I agree with this. Would also give you the wordcount to add things like Asuma's lessons and doing purification rituals and attending religious events as Ino recommended.
Marked for Death: A Rational Naruto Quest
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- naruto rationalist romance armageddon is looking better and better damn you kishimoto explosions everywhere explosives solve everyone if in doubt surrender to the mercy of zabuza it seemed like a good idea at the time looks like a really bad case of being a jōnin my god. where does the lore end? precommitting is the winning plan screaming in kagome screw the rules i have explosives something bad might still happen sometimes you gotta sociopath stabby zabby subsection c of paragraph 9 should include we can weaponize this so hard
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- United States
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- Book Fort
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- They/Them
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@Sir Stompy 's action plan mirrors mine in significant ways. Could I encourage you to go vote for his plan, as well?
@Sir Stompy 's action plan mirrors mine in significant ways. Could I encourage you to go vote for his plan, as well?
It's 415. You've got to at least get it below 400 to avoid a penalty.
And if you can make room, please add these points:
- Do purification rituals, attend religious sermons and festivals as necessary, be seen
- Optimize with Mari
- Attend clan head training with Asuma
- Do this regularly from now on
To be clear, you want this to be a full scene? I don't expect it to be a fun read.
I recommend outdenting this, unless your intention is to call her out in front of all the adoptees.
I suspect the QMs will interpret this as Hazou commanding Sasha to follow his training plans, rather than politely requesting it of her. I don't think that would be a good idea.
I recommend indenting this for clarity.
If you want to make the bandit clearing with Noburi a scene you might as well put these questions in there.
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- The Soviet Republic of Canuckistan
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- He/Him
IMO this is best placed either before our clanless discussion so we can lean on it (look, even Mari gave up her jutsu) or in the offscreen section.
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- Pacific standard
If we're addressing the gōketsu technique thing we should come to them with what we want as well. I'd prefer something along the lines of
"Clan Gōketsu has a vault. Techniques and seals acquired while a Gōketsu belong to the clan, and will be unsealed for the clan when the individual is no longer active duty, at latest. Techniques and seals known before joining the Gōketsu follow clan secret rules. If no one else knows it, it can stay your individual secret. If any enemy of the Gōketsu could know the information, it needs to be shared with the clan.
In exchange, you get access to the goodies everyone else submitted."
I want to build a clan culture where all genin get specialized (dope) training, with the hallmark to getting to direct your own training being submitting something to the Gōketsu vault, either by conquest, trade, or research.
[X] Action Plan: Building Favor
"Clan Gōketsu has a vault. Techniques and seals acquired while a Gōketsu belong to the clan, and will be unsealed for the clan when the individual is no longer active duty, at latest. Techniques and seals known before joining the Gōketsu follow clan secret rules. If no one else knows it, it can stay your individual secret. If any enemy of the Gōketsu could know the information, it needs to be shared with the clan.
In exchange, you get access to the goodies everyone else submitted."
I want to build a clan culture where all genin get specialized (dope) training, with the hallmark to getting to direct your own training being submitting something to the Gōketsu vault, either by conquest, trade, or research.
[X] Action Plan: Building Favor
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- Texas
Maybe change Life/Birth to Humanity, seems more aligned with Hazo's values.
Swap these two around so the IN calligraphy bonus applies to the harder seal, RRB
If you make the latter change, I'll vote for this plan.
@RandomOTP sorry, Stompy's plan is missing brevity XP which is key for longer length plans.
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- The Soviet Republic of Canuckistan
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- He/Him
Thy will be done.
Also squeezed in purification and Asuma's lessons. Harumitsu is now his own teeny-weeny scene in which we trade for his cold seals (assuming Lord Hag hasn't forbid him) and ask him who we should go to for purification (as asking around at random might prompt Lord Hag to tell everyone to refuse us).
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- Texas
[X] Action Plan: Mending Fences
Last thing, maybe optimize with Ami too, we asked Mari to involve her a couple weeks ago.
- Location
- The Soviet Republic of Canuckistan
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- He/Him
All of it? I am pretty squeezed for words at this point, and reviewing only one section with her will make things tricky.
I guess it's fair to involve her in everything. I'll make the change.
Now below 400 words, had to cut a bit of the offscreen things. I'm going to fork in into a 2-day plan w/o the sealing section that meets brevity bonus.
[X] Action Plan: Building Favor w/o Sealing
Words: ~300
Timeline: 2 days
Words: ~300
Timeline: 2 days
- With Noburi, take a couple bandit clearing missions direct from Asuma.
- Summon low-cost Dogs to help track
- Noburi
- Would you be willing to take a break from the Hospital?
- We need the teketsu opening surgery for the Rift, can you begin researching it?
- Suggest experimenting on common Chakra beasts
- Consult with Dr. Yakushi? Don't do so if risks compromising OPSEC on Rift to Orochimaru
- Encourage him to read notes to improve his skills
- We need the teketsu opening surgery for the Rift, can you begin researching it?
- Would you be willing to take a break from the Hospital?
- Meet with disgruntled clanmates:
- Optimize with Mari, Kei, and Noburi
- Ask Asuma and Ino their opinion in general terms
- Prior to the meeting, encourage Mari to share a few more of her ninjutsu.
- Over half the clan shares her Lightning Element. Her ninjutsu could keep them alive.
- She could share the techniques she contributed to the Tower with the Clan.
- At the meeting:
- Demanding they surrender their jutsu without discussion was a mistake.
- But! Hazou withheld nothing useful for combat during the war.
- He kept a few diagnostic seals, but there was nothing else.
- In light of Akane's death, Hazou is loosening the OPSEC on MARS
- Any Goketsu of at least special jounin rank will have access to (black paper) MARS.
- Distribute improved Rocket Boots, and Dampener seals (as applicable)
- The issue of KEI justu will come up for every clan.
- The Goketsu are influential. What they decide, collectively, could set precedent.
- What do they want? What issues do they see? Do they have ideas? You want something that works for everyone - them included.
- Encourage them to ruminate: you don't need an answer immediately.
- Optimize with Mari, Kei, and Noburi
- Offscreen
- Do purification rituals, attend religious sermons and festivals as necessary, be seen
- Optimize with Mari
- Attend clan head training with Asuma
- Do this regularly from now on
- Hazou begins advising Sasha
- Trade for Harumitsu's Cold Seal.
- Do purification rituals, attend religious sermons and festivals as necessary, be seen
Can we glue an opaque sheet of paper to either side of a seal to make it more opsec friendly?
If not opaque then we can glue a black sheet of paper on each side
What about other things like laminating seals to make them waterproof, or inscribing seals on non-paper surfaces (vellum? leather? tree rubber?)
If not opaque then we can glue a black sheet of paper on each side
What about other things like laminating seals to make them waterproof, or inscribing seals on non-paper surfaces (vellum? leather? tree rubber?)
You can't make some seals waterproof, I think if it emanates a construct like skywalkers, it's more or less impossible. I'm unsure of the exact mechanics.
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- Europa, Jupiter Orbit
You'd think so, but her reaction to Hazō's potential Jashinism was pretty mild and before that she was open to the idea of helping him deal with an entity trying to infest his mind in ways that went beyond "resist it in every possible way".
I think she would not murder or betray us if we told her that actually one can get power by trading lives to Jashin without any apparent loss of control over oneself.
Maybe add something like the following to the Approach section:
- Genuinely invite and consider Yuno's arguments.
[X] Action Plan: Mending Fences
Hazō had all kinds of ideas about this in the chapter where it came up. Something about the channels allowing them to hide, so that at least some survive even if we "cooperate" with the Wakahisa to try and put them back. Though to be honest I don't quite know what he was thinking, given that Wakahisa can just drain all chakra from all life in the canals. Did he want to put other rare fish in there that we could use an excuse to not let them do that?
Isn't that literally just Mari, Yuno and Hazō? Or was there one more?
No, that's right. But Jin is close, and it's an incentive to rank up. The normal clan thing to do is give the upper ranks the good shit.
I would like street gutters for our koi just like our last estate.
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- He/Him
I don't understand what this line is supposed to mean, nor what Velorien is supposed to do with it. Reconsidering in what way? Is he going to explain MARS to them since they don't know what it is? Would personally just cut this (I am not a voter of yours though, just my two cents)
What chapter was this?
What exactly did we have at the last estate? I didn't think we ever built gutters for Koi.
Seconded. QM interpretation of this line seems difficult to predict.
- Location
- The Void
- Pronouns
- She/Her
We haven't finished researching Dampener seals so can cut a little bit of word count