IndigoPhoenix
Devourer of Citrus
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Huh, that's where that went
Brockton's Celestial Forge (Worm/Jumpchain)
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Huh, that's where that went
Steakthedog
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I mean a brick of gold makes a good door stop, so who knows what went into the doorstop.
BarbaCoPut
Voluta indomita
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Ugh... I want to make a callback to the great movie The Man from Earth, but saying it would be spoilery... If you haven't watched it. Go. Best scifi without special effects.
5th dimensional door stopper
Michigan Man Discovers His Barn Doorstop Is Actually a Meteorite Worth $100,000
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Steakthedog
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In my case it's a story bout one of grand-uncles if I remember correctly, he had a brick sized bar of either gold or silver that he used as a doorstop, had it wrapped in paper ya see, so it was hidden in plain sight, and it apparently looked just like a regular brick wrapped in paper.
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That movie is so underrated!
You can't really say anything about it because everything links to spoilers, I also recommend anyone who hasn't seen it to go and watch it.
Yeah, that movie was amazing! I thought it would be boring but I was so engrossed that I didn't even notice the time.
Registered an account just to say this, because this story has me baffled.
The point-of-view chapters are consistently some of the best I've read in Worm fanfiction. They're each a joy to read, with distinct and interesting voices. The Leet and Blasto POVs were superbly well-written and compelling, and I could feel those characters come to life.
The tech-heavy normal chapters are, in contrast, often kind of a slog? What feels like thousands of words all to repeat the same general pattern, over and over again. The small tidbits of characterization that shine through are excellent, but feel like they are buried in an ocean of gray slop. I feel my eyes start to skim through multiple paragraphs as I search for sections where characters interact or stuff happens. Not powers growing, or numbers getting bigger, or stuff being built, but actual stuff happening in the story sense.
The quality whiplash has me feeling some kind of way. Either the technical stuff is a pet passion of the author that they have to repress during a day job writing, or this is some elaborate experiment.
The point-of-view chapters are consistently some of the best I've read in Worm fanfiction. They're each a joy to read, with distinct and interesting voices. The Leet and Blasto POVs were superbly well-written and compelling, and I could feel those characters come to life.
The tech-heavy normal chapters are, in contrast, often kind of a slog? What feels like thousands of words all to repeat the same general pattern, over and over again. The small tidbits of characterization that shine through are excellent, but feel like they are buried in an ocean of gray slop. I feel my eyes start to skim through multiple paragraphs as I search for sections where characters interact or stuff happens. Not powers growing, or numbers getting bigger, or stuff being built, but actual stuff happening in the story sense.
The quality whiplash has me feeling some kind of way. Either the technical stuff is a pet passion of the author that they have to repress during a day job writing, or this is some elaborate experiment.
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Please, no more.
Lord has addressed the pacing issue to death at this point.
TLDR : No, he will not change his writing style to what you guys think is better because the last time he tried it, he nearly got burnt out on the story.
So no, the pacing and the way the story is structured will not be changing.
This isn't a Worm story with the Celestial Forge as the power.
This is a Celestial Forge story that just happens to be set in Worm.
Subrosian_Smithy
endless
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It is a writing experiment, yes.
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Lord said he writes it for perk interaction he wished jumpchain stories would have so it's the base and not going to change.
Cave_Canem
Miniature Cyberwolf
Honestly this is the best description of this story I've seen.
The Worm stuff is mostly there to show how other people react to the slowly building mass of power interactions and neuroses that is Joe.
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That's another good description for Joe: Slowly building mass of power interactions and neuroses.
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A few weeks(?) ago I saw someone commenting on putting links to jumps in the wiki, was it here? because I found a repository of links for, as far as I can tell, all of the jumps ever, including sb and qq so it would help them.
And I guess anyone else that wants to quickly find specific doc.
Here it is
And I guess anyone else that wants to quickly find specific doc.
Here it is
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Welcome.
Yes, this story was (is) an experiment that exploded in popularity (to the point where it spawned multiple clones... or maybe it's a genre now ?) about using the celestial forge as a power source. So yeah, the tinker chapters are there to stay.
Sure, but he also said he was fine with us discussing about it, even if he wasn't going to change the story.
I personally agree with his criticism, but maybe it's because I enjoy Joe interactions with the world a lot more than his alone tinker time.
All pacing are from the reader perspective.
(And, well, 6 months for 2 days is taylor-varga-slow.)
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Why is your TLDR longer than the preceding statement?
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"I came for the OP HAX MC bullshit, but stayed for the fantastic character interactions" pretty much summs up my opinion of this fic
I think a lot of this whiplash is a result of uneven editing attention. The story we get is only a light revision of the initial draft, still riddled with minor technical and spelling problems. But a proper editing pass would not only catch the minor errors but address larger composition* weaknesses and direct extra attention to weak sections. This isn't a criticism of LordRoustabout's skill. Even among professional novelists, very few writers do such a good job on the first draft that their work wouldn't benefit from editorial attention and a major revision.
For this story in particular, the composition is difficult to revise because narrative events are tied to word count. It's still possible, but it'd take more than a week per chapter. However, some of the 3rd party PoV sections are not tied to Joe's word count, which frees LordRoustabout to move paragraphs around after the fact, which makes a structural revision feasible within a week. I think the quality increase from this sort of revision is a significant part of what you're picking up.
* basically, which events and thoughts are explicitly depicted, what order they appear in, and how much detail is dedicated to each one
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In about 5 to 8 hours yes
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Coil was mentioned by Alex when Joe entered the bar.
EDIT: Sorry, walked into the bar like he owned the place followed by his team.
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I tried to describe BCF to a friend.
Apparently her conclusion was that it was a Wreck-it Ralph and Fix-it Felix fanfic with Joe as a super nerdy Felix MC and nearly every other cape in the story as a version of Ralph with superpowers and severe mental trauma.
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Which.... somewhat fair.
Then I tried to explain that, like Joss Whedon's Firefly series, the story was really about the characters, their relationships, individual histories, and development/growth.
She responded with a smile and a comforting pat on my shoulder.
Someday being a nerd will be cool?
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Thank you very much because I always get anxious around release periods
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And yet it feels like the last chapter just dropped. This update schedule is amazing.
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I wonder however if it is actually Coil's body double I can't remember if it was canon or fanon that he employed someone who looked like him within a costume to take his place.
His shard might be able to pick up if it is actually Coil and not a bodyguard and if it does Joe might just accidently cause some crap to go down
His shard might be able to pick up if it is actually Coil and not a bodyguard and if it does Joe might just accidently cause some crap to go down