Any chance you might update slightly to incorporate the below?
Might include some wording about the gift only being offered after the exam's conclusion.Take the Sealing Exam
- Prep with Kagome (for tags)
- Aim to impress
- Be respectful. Offer a (Mari-approved) gift as thanks.
Yes.
So did the edits I suggested. I'm confused as to why you disapproved of the suggested edits in that light. The content is effectively identical.
The key is this: the original version implied that the gift was going to be given regardless, and we were only seeking Mari's approval on what gift would be given. Your plan has us going to Mari getting her approval for giving the gift.So did the edits I suggested. I'm confused as to why you disapproved of the suggested edits in that light. The content is effectively identical.
The wording was a Mari-approved gift.The key is this: the original version implied that the gift was going to be given regardless, and we were only seeking Mari's approval on what gift would be given. Your plan has us going to Mari getting her approval for giving the gift.
I don't read it as "if Mari does not approve of any gift, no gift will be given."; I read it as "Hazou will insist on giving a gift and will solicit Mari's advice on which gift would be the best for the situation. If Mari does not approve of any gift, Hazou will still insist on giving a gift anyway."The wording was a Mari-approved gift.
If Mari does not approve of any gift, no gift will be given.
What in the original reads to you as 'give a gift even if Mari does not approve of the gift despite being very clear that the only gift to be given is one of which Mari approves'?
I'm moderately tempted to get the QMs in on this (probably not going to tag them but if you see this, please weigh in!) because this seems like a level of paranoia bordering on early-story Kagome.
Where are you getting anything about insisting on anything?I don't read it as "if Mari does not approve of any gift, no gift will be given."; I read it as "Hazou will insist on giving a gift and will solicit Mari's advice on which gift would be the best for the situation. If Mari does not approve of any gift, Hazou will still insist on giving a gift anyway."
Your meaning is correctly conveyed.I'm sufficiently willing to die on this hill that I've edited the wording of the plan to specify that we're offering a Mari-approved gift. @eaglejarl, @Velorien, @Paperclipped, can you confirm that if Hazo cannot find a gift that Mari approves of, he won't offer a gift at all?
Or I could just be paranoid. Concern withdrawn.