Magic Is Easy and Killing Is Too (Skyrim SI)

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No.

"Hey, you"

No no.

"You're finally awake."

Oh no no no no.

"You were trying to...
Chapter 1- New World
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No.

"Hey, you"

No no.

"You're finally awake."

Oh no no no no.

"You were trying to cross the border right? Walked right into that Imperial ambush, same as us, and that thief over there."

Oh lord I'm in Skyrim. Why? Of all people to put in a world filled with death at every corner why pick me? A new high school graduate with a penchant for crappy relationships and keeping a horrible work ethic. Just, Akatosh, or whoever plucked me from my world, I want you to know, you're a dick. Just cuz I pretend that killing someone would have no effect on me doesn't mean I actually want to be shoved in a world where I'd have to do it every day!

Okay, being angry isn't going to do anything for me. We don't seem to be super close to Helgen yet so I have some time to think. Ralof is sat in front of me and the thief is next to him. I look and see the man himself, Ulfric fricking Stormcloak, the man who I'm almost sure is being manipulated so hard by the Thalmor that it stings. They were all dirty as hell, which makes sense seeing as we were all caught in an ambush. Now, how's my health? Limbs? All there. See through two eyes? I can wink better now for some reason. Body? Che- Holy hell I'm ripped as hell! Well not ridiculously like a character with the slider all the way up but I was a chubby 18 year old in my world now I'm buff! Okay, awesome but I need to make sure I survive this because this is definitely not just a game anymore. Now, anything else? My body feels weird, like too warm for being in rags in Skyrim, like my body is filled with more energy than I've ever had. Is it Magicka? Because if it's Magicka I see why mages love magic because it feels like the best kind of energy, warm like a blanket in the cold made of super soft material, it's comforting.

I noticed our surroundings become familiar from my memories of the game, the place where that quest for Nettlebane passed us by, and I knew my first encounter with ALDUIN was coming and even with the feeling of Magicka running through my body I was freaking out. Okay, I have a good chance to survive this, and while the underground is super scary nothing compares to fighting Alduin with my hands tied and no armor. Oh god I just realized I'm gonna have to kill some people within the next hour aren't I? Time to see if my mind really will handle it well or if I'll break down like a nice, sane person.

We rolled noisily past the gates of Helgen at a slow pace, and the town looked bigger than in the game. More wall and more houses and such, this wasn't some measly fort this was a whole town of people that are gonna get murdered by a god-dragon who can Shout meteors into existence. Good lord I don't care if killing someone makes me freaking out I'm gonna at least push past it to get as far away from that monster as I can.

The courtyard where the executioner and Tullius waited was almost identical to the game but bigger with a few more people on the edges screaming support or cursing at the Stormcloaks. They let down the backs of the carts and they corralled us like cattle into a line so we cold be executed. Hadvar, as he looked quite similar to in the game, called forward each of us, and I just realized I don't know what race I am! I looked at my skin tone again and took the time to realize what my skin looked like beyond first glance. I had a skin tone between the typical Breton and Nord, so maybe half and half? It would explain not being bothered by the cold and being sensitive to my magicka. And with that solved I realized I needed a name, and I've always been bad at naming characters, now I have to name myself, ugh I need to not think of anything edgy. John? Too plain. Michael? Eh. I need more medieval. Arthur? Maybe. Mordred? Ooh. Daddy likes.

"You can't do this!" Watching Lokir made me flinch a bit because I knew the man was going to get killed in cold blood.

"Archers!"

Iron arrows flew straight and true into Lokir, piercing his back and some hitting his legs, he crumpled and his now corpse kept his running momentum and hit the ground with a sickening thud. So, not as bad as I thought it'd be, but slightly unnerving watching him be taken out so fast.

"Anyone else feel like running?" I can not wait for you to be killed you god awful woman. "Wait, you there. Step forward." Oh he's looking at me. Well he goes nothing. "You, who are you?"

"Mordred, half-Breton half-Nord. You all caught me in your stupid ambush as I was travelling into Skyrim." A lie, but I needed to start my story somewhere. Hadvar looked slightly surprised at that. "Captain, what do we do? They're not on the list." "Forget the list, they'll still go the the block." He looked at me slightly guiltily, and I felt my face twist in anger. This was one of the main reasons I almost never sided with the Imperials, so many seemed to lack honor, and this horrible woman right here condemns the main character, who is now me, to death!

I turned to face the captain and even if this got me killed I was gonna voice my anger. "Hey Captain are you too lazy to do your damn job? Gonna kill an innocent man just because of your own incompetence? There is a reason many in Skyrim mock you, and it's plain to see why!"

Her face contorted into a face of anger and disgust, as if it was an affront to her for me to even look at her, and she walked up to me and glared with a look that would send even minor daedra running. "You wanna repeat that, prisoner? You should be glad I don't send you to the Thalmor, they loving playing with their prey." She hissed at me with venon laced within her voice. She backed up and got back next to Hadvar, who was looking terrified. "Send them on, let's get these criminals executed."

We were forced forward towards the chopping block and seeing fresh and old blood mixed on it made me nervous. Then I heard the roar, and even as far away as it was it sounded scary as hell, like you were stuck in a cage with a lion. One of the guards looked towards the mountain nervously, hesitation clear in his voice. "What was that?" The Captain looked around and smirked, figuring it was just a trick, confidence filling her voice. "Nothing, carry on." They called forward the man next to me? What was his name? The priestess started her prayers, but he caught her off. "Hurry up! I haven't got all morning." That's morbidly true. He went forward and was made to kneel at the chopping block. "My ancestors are smiling upon me, can you say the same?" That got a frown from a few people, and the executioner didn't take kindly to his comment, and he was quickly beheaded. Flesh makes no noise when it's cut, but blood gushing onto stone and metal cutting through bone does. It's a sickening sound, but I can't seem to care. As callous as it is his death prolongs mine long enough for me to live, and I'm thankful, but this world will kill me if I don't stop caring about some things.

Another roar sounded, much louder this time. Alduin was close, and that was horrifying to me.

"Next up, the half-Nord-Breton."

I was pushed forward and my heart near stopped in nervousness. I walked as slow as I could without the Imperial behind me pushing me forward, and eventually I was at the block. They forced me into a kneeling position, my head pressed to the block, the bit of blood that hadn't dripped off or dried clinging to my hair, which I noticed was pitch black, only noticeable because it was pushed into my peripherals by the Imperials rough handling of me. I looked to see the executioner to my left, my head forced towards him, and I could see his sickening grin as he prepared his axe. I heard a booming roar and I knew I was close to being safe. Just a few more seconds. The executioner wound his arms back and was about to swing when Alduin landed on the tower, slabs of stone falling off under his weight. His draconic face seemed to curl into a sneer, and I heard him Shout, and the world went white with a boom.

So... lemme know how it is if you don't mind. It's my first story on a forum, so getting feedback so quickly seems cool, I hope you all like it.
 
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I like Skyrim SI's and I do like yours as well, but I do feel that you're rushing through character beats by a bit.

The SI seems to just quickly go through the motions, barely reacting to the world around him with little more than "that's a thing. ok."

While that's perfectly fine for a few intro chapters, it may become a problem if it goes on because it can make your story feel as if it lacks "meat", so to speak.
 
Looking good so far, no unnecessary ROB scene and the prose flows well. Watched.

Also, threadmark, if you will.

Edit: Agreed, it does seem somewhat detached with the descriptions but I figure that's a result of panic and fear. Hopefully, it'll shape up soon.
 
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Interested to see where this goes, seems like there's been a bit of a rise in Skyrim SI's recently. Curious to see how you translate the odder game mechanics into an actual world.
 
Good so far, a bit fast paced, but it is the tutorial scene, so can't say I'm against it. Skyrim is huge and even bigger if viewed in a more realistic view like you are doing.

Love that you are going with a battlemage setup. Looking forward to the rest.
 
I feel like the pace is ok, it's just the messy dialogue that gives the feeling of it being rushed.
"Captain, what do we do? They're not on the list." "Forget the list, they'll still go the the block."

"What was that?" "Nothing, carry on."

These make it so that people that haven't played the game don't get who is talking, and even though i have played the game, had to do a double take.
 
"Forget the list, they'll still go the the block."

Always hated this line. Such callousness, you'd think they could just place you to the side or something and deal with it later. Ulfric is the only one they really want to kill, no need to get a probable innocent mixed up in it. This one line is the sole reason I've never sided with the empire in any play through.

Also a bit annoyed that your SI just accepted it too, at least make a fuss over being killed for simply traveling through the wrong spot.
 
Thank you all for your critiques of my story, I can be kinda bad about dialogue so I'll try and take the advice about it seriously so I can make this better. I'll be more descriptive and I'll write more going on the assumption not everyone has played Skyrim.
 
Always hated this line. Such callousness, you'd think they could just place you to the side or something and deal with it later. Ulfric is the only one they really want to kill, no need to get a probable innocent mixed up in it. This one line is the sole reason I've never sided with the empire in any play through.

Also a bit annoyed that your SI just accepted it too, at least make a fuss over being killed for simply traveling through the wrong spot.

Yeah for sure I can understand that, I think I'll actually make an edit cuz personally I would be pissed off if I was gonna get killed just cuz some lady was too lazy to do extra work.
 
Chapter 2- I Can Do Magic?
Alduin showed the world he was a god for a reason. He turned the cold town of Helgen into hell in about 10 seconds. Watchtowers made of thick stone were obliterated and sent crumbling down, blood staining the quickly melting snow from the unfortunate souls withing the towers. My eyesight regained better focus and I could see that all that was left of the executioner was a heat-warped axe and a few body parts strewn about. Which was much grosser than seeing a man turned into a pincushion by arrows.

I turned towards the tower I knew Ulfric was in and saw Ralof, he was yelling something, maybe at me, but my hearing was barely coming into anything but a loud ringing noise. There were many meteors flying around and hitting the houses and walls, some standing up to the onslaught, but some, well the screams spoke for themselves. "-ey! Prisoner, over here if you want to live!" Oh, there's my hearing back. I turned back to Ralof and got up as best as I could with my hands bound. I then proceeded to sprint as best as I could towards him, the blonde Nord turning to head into the tower, which had a lot of rubble, hide parts, and Ulfric in their with a few prisoners.

Ralof began questioning Ulfric frantically, and I don't blame him. If I didn't know about him before hand I'd be freaking out too. Actually now that I'm thinking about I'm freaking out now and I did know this was gonna happen. "What was that?" Ulfric seemed a bit nervous. "A dragon." Ralof reeled back, seemingly struck, and swallowed hard. " A-a Dragon? Those are nothing but legends!" Ulfric looked up, staring hard at Ralof. "It seems like the legends were true then." Then the tower shook hard, and I heard Alduin Shout again. "Yol-toor-shul!" And the air even in the tower seemed to heat up. I spoke up quickly, seeing as I wanted to get the hell out of dodge because Alduin is endgame content and I don't think he scales to low levels. "We need to get out of here, now. That thing wants this whole place dead and he's not opposed to knocking over a few towers." Everyone seemed to nod at that. "Let's climb higher, see if we can't find a way out that way." Some of us headed out while Ulfric and a few Stormcloaks stayed behind, for what reason I don't know. We climbed up and I saw a soldier standing in front of the rubble of the stairs heading higher up. He heard us approach and I noticed he had a scared look in his eyes. "It's blocked off! That damn dragon blocked us in!" I sighed, looking around for what we were supposed to do next. Why do I feel like I'm forgetting something? I felt the wall next to us rumble hard, and my eyes widened. Alduin was about to bust down the wall and cook us alive! I grabbed Ralof and flung him and I towards the stairs, just as Alduin's head popped through and he roasted the soldier up there. Alduin seemed to chuckle and he flew away, peppering soldiers with fire balls.

"So, that was close." I finished that off with a nervous chuckle. Ralof looked at me with a thankful look in my eyes. "Thank you for the help, I'd be dragon food if it wasn't for you." I waved my hand at that, feeling full of adrenaline at that experience. "Maybe you can pay me back if we survive this. Now let's see if that hole can't help one of us out of here." We climbed up, the stone having cooled down from the dragon's fire Shout. I peeked out the hole and saw the drop down into the house below us, it wasn't too high luckily, so no broken or twisted bones so long as you don't land wrong. I looked at Ralof with a nervous smile on my face. "I'm hopping down, see you on the up side." And with that I dropped the 15 feet or so into the house, landing with a clumsy roll, ending up on my back. I smiled wide.

"Woohoo! What a rush!" I looked around for the exit and quickly sprinted out, trying not to stay out in the open. It took me passing a few houses before I found Hadvar moving a young boy away from his wounded father, trying to get to cover. I see why he did because that group of people with him seemed like a nice snack for Alduin and he landed hard, crushing the boys father, then turned and shot fire at the house Hadvar and his group used as cover. The wood caught fire instantly and almost all of the cover was gone before he stopped with his fire. He would have continued but he got pelted with arrows and decided the archers would make for better snacks. He flew off and from there, things seemed to blur.

I ran into cover, having a very close run in with Alduin right above me, ran past tens of corpses, civilian or soldier, there was no discrimination. I finally made it to the keep, where I'd be a little safer, but where I'd have my first kill in all likelihood. Ralof and Hadvar showed up, and started arguing with each other. I scoffed at that and decided to just push both of them as best as I could with my hands bound towards the left entrance of the keep. "Look, you two can argue later, but right now that dragon will kill all of us indiscriminately without fail. Can you please just put your differences aside so we can get out of here?" They seemed like they wanted to argue but I glared at them to keep them quiet. They both sighed and looked at each other, extending a hand to one another. Hadvar smirked a bit. "Truce?" Ralof smiled at that. "Yeah, truce." They shook hands and I sighed in relief. "Can one of you get these bindings off of me? I'll only hinder you while bound." They nodded and Hadvar took out a dagger and cut my bindings. "Look around and grab whatever you need, we need to get out of here." We all nodded and we proceeded to look around for what would be usueful.

About 5 minutes later I was wearing a Stormcloak cuirass, boots, worn pants and some iron bracers. I had an Imperial sword in a sheath on my left hip to wield with my right hand. I smiled, feeling much more prepared. Then, I muttered to myself more than anyone. "Just one last thing." I raised my left hand and concentrated on turning that buzzing feeling of my Magicka into fire, I figured if most of the characters start with flames and healing this should be easy. I stood there for a moment, and suddenly, my palm had a spark, and jet of flame shot from my hand, heating up the area around me, and I felt my magicka drain. I could hold this for maybe about 15 seconds, so I need to work on my reserves. But! I was shooting flames from my hands! I can use magic! It's everyone's dream and I can do it! I smiled with glee, and turned towards Ralof and Hadvar, and pumped my fist, flames escaping from my closed palm. "Let's do this!"

So, that's another one done. I hope this a bit of an improvement. I'm excited to keep this story going, and I really appreciate the critiques you guys, you guys rock.
 
Great job.

Please don't forget that Skyrim dragons aren't actually the size in the game. They're much, much larger.

Take for example, Odahviing.

Skyrim Dragons are actually much huger.

It's just game limitations.
 
I'm liking it so far, glad you're SI seems to have his head on straight about the Thalmor. Hope he can figure out a prettier end to Skyrim's story than being conquered by the Empire or being conquered by the Thalmor. Hell if the empire wins they're working with the the Thalmor anyways. Being the dragonborn means a lot of political power so maybe he can ensure that their lies are called out and they don't keep getting away with their shit.
 
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