoughts of their limited food supply began to crowd his head. He glanced at Beets as a possible short term solution came to him. Killing the other Saiyan would leave a bad taste in his mouth but the lives of him and his son took precedence.

As he fingers the blaster on his belt suddenly all the murderous thoughts leave him as he feels the temperature around him drop. Beets looks up at him.

"Did it just get cold for you too?" The younger Saiyan asks.

Ignoring him Bardock looks out the window and his jaw drops in shock at the site before him. Instead of the acidic hellscape he was expecting from planet Vampa he was instead seeing a massive frozen ocean lightly coated with snow. Far as the eye could see.

His son Broly who was sitting on the ice just outside the ship was beginning to play with the snow having gotten over the sudden environmental change surprisingly quickly. "Holy shit" Beets mutters as he also looks out the window.

Rushing out the door Paragus looks around and all he sees is white icy snow in every direction as far as the eye could see. Paragus drew his blaster and rushed to grab his son pulling the infant Saiyan away from the shoddy snow castle he was building.

"Paragus what is it?" Beets asks watching the veteran Saiyan flip out.

"It's a psychic attack! It's the only explanation for this!" Paragus declares.

"Really! Are you sure?" Beets asks as he readies a ki blast in his hand.

The two stand in the snowy frozen ocean ready for an attack to come at any moment but as more and more time passes and no attack comes it becomes ever more clear that this might not be an enemy attack as Paragus assumed. Eventually beats dropped his ki blast dissipating it and pressed his scouter.

Then his eyes go wide. "Paragus i'm detecting thousands of power signatures that way!" He says pointing away from the ship. "There all small though. Threes and fours."

Paragus starred in the direction Beets was pointing and squinted he could just barely make out some structures in the far distance. "There's some sort of city over there. Let's check it out!" He decides before taking off cradling his son.

"Hey wait up!" Beets shouts before he also takes to the sky struggling to keep up with the more powerful saiyan.

As they approached the city they saw that the city consisted of a number of massive platforms held many feet above the ice with massive stilts with roads connecting the various platforms. Landing on the edge of one of the platforms they looked around sae the platform covered in massive yellow skyscrapers. Hover vehicles drove down the roads between the massive towers of metal.

A number of the blue aliens with weird slits on their face that apparently inhabited this world began to notice them and began to run off screaming in a language Paragus couldn't understand.

A couple minutes of wandering the city later him and Beets found themselves surrounded by a group of a dozen soldiers covered in full armour and holding big blocky guns of some kind. They each had a small red sheathed sword at there side. There was also a decently sized robot with a gatling gun of some kind for an arm and a couple of drones flying by the soldiers.

Possibility raced through Paraguses head. One hand the people of this world seemed advanced enough that they might have a ship that could get them off this world. On the other hand, he didn't know what there ships looked like or how they operate assuming they even have any. He couldn't take one hostage as he didn't understand their language and severely doubted they understood his. With a resigned sigh he did the only rational thing.

Raising his hands in the air. "We surrender"







Prince Vegeta spit out the food in his mouth. "God these things taste terrible!" He said referring to the bug creatures that they had just wiped out on orders from Frieza.

"Hey I think they taste pretty good," responded Nappa general of the saiyan army and current bodyguard for the prince.

"Gonna have to go with the prince on this one Nappa, they do taste terrible," commented another elite Saiyan warrior known as Korn.

"Mmhmm" replied another elite Saiyan warrior and the last adult of the group of saiyan named Cela.

"I-i-its not not good but it's also not good" timidly added the youngest among them a young child saiyan named Raditz.

As they continued their banter they found their surrounding spontaneously change around them as the fields of dead bigs was replaced by shody scratch work metal construction. Dozens of large green skinned aliens carrying clearly patchwork weapons that looked like they would explode the second you touched them surrounding and at the end of the room in an extremely shoddy looking throne sat a green skinned alien that was much bigger than any of the other ones and its right arm had been replaced with a massive metallic claw.

The Green Skinned aliens stare at the saiyans for a few seconds utterly dumbfounded while the saiyans stared back equally confused. Before the big green skin spoke up.

"Oomuis? How did ya pinkskins getz in mah palaze?" The bigger Greenskin asks. "Ya know wat? It Dun matter. Boys krump dese oomies!" He bellows out.

The three older Saiyans leap into action flaring there ki shields to protect the two younger Saiyans as a torrent of metal pours at the Saiyans bouncing harmlessly off there ki shields.

The young prince skoffs. "I don't know who you are or how you got us here but it honestly doesn't matter. Nappa, Cela, Korn kill them all."

The big greenskin stands up from his makeshift throne. "I tinks yu are confuzed. You dun kill me warboss Skarface Grotsplitta! I killz ya!" He shouts before bringing his massive claw prosthetic down on the Saiyan general.

Nappa catches the thing with one finger. The greenskin stares at the Saiyan general in utter disbelief muttering " dat ain right" before being utterly evaporated by a massive ki laser sent out of Nappas other hands leaving the only remnant of the once mighty Ork Warboss the prosthetic that Nappa unceremoniously tossed to the ground.

At this point Cela and Korn begin raining ki blasts into the crowd of greenskins and half of them run away from the cadre of Saiyan warriors screaming, while the other half ran towards them…. Also screaming. Both halves died.







Forlim woke to the cries and prayers of his wife. Everyday he woke to see her crying and praying and every day it broke his heart to see his precious Telterra like this. It was 10 years ago that they discovered that Telterra was completely sterile. The Aeldari hadn't been the most fertile species for many millennia but completely one hundred percent sterile Aeldari were still somewhat rare. Even more so among the Exodite tribes.

Telterra had always dreamed of having a kid. Of having a family. Witch is why every morning she would wake up and pray to Issha. The Aeldari goddess of fertility. And most of the time it would end in tears.

Getting up he wrapped his arms around his beloved. Emanating love and compassion through their psychic link he did his best to comfort for his wife. But soon enough there hug session was broken up as a young Aeldari burst into there house.

"Chief! You need to come look at this now!" The young Aledari shouted. Letting go of his wife Chief Forlim of the Korla Exodites exited his house following the young Aeldari.

The Aeldari pointed to the sky and Forlim saw what looked like a meteorite coming ever closer to their settlement.

The meteorite collided with the ground about a mile away from their settlement the sound of which almost spooked the Megadon herds.

Forlim turned to the young Aeldari. "Fetch me Belvar and 3 Raptor Dragons were gonna check it out."

"Four." He turned to see his wife standing at the entrance of there house with a determined look on her face.

"Telterra you should get some more slee-" I began before she cut me off.

"I said four. I'm coming." The determined look on her face should have been indicator enough that he wasn't winning this argument.

He turned to the young man again. "Fine you heard her. Fetch me Belvar and four raptor dragons.

Not too long after the young man returned riding a Raptor Dragon with his trusty second in command Belvar riding another and two more without riders following close behind. He and his wife hop on their respective Raptor Dragons and the four of them begin riding to the impact site.

When we arrive we see a large crater. Hopping off out Raptor Dragons we approach the crater spears in hand. Peering over the edge of the crater were shocked at what we see.

A small pod ship of some kind sat at the center of it but just outside of the pod climbing out the open door was a small infant mon'kiegh. But this mon'kiegh was different. It had a long tail and was wearing weird armour of some sort.

"What do we do with it?" The young man asked.

Belvar scoffed. "That's obvious isn't it?" He says as he begins walking into the crater clutching his spear tightly.

"No!" Teltarra suddenly shouts out leaping into the crater. She scoops up the infant Mon'keigh holding it protectively.

"What in the name of Khaine are you doing! That's a Mon'Kiegh " Belvar screams at her.

"Don't you see! This ship it's nothing like what the Mon'keigh use! And he has a tail! What Mon'keigh has a tail!" Teltarra proclaimed passionately.

"So what! There's all kinds of weird Mon'keigh out there. One with a tail is hardly that unusual." Belvar retorts.

Ignoring him Teltarra turns to Forlim. "Don't you see Forlim! This is Issha answering my prayers and delivering us a son from the heavens themselves!"

Staring at Teltarra a small part of Forlim wanted to call her insane. But looking at the look on her face, not a single other part of him could even consider telling her no. Besides when he looked at the way the little Mon'kiegh snuggled up to Teltarra while she was holding it he couldn't deny the creature was a bit cute.

With an exasperated sigh he responds. "Fine. You can keep it errrm him"

For the first time in 10 years he saw a genuine smile across her face and happiness radiated off her like a star. He coulda swore his heart almost melted in that moment.

Mounting there Raptor Dragons Telterra speeds ahead to clothe her new "son" with the young man not right behind her while he and Belvar lag behind a bit.

"You can't be serious Forlim? A Mon'Kiegh son?"

"Did you see the way she smiled Belvar? She hasn't smiled like that in ten years. If it made her happy like that id raise a Khaine damned Tyranid. Besides how bad can a single Mon'Kiegh really be?"
 
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I like the idea, but I'm a bit concerned about how the Saiyans are ideal Khornates. Chaos corruption is something that would pretty quickly wreck the species and by extension, the galaxy given the average Saiyan bloodlust and desire for fighting strong opponents. I just don't see a way to prevent that.
 
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I like the idea, but I'm a bit concerned about how the Saiyan's are ideal Khornates. Chaos corruption is something that would pretty quickly wreck the species and by extension, the galaxy given the average Saiyan bloodlust and desire for fighting strong opponents. I don't really see a way to prevent that.
The way I plan on handling that is that having ki control makes you naturally more resistant to Choas and the stronger your ki control is the harder it is for choas or psychers or whatever to fuck with your mind. So khorn could probably yoink the weakest saiyans if he really tried but any mid to high class warrior saiyan is funtionally immune to choas. Or at least that my justfication.
 
The way I plan on handling that is that having ki control makes you naturally more resistant to Choas and the stronger your ki control is the harder it is for choas or psychers or whatever to fuck with your mind. So khorn could probably yoink the weakest saiyans if he really tried but any mid to high class warrior saiyan is funtionally immune to choas. Or at least that my justfication.

I guess that could work...

Well, I'll see where this goes. As long this doesn't turn into a one-sided stomp, things should be interesting.

EDIT: Let's see what changes this new faction brings to the grimdark future.
 
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Actually it might be in chaos best intrest to destroy the saiyans rather the control them the upper limits of ki with enough time should be make it so that a one on one bout with big 4 might happen if the saiyans have at least 2000 years to develop
 
The important question is if this takes place pre or post-Gathering Storm. I'm surprised nobody has asked.
 
Not gonna lie, I was half expecting Kakarot to end up on 'Terra'. Very curious as to how things will play out with him not having his major head injury yet that stops him from being a bloodthirsty lunatic Saiyan hellbent on exterminating all life on the planet in order to facilitate its sale.

As to 'Ki' somehow preventing Chaos influence... wouldn't children like Kakarot be prime targets? Corrupt them before they have any measure of Ki control, and I don't see why the corruption wouldn't stick (or at least make them willingly accept Chaos as it'd be all they'd ever really ever known) even when they reach far greater heights of power. Could make for interesting character development-- growing in power only to realize you've been held under someone's sway for practically your entire life, and finally having a chance to grow into something/someone else.

Also potentially interesting in that there would doubtlessly be Saiyans who would willingly give themselves up to the influence of Chaos in order to grow stronger-- who knows how'd they would think about it when they already have experience giving up control in their Oozaru forms before they eventually learn to keep control in such a state.
 
Now - it would be fun to see.On the other side - Earth from DB would die without its defender.And Bulma never get boyfriend,which is even worst.
But i like that story,so please continue.
P.S they should be almost immune to Chaos - they are simply too arrogant to fall for any promises.It would be like
Chaos: listen,i would give...
Vegeta: Get lost,i would take it myself.
 
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Emperor Pilaf saves the world from the Red Ribbon Army? Kami Piccolo get's off his ass to fight King Piccolo? A lot of things could happen.
Nothing bad would happen. Pilaf would get his wish and the red ribbon army would be subservient tonhim along with all the rest of the worlds armys. Remeber Pilaf was the one who freed King Piccolo so without Goku stopping Pillaf from getting his wish King Piccolo would still be in that Rice Cooker till either he or Kami eventually drops from.old age and takes the other with them. The saiyans wouldnt have come for goku and the androids wouldn't have been created as rhe Red Ribbon army would be under pillafs control and thus wouldnt have been destroyed. So honestly earths probably better off without goku.
 
I guess that could work...

Well, I'll see where this goes. As long this doesn't turn into a one-sided stomp, things should be interesting.

EDIT: Let's see what changes this new faction brings to the grimdark future.
I'm expecting that it's a stomp, in any individual battle between Saiyans and anything but high level Warhammer champions, but the Saiyans are still not all that overpowered, due to the fact that the Imperium alone has more worlds than the Saiyans have individuals, and while the Saiyans are overpowered, very few of them can purge an average Warhammer world solo.

So the Saiyans are suddenly the highest quality forces in the galaxy, but they're also about the smallest space faring race in the galaxy, and their constant battle seeking, don't allow them to grow in numbers quickly.

And then there's space battles were they are very weak, the Saiyans have almost no battle ships, so their ability to fight a space fleet, is more or less limited to flying to the edge of a planets atmosphere, and trying to hit the spaceships with KI blasts, and while that tactic might work, unless there's a lot of Saiyans to box the spaceships in, they are likely to be able to dodge the KI blasts as far as they stay a few hundred thousand kilometers away, and the Saiyans get tired which spaceships don't.

And if there's enough Saiyans on a planet, to box spaceships in and keep the pressure up indefinitely by shooting in shifts, then there's likely enough Saiyans on that planet, that the spacefleet will deem it worth it to exterminatus the planet, and Saiyans don't do so well without air.
Emperor Pilaf saves the world from the Red Ribbon Army? Kami Piccolo get's off his ass to fight King Piccolo? A lot of things could happen.
Kami don't have to save the world from King Piccolo, if Goku isn't there Pilaf succeed in wishing to become king of the world, which mean he has no reason to free King Piccolo, so King Piccolo stay in the rice cooker for yet another eternity.

The problems don't happen until Babidi arrives to set Buu free, and without the Saiyans to drain KI from, Kaioshin is likely to be able to stop Babidi before he can release Buu.

Which mean problems only happen if we go all the way to Dragonball Super, where the Earth probably get destroyed by the god of destruction.
 
I'm expecting that it's a stomp, in any individual battle between Saiyans and anything but high level Warhammer champions, but the Saiyans are still not all that overpowered, due to the fact that the Imperium alone has more worlds than the Saiyans have individuals, and while the Saiyans are overpowered, very few of them can purge an average Warhammer world solo.

So the Saiyans are suddenly the highest quality forces in the galaxy, but they're also about the smallest space faring race in the galaxy, and their constant battle seeking, don't allow them to grow in numbers quickly.

And then there's space battles were they are very weak, the Saiyans have almost no battle ships, so their ability to fight a space fleet, is more or less limited to flying to the edge of a planets atmosphere, and trying to hit the spaceships with KI blasts, and while that tactic might work, unless there's a lot of Saiyans to box the spaceships in, they are likely to be able to dodge the KI blasts as far as they stay a few hundred thousand kilometers away, and the Saiyans get tired which spaceships don't.

And if there's enough Saiyans on a planet, to box spaceships in and keep the pressure up indefinitely by shooting in shifts, then there's likely enough Saiyans on that planet, that the spacefleet will deem it worth it to exterminatus the planet, and Saiyans don't do so well without air.

Kami don't have to save the world from King Piccolo, if Goku isn't there Pilaf succeed in wishing to become king of the world, which mean he has no reason to free King Piccolo, so King Piccolo stay in the rice cooker for yet another eternity.

The problems don't happen until Babidi arrives to set Buu free, and without the Saiyans to drain KI from, Kaioshin is likely to be able to stop Babidi before he can release Buu.

Which mean problems only happen if we go all the way to Dragonball Super, where the Earth probably get destroyed by the god of destruction.
Didn't Beerus only come to Earth because of the Saiyans?
 
Didn't Beerus only come to Earth because of the Saiyans?
Yes but he got the prophecy centuries ago, so that mean he got it far before the crossover happened, which mean unless the prophet predicted the crossover, Beerus will go to Earth thinking he can get a good fight, only to throw a planet destroying tantrum, when he find that Tien is the worlds strongest fighter, at a power level of less than 1000.
 
So, will the Saiyans be considered an offshoot of humanity by the Imperium?
If it's found out they can breed with humans, there will probably be at least some factions of the Imperium, that will argue that they are abhumans, and so it's okay to hire Saiyan mercenaries, this faction will be heavily helped, by the fact that Saiyans are going to trend towards being cheap to hire, for how effective they are, what with the fact that Saiyans mainly want to eat and fight, so most Saiyans can probably be paid in quality food.
 
The concept is interesting, but @RedFang Warrior you definitely need to give things a second pass for editing/proofreading. There's one point where you refer to Paragus as Bardock, and there's more than a few issues of general grammar, spelling, and capitalization. There's 1-2 sentences in the "Eldar find Goku" segment that switch from Third Person to First Person (using "we").

As well, it might be handy to give at least vague references in an Author's Note at the end as to where these 4 groups are, as the 40k galaxy is quite large. Details can be revealed in time, of course.

Also, it might help to get some in-story clarification, in the first couple of segments set on Planet Vegeta, whether King Vegeta was having his people kill all non-Saiyans, or just any Frieza Force soldiers/warriors who didn't surrender.
 
Nothing bad would happen. Pilaf would get his wish and the red ribbon army would be subservient tonhim along with all the rest of the worlds armys. Remeber Pilaf was the one who freed King Piccolo so without Goku stopping Pillaf from getting his wish King Piccolo would still be in that Rice Cooker till either he or Kami eventually drops from.old age and takes the other with them. The saiyans wouldnt have come for goku and the androids wouldn't have been created as rhe Red Ribbon army would be under pillafs control and thus wouldnt have been destroyed. So honestly earths probably better off without goku.
Viable option.But Bulma still not get Vegeta,and our imp do not get C18,becouse androids was never made. Well,they would find another.
 
The concept is interesting, but @RedFang Warrior you definitely need to give things a second pass for editing/proofreading. There's one point where you refer to Paragus as Bardock, and there's more than a few issues of general grammar, spelling, and capitalization. There's 1-2 sentences in the "Eldar find Goku" segment that switch from Third Person to First Person (using "we").

As well, it might be handy to give at least vague references in an Author's Note at the end as to where these 4 groups are, as the 40k galaxy is quite large. Details can be revealed in time, of course.

Also, it might help to get some in-story clarification, in the first couple of segments set on Planet Vegeta, whether King Vegeta was having his people kill all non-Saiyans, or just any Frieza Force soldiers/warriors who didn't surrender.
He definitely wasn't having his people kill all non-Saiyans, their missions was explicitly to secure the non-combatant Xenos on Vegeta, whether they offered the Freeza force soldiers the option to surrender is unknown, but the operation was all about securing precious non-combat personal, which is something there's few to none of amongst the Saiyans.
 
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