Devastation Comes In Big Packages [Planetary Annihilation/Multicross SI]
Next Stop: MLP Time Loops! This looks like a job for the most powerful psychiatrists in all of fiction.
Jackercracks
In a British accent
- Location
- England
It was sad, but fitting. Sure another commander is also doing a similar thing, but the devil is in the details. You made it work, the other one so far... hasn't.
- Location
- Germany
- Pronouns
- He/Him
What 'normal'?
Anon42
Some random dude
- Location
- Sweden
I look at the tags, then at the story, and then I make a skeptical face at the screen.
I feel like the "just for fun" and "mindless fun" got stomped flat and kicked out into the blind eternities somewhere along the way and was replaced with... well, this. No offense, but I personally found this arc to be rather depressing and just... meh.
I feel like the "just for fun" and "mindless fun" got stomped flat and kicked out into the blind eternities somewhere along the way and was replaced with... well, this. No offense, but I personally found this arc to be rather depressing and just... meh.
I think you mean Physiologists they don't drug problems away.
Physiologist can't mean what you imply it means... I know the roots of those words, please don't tell me people didn't rape language in the way you imply they raped it...
Psychiatrist means "healer of the mind", just because modern drugs are effective when something goes wrong chemically and thus prevalent doesn't mean that Psychatrists in general are people who "drug problems away".
Psychiatrist means "healer of the mind", just because modern drugs are effective when something goes wrong chemically and thus prevalent doesn't mean that Psychatrists in general are people who "drug problems away".
- Location
- 'Murica
No.
The current tone isn't my thing at all. But that's okay, I'll just show myself out not look down on you or say that it isn't well-written or anything.
But you can't go from something this horrific to something light-hearted and silly without ~1/2 million words describing how he got better over time or another timeskip that completely changes the character, which I hope you realize by now is bad writing.
There's a moral saying, that you can go from calm negotiation to brutal war easily but going the other way is difficult. Silliness and seriousness work in a rather similar manner.
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I personally love it when that happens. It's human and realistic. We move on. We grieve, we rage, but the next day we need to get back to work. Because the work needs to be done. And then when something silly happens, we laugh, because it was survival of the fittest and being sad forever is not a survival trait.
Wasn't planning to flip him around or whatever. It's a process, obviously.
Still, on the one hand I have people wanting a jump away from seriousness right off, others who think that the seriousness was right on, and so on and so forth. Huh.
The Network Functions, and will continue to do so. Update'll be later tonight, so I can't wait to see reactions to it one way or another.
Still, on the one hand I have people wanting a jump away from seriousness right off, others who think that the seriousness was right on, and so on and so forth. Huh.
The Network Functions, and will continue to do so. Update'll be later tonight, so I can't wait to see reactions to it one way or another.
Yarudazuigu
Frostbyte's overlord.
- Location
- Poland
Dude, you write very very well!
Your protagonist, obviously, is a person who did not embrace his machine-part and keeps struggling with the baggage of his own humanity. I find it fascinating.
Is the "son" a sort of alpha-fork of him without the emotional damage from the full-scale Commander war?
There will be shit-storm, won't it be?
Your protagonist, obviously, is a person who did not embrace his machine-part and keeps struggling with the baggage of his own humanity. I find it fascinating.
Is the "son" a sort of alpha-fork of him without the emotional damage from the full-scale Commander war?
There will be shit-storm, won't it be?
ShineUCrazyStar
Grossly Incandescent
- Location
- Being the Sun
In future news, author torroar continues to break new bounds by being the first ever to insert a Commander SI into an eroge setting!
When reached for comment on the frontlines of "Monster Girl Quest" world, the Network had this to say,
"What in the fresh hell am I even here for? Like what am I even supposed to do here?!?"
(j/k
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Culture.Any hints? Your commander sounds like he could use a lay over in a setting on the noble-bright side of the sliding scale.
Like Star Trek, or...... that's the only one I can think of.
Strunkriidiisk
THE LEGEND
- Location
- Canada
- Pronouns
- He/Him
In future news, author torroar continues to break new bounds by being the first ever to insert a Commander SI into an eroge setting!
When reached for comment on the frontlines of "Monster Girl Quest" world, the Network had this to say,
"What in the fresh hell am I even here for? Like what am I even supposed to do here?!?"
(j/k
Tantric therapy?
Massgamer
Advance toward the Future
- Location
- The Future
That's most likely for the best really.
I suppose that is fair.
Though...I doubt any family on Earth in RL can properly prepare someone for being responsible for the casual destruction of so many innocents in both Star Wars and Stargate.
Either way, after having to kill his own children, I'm pretty sure he's within some rights somewhere to just want to leave and lay his head.
Though...I doubt any family on Earth in RL can properly prepare someone for being responsible for the casual destruction of so many innocents in both Star Wars and Stargate.
Either way, after having to kill his own children, I'm pretty sure he's within some rights somewhere to just want to leave and lay his head.