What do you mean by at the front? Unless I'm reading all this wrong, he threadmarked all the chapters.
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I think you can afford one now."…I don't see the problem in getting a phone, but can we really afford one?"
Dad's smile came back. "I was browsing the store the other day and gauging the prices. So long as you don't want one of those smartphones, I think we're good."
I agree. Don't like when flashbacks take up large parts of a single chapter let alone an entire arc being from the past. Broke pace and flow.his suggestion is to tell the story linearly, not with a flashback like this
Cavaliere exists, Cavaliere Red would look cool.Good stuff my brother. Though, maybe you should put these chapters at the front. Also, I have a weapon recommendation as Devil Arms.
A motorcycle. Check out Kamen rider Kaixa motorcycle. Or Kamen rider Delta's motorcycle.
She's not really in denial though. She fully suspects that she triggered - what she doesn't believe in is magic/demons and so on. Everyone on Earth Bet consider Adepts and Myrrdin lunatics for believing in magic. Why would Taylor believe some random guy that she doesn't know ?Taylor's denial of her new abilities stood out as a bit weird.
Now, this bit is interesting for a whooooooooooole other reason.
First off, kudos to you for using Sophia's mom. The only other fanfic I've read that uses her was I'm HALPing I think it was called? I honestly don't think she gets enough attention.
Secondly, how long has this BBASO been around if Naomi's the one who started it?
Favorite parts of the update were getting context and then the going through the boxes at the end. Most things played out like how people probably imagined, but more context is always good. And the thing with Sophia's mom was unexpected, so it's still interesting. A breather period after high tension/actions is also good too. Looking forward to the second half!
Also I really like the fact that we got an in medias res start, and are now getting the setup. It really helped grab my attention and draw me in, especially since so many fics start at the locker.
The downtime chapters were very fun to write, if only just because i like the slice of life moments we rarely ever get.interestin that the child of a woman whose life goal is saving kids from abusive situations has a parahuman daughter. and the fact that said daughter is the one who caused such a situation.
Thanks for the chapters, it's good to see how Taylor got started and how Rodin corru... I mean mentored her.
I want to make this clear, writing Rodin was fucking difficult. Yes, he's fun to portray, but goddamn.HOLY THREADBOMB BATMAN! Gotta admit, wasn't expecting the 4k there.
Unlike everyone else, I must admit that, Rodin's introduction was amazing, and made me giggle. It was my favorite part, because it hit Rodin right on the head.
I little mix of both. Honestly, after doing this, I'm half-tempted just to hold off on posting anymore chapters until the whole arc is finished, but that's not fair to you guys. So I went and posted all the chapters I had done when my internet got its shit together.WE ARE NOT WORTHY!!!!!!!!! Seriously, that must of been a labor of love, or your internet was down for a bit. Hehe. Still, great updates!
They weren't late this time, though. The incident LITERALLY happened a few minutes ago and they were close by. Unfortunately, this also means that Assault missed Rodin dunking on Hookwolf.I really hope she listens to Rhodin, nothing is more annoying than the Taylor who laughs at the supernatural while not amazed she has powers.
And Assault and Battery........truly the PRT is always damn late to the party. Can't wait for the action to start.
I love the Bayonetta/Devil May Cry universe. The PRT would shit themselves if they knew how powerful Rhodin is.😈👿
This was a one time thing I think. My internet was down and I had nothing but free time, so...
I agree. Don't like when flashbacks take up large parts of a single chapter let alone an entire arc being from the past. Broke pace and flow.
Otherwise arc was mostly good. Taylor's denial of her new abilities stood out as a bit weird. Her time at the bar was interesting.
I did warn you guys ahead of time that arc 2 was going to be the "how we got here" point ahead of time. Besides, Devil May Cry 5 kind of did the same thing, though unlike me, it was handled a whole lot better and didn't break the flow it had. But that's neither here nor there.She's not really in denial though. She fully suspects that she triggered - what she doesn't believe in is magic/demons and so on. Everyone on Earth Bet consider Adepts and Myrrdin lunatics for believing in magic. Why would Taylor believe some random guy that she doesn't know ?
The downtime chapters were very fun to write, if only just because i like the slice of life moments we rarely ever get.
Using Naomi didn't really occur to me until I re-read Sophia's interlude when Regent fucks her up, which was probably the chapter that made me smile the most. Granted, I think Alec went a little too far when he had Sophia threaten her family, but otherwise, it was karmic justice at its finest. And its funny @TheStranger should mention I'm HALPing, because that's partially what inspired me to include Naomi in this.
As for the BBASO, they've been around for at least three years, which plays a little into why Taylor's never heard of it until now. They're still a small organization compared to their parent group the Youth Guard, and given that everyone is obsessed with parahumans and superpowers, it makes sense why Taylor wouldn't have heard of them until now.
I want to make this clear, writing Rodin was fucking difficult. Yes, he's fun to portray, but goddamn.
I little mix of both. Honestly, after doing this, I'm half-tempted just to hold off on posting anymore chapters until the whole arc is finished, but that's not fair to you guys. So I went and posted all the chapters I had done when my internet got its shit together.
They weren't late this time, though. The incident LITERALLY happened a few minutes ago and they were close by. Unfortunately, this also means that Assault missed Rodin dunking on Hookwolf.
That's his only real regret, to be honest. Poor Battery, she married a manchild.
This was a one time thing I think. My internet was down and I had nothing but free time, so...
I did warn you guys ahead of time that arc 2 was going to be the "how we got here" point ahead of time. Besides, Devil May Cry 5 kind of did the same thing, though unlike me, it was handled a whole lot better and didn't break the flow it had. But that's neither here nor there.
On a side note, I was half-tempted to put the newest chapters into a SINGLE chapter, but I decided against it and kept the chapters as they were.
At this point, Taylor's trying to make sense of what's happening around her. She knows she's Triggered, but at the same time, she's a little skeptical because of some issues. Issues from Winslow, unfortunately. Thankfully, those issues will be resolved by the time she takes up the name Vergil.
Last thing is that there will be two interludes this chapter, the first being with Rodin and him being "questioned" by a Protectorate suit. That will be the next chapter, actually. The second one will be published after "Style" is completed and set-up the events for Arc 3, "Muscle."
Which ties into a question that may or may not be spoilery for what I have planned that arc, but is very important since even my co-writer, who is in charge of planning the majority of that arc, is stumped.
The question being, How do Cluster Triggers work? I mean, I've looked at the wiki, but I've been told its incomplete or incorrect at times, and I've just gotten to the segment with Goddess in Ward, but I'm still a little confused. My main bit of confusion is in regards to the Shards involved in said Cluster Trigger.
Are you still planning this? I've blown through all the Greg stories i could find and i'm in desperate need of more.I just wnat to point out that the weapons in DMC and Bayonetta are completely different despite sharing the demonic nature. As we have seen in Bayonetta 2, Rodin forged a vessel of some sort before absorbing Alrauna into it. In DMC series, it was either by forging a strong emotional bond an/or wwiping the floor with it.
Also, I have been meaning to do a Worm/Bayonetta story though I am planning it to be Greg Veder as MC. Also, what wa sthe substance used in the locker? The one with Taylor locked in it.
Yeah, I don't think I'll include anything like that in this fanfic.Yeah, but unlike Cavaliers that can turn into a pair of chainsaw like blades, it's a giant robot armed with missiles, blades and guns