What would readers prefer?

  • Pure narrative quest: no dice will be used, the author will have free reign to decide what happens.

    Votes: 25 59.5%
  • New dice system: the author will design a new, better dice system to add some randomness and risk.

    Votes: 17 40.5%

  • Total voters
    42
  • Poll closed .
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.
 
My impression here is that changing places will be a lot harder than taking one in the first place. It's worth considering whether just having a place is worth taking one that's primary role is something she wants to avoid, secondary duties like politics she'll probably find unpleasant, and long term could become a wedge between her and the people she cares about is actually a good deal.
 
"Is there anywhere you want to go.
This sentence should end in a question mark.

The answers had… not pained your species in a good light.
"painted"

At this point in the story, the Fell Dragon himself appears.
Grima: "WHY AM I HERE!?!?!?"

"This… this has been happening for centuries, right.
This sentence should also end in a question mark.

The younger human swallows before stepping forward. "I… it's okay," you say.
I'm pretty sure this is supposed to be Sypha speaking, not Ryza.

... If they use the dragonstone they found to make a tome then I vote that we burn the countess castle down anyway.
With how much Flarestone was panicking when she realized what Ryza is, I'm pretty sure they won't do anything that stupid.

[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.

Seems like a pretty good compromise if you ask me.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.
 
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.
 
[x] You decide to wait. You still have a long life ahead of you, you don't need to rush into anything. You may not have an official place in the world, but Artemis likes you, and she'll be around for at least a few decades, enough for you to get settled and find out more about the world. Besides, being able to do things your way is kind of nice.
 
The main reason why I don't want to send Ryza to Marble Hall, besides safety, I don't want to send her to a place where tools are made from the remains of her kind.

Although I can't deny, the fact that the princess's knight is a "dragon" seems very funny to me.
 
At this point in the story, the Fell Dragon himself appears. The dread overlord of dragonkind (you scoff, manakete didn't have overlords!)
Oh hey there Dark Emperor Dragon Guy.
And yeaaaaah, I was all for potentially heading over to Marble Hall after the discussion with Artemis, but the reveal of "oh they use crushed up Dragonstone dust to make magic" reaaaaaally dampens that idea for me. Maybe if we'd taken Stone-Hearted way back at the start of the story so the only way anyone was getting Ryza's Dragonstone was killing her anyways, but as is I wouldn't put it past an unscrupulous mage or two to think about what cool things they could make with our whole and intact Dragonstone consequences be damned and completely screw over any stay we have there. Even if that doesn't happen, Ryza isn't likely to be too thrilled being presumably surrounded by the remains of her people being desecrated on a daily basis to make human magic.
 
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.

[X] You decide to wait. You still have a long life ahead of you, you don't need to rush into anything. You may not have an official place in the world, but Artemis likes you, and she'll be around for at least a few decades, enough for you to get settled and find out more about the world. Besides, being able to do things your way is kind of nice.

So I guess we are re-litigating this vote and I still would prefer any option besides Knight.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.
 
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.

Until Artemis' death.
 
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.

I was on the fence before, but it sounds like Artemis will negotiate favorable terms for us. I think Marble Hall would be an interesting place to go, but I think I like this character arc a bit better.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.

We have a[nother?] long-term goal now. This will be a big step towards that
 
[X] You decide to wait. You still have a long life ahead of you, you don't need to rush into anything. You may not have an official place in the world, but Artemis likes you, and she'll be around for at least a few decades, enough for you to get settled and find out more about the world. Besides, being able to do things your way is kind of nice.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.

If Ryza wants to fix the travesty done to her people, getting accredited is probably the best path towards having the influence and knowledge to do that. I think she's strong enough to endure going to a hall of desecration for the explicit purpose of finding out enough to make sure nobody does this again.
 
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.
 
[X] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.

This iwas honestly a hard one for me, until the Dragonstone reveal IC made it ludicrously easy. I'm placing both here for simplicity's sake but let it be known that I still vastly prefer being knighted over becoming an accredited mage for multiple reasons, not in the least due to the fact that going for mage is going to reveal us. Period. Full stop. There is not fucking way doing this will not reveal us as a Manakete, and quite frankly, I'm not willing to place Ryza in the middle of Imperial territory for that kind of reveal, especially not when... not when this is looking less and less like a misunderstanding between Manakete and Human and more like a intentional genocide of Manaketes by humans for power with a benefactor who they either killed themselves (history is written by the winners) or an explicitly human smith that was doing unholy experiments on Manaketes, innocent or otherwise.

We quite frankly cannot risk being in the Empire for any period of time right now.
 
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Also, circling back to the backstory for the Empire:
eventually attracting the attention of someone known only as the Old Master.

He offered them weapons, tools to allow them to fight back.

Mjolnir… a gift to Lenora, a tome to allow her to channel magic. The Galeforce, a lance given to wyvern lord Mycelus, another friend the pair had picked up. The Fell Slayer, the Sword of Flame… Staring at the pictures in the book, you can't help but feel something's off about those weapons…

Curious as to what pinged Ryza's "wrongness" sensor, but what I immediately picked up on was the elemental affinities implied here - Thunder, Wind, and Fire. That is to say, Yellow, Green, and Red manakete elemental affinities.

The theory of "Shyrlonay backed/was involved with the Empire and possibly gave them the remains of his defeated rivals to empower them to defeat the remnants" grows.
 
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"It's awful!" you wail into Sypha's pillow. You're not quite sure how you found yourself face-down on the bed in her guestroom, but you're here now and you don't think you'll ever be able to show your face around humans again!

You feel the bed shift as Sypha abandons her harp and starts petting your back. "Surely it can't be that bad," she says.

"They think I eat princesses!" you cry. "I've been asking what people think of dragons and they think we think princesses taste good!"

The Sypha option is already exceeding my expectation and I'm glad we were given this.

Sypha scoots over and lays down next to you, hugging you. "I'm glad you made it," she says.

"And then there are the people who think we sleep on piles of gold!" you say. "No, I do not sleep on gold, thank you very much! Gold would be very uncomfortable! I like beds to be soft!"

As you take a breath to continue complaining, you feel an odd shaking motion from Sypha. At first, you think she's crying at the travesty of it all, but a moment later you realize… "It's not funny!" you cry as Sypha starts giggling.

"I'm sorry," she chokes out. "I know it isn't, but I was just- You know how dragon-you looks like she's made of gold? All shiny and everything?" You nod grumpily. "I was just- the image of a big pile of gold- some treasure hunters finding it, only for you to burst out and start telling them off for disrupting your nap-" Sypha loses it, starting to really laugh. "I'm- I'm sorry-I can't-"

As you listen to her, the image plays in your mind, and slowly, you can't help but join her. It's just so stupid… but at the same time…

The pair of you laugh for a few minutes before Sypha finally brings herself under control. "I'm sorry, Ryza," she hiccups. "I know it's not really funny…"

"It's okay," you choke out. "It's… better, than some of the others."

Yeah, bringing Sypha back amicably was worth it. It's fun seeing Ryza interact with people her own (relative) age.

You listen as the story of Theodore Wyrmblood, the titular First Emperor. [...] You feel his grief as he howls to the sky, wondering why he alone was spared.
The First Emperor and the Last Manakete. Well, hopefully our story doesn't continue with us being granted tomes of ground up human.

Lenora Thundercrier, the first Archmage. [...] Mjolnir… a gift to Lenora, a tome to allow her to channel magic.
Hopefully a completely unfounded crack theory... could the dragonstone in the cave be Father, and Mjolnir be dear Mother? I doubt it... but maybe? It would be a dramatic reveal for sure.

As for the rest of the update, Sypha is really showing her stuff. She stumbled into dropping the mother of all bombshells, probably the heaviest Ryza will have to bear. Not the kind of thing you would want to break to a friend, especially if that friend was a dragon. But she still went and found Artemis and helped keep things under control. She's a good kid.

As you settle in to sleep that night, you turn the thought of what to do over in mind, and you think you're on the track to a decision.
I like that we went from two tantalizing choices (at least for me :whistle:) for Ryza's future to three. I'm leaning towards the Head Mage route. It would give us the opportunity to spend more time learning about magic in the long term and we would have an excuse to finally get started on Runewrighting: Making Magical Masterpieces. I think Ryza would enjoy it more as a job. But the benefits, power, and protections that come with holding a noble title seem super useful, and I think Ryza would appreciate having more options to solve her problems and realize her desires in the future. Even if that newfound ability to solve problems comes with problems of its own. It would likely give her more agency and ability to protect manakete if more were to appear than if she were just head mage. I will have to think on it more.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.
 
"…Aithusa," you whisper. "That's Mother's name. Aithusa. And Fafnara for Father." Swallowing, you smile. "Thank you."
Obvious fact: "Fafnara" is obviously a corruption of "Fafnir," or possibly a reference to the Financial Aid Form Need Analysis Report. Fun fact: "Aithusa" is the name of a dragon character in BBC's Merlin.
Stupid fact: Fans and actors alike think Aithusa is a female dragon, but if I'm reading the wiki correctly, the one time anyone genders it they use "he".

"Well, when I… when the Talons attacked, they didn't just kill Selena. They also killed Master Shadebringer, Agrithe's Head Mage. Father has replaced him with his eldest apprentice, James, but everyone knows that's a temporary arrangement until he can find someone accredited." She gives you a serious look. "You are an extremely talented mage already: you could easily make the argument that you can handle the position as Head Mage. You wouldn't quite be nobility, but in some ways that would put you in an even stronger position. From the time of Emperor Theodore Wyrmblood and the first Archmage, Lenora Thundercrier, there has been a mutual respect and understanding between accredited mages and nobility, without some of the compelled obedience of a knight. You would also be less directly beholden to Agrithe. While we would love to have you as long as you want, with a full mage-name, you could find a position anywhere in the world if things didn't work out here a few generations from now."
I like this option; it fixes basically every problem we and Ryza would have with knighthood, and the only downside I see is that she would probably have less influence. (In particular, court mages probably don't get demenses.)

"Accredited?" you ask.

Artemis grimaces. "That would be the major problem, right there," she says. "Unlike knighthood, which Father can give unilaterally, to truly take over as Head Mage you'll be almost required to be recognized and accredited by the Marble Hall. Technically, Father doesn't have to have an accredited mage as Head Mage, but it's traditional. Pretty much every other Head Mage in the Kingdoms would raise a stink, and it'd make things harder for you."
I now see a second downside.

"Theoretically, all you need is an accredited mage in good standing to vouch for you. I'm sure Sypha would be able to convince Mistress Flarestone to do that, especially after she gets to see your talent firsthand. However, you would have to go to the Marble Hall itself to make it official, and they'll surely insist on their own testing in your… unique, case."

You perk up. "Your brother goes there, right? Apollo?"
I now see another perk.

Anyways, I'm glad Artemis raised another workable option. Especially since she raised a couple of other problems with the "do nothing" option.

The sun is shining. The air is warm, even this high up, and Mother be praised, you're having fun! You'd dithered for a minute, but in the end childish glee had won out. You'd put in so much work these past few weeks, surely nobody could begrudge you a bit of playtime?
I know I won't!

The man blinks a few times before swallowing. "Lad- Ryza, I have seen an entire flight of Whitewings doing synchronized formation flying, but that's got nothing on what you were doing."
The wonders of not needing to stay on a horse.

After talking to Kellan, you'd asked a few other people you'd met what they thought about dragons. The answers had… not painted your species in a good light. At all! Why had Artemis not warned you just how bad-
It's almost like she didn't want to hurt Ryza's feelings, but also has the emotional maturity and forethought of a teenager.

At this point in the story, the Fell Dragon himself appears. The dread overlord of dragonkind (you scoff, manakete didn't have overlords!)
Despite Shyrlonay's best efforts.
Which is surely unrelated to the fact that Ryza's nap seems to date to around the same time as this legend.

Artemis swallows. "I know this isn't what you want to hear, Ryza, but… I'm not sure you can. All magic depends on… on those stones, and humans won't give up magic. That healing staff Healer Clara used? It has stone powder in it as well." She frowns. "There are… rumors, that some snake-oil salesmen try to pass beaststone powder off as dragonstone, and it kind of works-"

"No. No I will not push the problem off onto another people, even if they're not people I know." You frown. "There… has to be another way. If humans want to have magic, that's fine, someone just needs to figure out another source… It won't be easy. It might take me a few centuries… but surely there has to be another way!"
On a scale of centuries, "all we need to do" is figure out how to make humans make humanstones, the way manakete did and...not-laguz still do. (Names are hard. I wouldn't have remembered Shirley's if it wasn't on the same page.) Then humans won't need to grind up other people's stones to do magic.
If only some emperor hadn't done a genocide, this would probably be a straightforward process. Or at least a process with a better-understood step 1.

So on our list of long-term plans, we should add "Talk to the animal-shifting people about their beaststones (and hope that they aren't also made from dragonstones)".



... If they use the dragonstone they found to make a tome then I vote that we burn the countess castle down anyway.
I disagree with this in strategy but agree in spirit.


[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.

We have a[nother?] long-term goal now. This will be a big step towards that
I assume this is in reference to the stoneless-tome thing? Yeah, that's a good point. It'll be easier to find a dragonstone alternative if we understand why humans think they need dragon dust.


Hopefully a completely unfounded crack theory... could the dragonstone in the cave be Father, and Mjolnir be dear Mother? I doubt it... but maybe? It would be a dramatic reveal for sure.
It could be, but I'm not sure how Ryza would even find out.

I like that we went from two tantalizing choices (at least for me :whistle:) for Ryza's future to three. I'm leaning towards the Head Mage route. It would give us the opportunity to spend more time learning about magic in the long term and we would have an excuse to finally get started on Runewrighting: Making Magical Masterpieces. I think Ryza would enjoy it more as a job. But the benefits, power, and protections that come with holding a noble title seem super useful, and I think Ryza would appreciate having more options to solve her problems and realize her desires in the future. Even if that newfound ability to solve problems comes with problems of its own. It would likely give her more agency and ability to protect manakete if more were to appear than if she were just head mage. I will have to think on it more.
Reminder that your votes don't count unless you X them.
Or that "head mage" also sounds like a court position with its own powers and privileges, if this was expressing uncertainty over which to vote for. Or you can just vote for both!


[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.
 
[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.

[X] You decide to wait. You still have a long life ahead of you, you don't need to rush into anything. You may not have an official place in the world, but Artemis likes you, and she'll be around for at least a few decades, enough for you to get settled and find out more about the world. Besides, being able to do things your way is kind of nice.
 
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[X] You'll follow through on Artemis's suggestion. You love magic, and you like to think you're good at it. Besides, you'd been planning on talking to Mistress Flarestone anyways. If you can become friends with her and the other Revisionists, they could probably help you get to the Marble Hall and get accredited, which would give you legitimacy in the world. You might even get to meet Apollo, and you think Artemis would like that. It'll all just take a while.
 
[x] You will take Archduke Letoro up on his offer, despite Artemis's reservations. A deer in the claw is worth three in the forest, after all, and it will give you a place in the world. It will be a challenge, having to adjust to what human society seems to expect, but you trust Artemis to ensure that you're treated fairly. Hopefully you'll be able to keep the fighting part of your role to a minimum, or at least point it at deserving targets.
 
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