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Advice and Trust [NGE]

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Strypgia said:
Kaworu's head swiveled towards kitchen and the entrance hall to the door.
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Shouldn't there be an article before 'kitchen', too?
Strypgia said:
Asuka gave him her best 'fick dich und geh sterben' glare
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Ouch, that's even harsher than her usual "Du nervst, geh sterben" one. No wonder the guy sought to vacate the premises as quickly as he could. :rofl:
Strypgia said:
Asuka darted her hand towards the 'close' button as fast as she could, but the automatic safties wouldn't allow her to catch his head in the door in any case.
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'safeties'; the other thing sounds like a bunch of packets of Capri Sun.
Strypgia said:
Please listen to Shinji's proposal."
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This is missing the opening apostrophe.

And boy, is Misato in for a wild ride. Skip the beer, Asuka; get her the bottle of Shochu from the top of the refrigerator!
 
Strypgia said:
Rei pursed her lips, but nodded, and sat down on the floor next to Kaworu, still holding his hand. "We were the first. There were no others," she began once more.
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Rei: "Long ago, I Lilith, the shapeshifting master of darkness went into space to help preserve a dying race as did the stupid fish. Spaceship!me thought spaceship!he was still cute and spent too much time staring at his aft and thinking we should have gone out or something to watch where I was going, and that's how we wound up on the same planet."
JumperPrime said:
Mistao: "Pen-Pen, get off my shoulder. You're heavy."
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Pen-pen: "Wark." (TN: "And which of us is the navigator here?")
 
DB_Explorer said:
Kaworu: "Parley. I invoke the right of parley. According to the Code of the Brethren set down by the pirates Morgan and Bartholomew, you have to take me to your captain."
Misato: .... "I know the Code."
Kaworu: "If an adversary demands parley, you can do them no harm until the parley is complete."
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Guard 1: What's your purpose in NERV, 'Ms Yamada'?
Guard 2: Yeah, and no lies!
Misato: Well then, I confess. It is my intention to commandeer one of these ships, pick up a crew in Tokyo-3, collect an Eva from space, raid, pillage, plunder and otherwise pilfer my weasely black guts out.
Guard 2: ...I said no lies!

Matt R said:
Faintly surprised Asuka didn't try to pin it on a negligent discharge (Lord knows two attacks on Misato's kids would have her enough on edge to make slipping up sound feasible); eh, whatever works.
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That would involve paperwork, and probably an investigation.
samdamandias said:
Rei: "Long ago, I Lilith, the shapeshifting master of darkness
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"Long ago I, Tabris, the shapeshifting master of prettyboys unleashed an UNSPEAKABLE EVIL! The end!"
"...That's not how it went you stupid fish."
 
Strypgia said:
She squeezed in front of him, interposing herself between Misato's gun and her boyfriend.
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Conga line of volunteers. :)
Strypgia said:
"Major Katsuragi! One of our-Oh... ah, Second Child. One of our sniper teams saw a sudden flash in here that appeared like a possible gunshot. Is everything alright?" The black-suited agent looked suddenly uncertain. Asuka did not look like someone fleeing a shot. She looked like she was about to punch the much taller man.

Asuka gave him her best 'fick dich und geh sterben' glare and growled, "If someone had been shooting at anyone in this apartment, I think I'd know all about it, especially after today. We just had a bulb blow out when Misato flipped a switch. It's nothing. Now go away and let us sleep. My boyfriend has had a shitty week, and you clowns aren't helping by banging on the door this late." She crossed her arms and practically dared him to do anything but slink away.

He looked around Asuka and stuck his head in the doorway to peer down the short entry hall. The shadowed silence and lack of screaming or more gunshots coming from around the corner that cut off his line of sight seemed to satisfy him. "Sorry to bother you. Goodnight," he said curtly, and stepped back.
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*Asuka makes note* "How to get away with murder..." :p

Strypgia said:
"J-just some ramen and a beer. Please."
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Might as well just have a beer broth. :V

Well, looks like they managed to sway Misato for the time being, but I guess Checkov's bullet is now even more of a thing. >_>
 
So something I've had cooking for a while, my first omake!

Strypgia said:
"Asuka, he's an Angel," Misato growled through clenched teeth.
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Maya: It's an Angel.
Makoto: It's an Angeru.
Shigeru: It's a boner.
Rei: Dang it Kaworu put your pants back on.
Kaworu: What… oh right sorry.
Misato: What the hell are you guys doing here?
Maya: Oh right, the Commander sent me to get stuff for a sandwich, he said the NERV cafeteria sucks and Shinji is the reincarnation of Julia Child.
Shinji: Julia who?
Misato: Some old lady who was a really good cook, her house was swallowed in a giant sink hole during Second Impact.
Kaworu: Actually that happened before 2nd Impact, it was the first thing Father did when the Spear was removed.
Misato: What… really?
Kaworu: Yeah… he really didn't like her; I think she inadvertently delayed 2nd Impact by about 50 years.
Asuka: Well that explains why Shinji is so awesome at cooking despite not even being old enough to drive.
Gendo: Dang it where is my sandwich?
Misato: Why is he acting all weird, he doesn't even care that we are all here together and plotting and stuff?
Kaworu: I believe I have the answer; we seem to be experiencing some kind of quantum leak.
Makoto: Quantum Leap? I love that show!
Kaworu: Ugh, as I was saying another reality is bleeding over into our world, it seems to be something about a bridge.
Rei: Abridged, that must be why I suddenly feel the urge to slap Shinji around and say demeaning things to him.
Shinji: Hey guys I found the mayonnaise.
Rei: … Among other reasons…
 
Notspecialdude said:
The power of love brings you to the bargaining table. And thus the cards are on the table Heh....

Now end game can begin proper.
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Oh yes. Every Chapter title is quite intentionally meaningful.

Remember what Chapter 12 is going to be named? 😈
TheDarkFreak said:
Hmm, I think this passage was rearranged. Asuka "likewise closes her eyes", but I don't think Shinji's mentioned closing his own eyes until after that point. (He closes his eyes earlier in a sigh, but looks at Misato afterward.)
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Correct guess. Initially, Asuka stepped up after Shinji spoke, but I decided I wanted his line to come last. Fixed.
Ranma-sensei said:
Shouldn't there be an article before 'kitchen', too?
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Ranma-sensei said:
This is missing the opening apostrophe.
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Both products of it being about 0200 when I wrote that part. Fixed.
Ranma-sensei said:
Ouch, that's even harsher than her usual "Du nervst, geh sterben" one. No wonder the guy sought to vacate the premises as quickly as he could.
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Courtesy of our favorite lady from München, who provided a little late-night German help. :)
Asuka: "Rei is helping me develop techniques to actually set people on fire with a glare! Hooray for AT-Field research!"
Sir_Gaea said:
Also, damn Shinji. You are getting to sleep on the couch tonight for that move. With Asuka cuddled up to you. Something something there are limits.
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Just a bit. Asuka knew not to interrupt at that moment, but she was about ready to scream at Shinji for taking a risk like that. She's going to express her complaint later... while simultaneously kissing him so hard she might break his AT-Field for having the wit and determination to actually do that and defuse things safely. She's also going to be somewhat mollified at the way Shinji is having a lot of shakes after the fact, since he was about to freak out too. He kept his cool because his friends and loves needed him to. So he did.
 
A couple of points I forgot to mention. First, I agree that with the aura around Asuka, section 2 probably thought "If she says everything is okay, we should not get involved". Second, with how Shinji reminded Misato of how Seele was truly responsible for the second impact, I think he inadvertently said humans are the real monsters. Mind you I don't think humanity should be condemned because of Seele's Actions.
 
Strypgia said:
Oh yes. Every Chapter title is quite intentionally meaningful.

Remember what Chapter 12 is going to be named? 😈
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It translates to Twilight of the Gods, right?

Of course, this means it's either going to be a devastating train-wreck or a glorious dance of death.

Actually, heck, this is Eva, so why not both? :p
 
samdamandias said:
Rei: "Long ago, I Lilith, the shapeshifting master of darkness went into space to help preserve a dying race as did the stupid fish. Spaceship!me thought spaceship!he was still cute and spent too much time staring at his aft and thinking we should have gone out or something to watch where I was going, and that's how we wound up on the same planet."
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.... shipgirl (ala Azure Lane or Kancolle) Rei... which given everyone being named for ships iirc gets easy...
 
Critian Caceorte said:
If I had the time, I'd photoshop Rei's face on the battleship. That is how these "shipgirls" look, yes?
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A little low effort, but for the fun of it, does this work for ya?


I originally thought about sticking Asuka's face on one of the ships in the background as a bonus, but the perspective wasn't right. :p
 
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Strypgia said:
Silence rang for thirty seconds before Misato hoarsely said, "J-just some ramen and a beer. Please."
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If she sticks to just one beer, that'll be impressive.
BG_Character_592 said:
"Wow, that was easier than I expected. They really are as incompetent as I thought."
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grommile said:
In the Section Two guy's head: One of the people I am supposed to be keeping alive is telling me to fuck off. I am not in the mood to argue with an angry red-headed devil who I know beat someone's skull in with a bedpan. Some good shochu is waiting to be drunk, and so am I.
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^^This.
Wixelt said:
It translates to Twilight of the Gods, right?

Of course, this means it's either going to be a devastating train-wreck or a glorious dance of death.
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Actually, for the first time, I'm hoping it just means Kaworu starts sparkling.
Critian Caceorte said:
If I had the time, I'd photoshop Rei's face on the battleship. That is how these "shipgirls" look, yes?
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The Ayanami was a destroyer, not a battleship.
Wixelt said:
I originally thought about sticking Asuka's face on one of the ships in the background as a bonus, but the perspective wasn't right. :p
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Also, both the Langley and Soryu were aircraft carriers. (Pedantic mode off.)
 
necrolectric said:
I'd be willing to bet that the next chapter is going to open with Asuka charging into the kitchen as fast as she can with an injured foot, brandishing her crutch like it's some kind of club, while screaming something to the effect of "You picked the wrong house, fool!"
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Strypgia said:
The door to Asuka and Shinji's room slammed open and a furious Second Child rocketed out. "OK, YOU SON OF A-" She cut off and skidded to a halt as she saw the frozen tableau in the living room. "...Scheiße." Asuka lowered the aluminium crutch she had run in with, ready to unleash it on another SEELE gunman.
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Ah, it feels good to be right.

It feels even better to see just how far these crazy kids are willing to go for each other's sake, and to see Misato being successfully talked down.
 
Orangey9108 said:
Random thought I had for a possible ending of the story:
*PenPen turns to a man in a metallic jacket*
"Okay, they've fallen in love, everybody's happy, disaster averted... why haven't I leaped yet, Al? "
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Notice how PenPen noticed us kissing for the first time. Perhaps he used cosmic force to will us together.........PENPEN IS THE TRUE HERO OF THIS STORY!!!! Either that......or a meme that I use to make Asuka laugh.
 
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