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Forces of Change, An Experimental 'Replacement Quest'

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Ah, I thought that the game was about manipulating the text in the information tab, with the updates being about the effects on them.

In that case how about a mystical element to this young world.
[X] Change word: The Spirits on the planets surface begin to move as gravity fluctuates according to which moon is where.




[X] Add Sentence: This planet is a gigantic planet made mostly of a molten iron core, and a packed dirt crust that's riddled with mana crystals of various sizes and alignments and Two small moons maintain stable orbits at different distances from the planets surface, deep underground of the planet is ruin upon ruin of broken Ancient machinery.
 
[X] The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals."

[X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. It's surface is dotted with shallow craters all bearing rare and otherworldly materials from the asteroids that made them. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals. "
WallFlower said:
Ah, I thought that the game was about manipulating the text in the information tab, with the updates being about the effects on them.

In that case how about a mystical element to this young world.
[X] Change word: The Spirits on the planets surface begin to move as gravity fluctuates according to which moon is where.




[X] Add Sentence: This planet is a gigantic planet made mostly of a molten iron core, and a packed dirt crust that's riddled with mana crystals of various sizes and alignments and Two small moons maintain stable orbits at different distances from the planets surface, deep underground of the planet is ruin upon ruin of broken Ancient machinery.
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I think we are supposed to focus on the text in between " and "
Crawkid said:
"There are smaller celestial bodies in the orbit of the first planet. Smaller, but able to exude a force upon the world below. The water on the planets surface begin to move as gravity fluctuates according to which moon is where. There are two of them, with one being closer than the other. There is much possibility here for creation. For now though, there is very little on these moons.

The closer moon looks to be silver and green, its surface is barren and rocky, with patches thin green crystaline structures in fractal growth, almost appearing to be vegetation. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals.

The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals. "
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This in other words. Might I suggest changing something other than the planets water to spirits? Perhaps the moons "stone" core?
 
WallFlower said:
Ah, I thought that the game was about manipulating the text in the information tab, with the updates being about the effects on them.

In that case how about a mystical element to this young world.
[X] Change word: The Spirits on the planets surface begin to move as gravity fluctuates according to which moon is where.




[X] Add Sentence: This planet is a gigantic planet made mostly of a molten iron core, and a packed dirt crust that's riddled with mana crystals of various sizes and alignments and Two small moons maintain stable orbits at different distances from the planets surface, deep underground of the planet is ruin upon ruin of broken Ancient machinery.
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the first part is fine, the second part is still focused on the planet

@Randino Treviani has the right of it, and i apologize if if i hadnt made it clear.

The information tab isnt there to tell you what youre voting on, its just there to tell newcomers where we're at (and needs to be updated as well)
 
[X] The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals."

[X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. A broken ruin of ancient machinery is lodged deep beneath it's surface, almost reaching to it's core. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals

Hope this works?
 
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SleepyCaterpilar said:
[X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. It's core, deep underground, is ruin upon ruin of broken Ancient machinery. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals

Hope this works?
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Not quite. It somewhat contradicts the previous sentence establishing that the core is solid stone." A broken ruin of ancient machinery is lodged deep beneath it's surface, almost reaching to it's core. " Might work better.
 
The moons are nice. I see potential in them.
I like how it gives us the implication to imply stuff like;
"There appears to be no weather, no pants, and no animals."
With it being worth mentioning about the moon suggesting things about other moons.
 
alright im back, i had some laptop troubles is all
Scheduled vote count started by Crawkid on May 5, 2024 at 6:25 AM, finished with 12 posts and 4 votes.
  • [X] Add Sentence: This planet is a gigantic planet made mostly of a molten iron core, and a packed dirt crust that's riddled with mana crystals of various sizes and alignments and Two small moons maintain stable orbits at different distances from the planets surface, deep underground of the planet is ruin upon ruin of broken Ancient machinery.
    [X] The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals."
    [X] Change: There is a singular colossal lake on the surface, surrounded by a ring of Rainforests.
    [X] Change word: The Spirits on the planets surface begin to move as gravity fluctuates according to which moon is where.
    [X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. It's surface is dotted with shallow craters all bearing rare and otherworldly materials from the asteroids that made them. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals. "
    [X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. A broken ruin of ancient machinery is lodged deep beneath it's surface, almost reaching to it's core. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals
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So heres the thing...the winning vote to add a sentence is still focused on changing the planet. And there is a tie between ones focused on the moons.

We will have to revote, or have a tiebreaker.
 
[X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. A broken ruin of ancient machinery is lodged deep beneath it's surface, almost reaching to it's core. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals

one of mine is already passing, so I can give this one to the other voter.
 
Randino Treviani said:
[X] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. A broken ruin of ancient machinery is lodged deep beneath it's surface, almost reaching to it's core. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals

one of mine is already passing, so I can give this one to the other voter.
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great, thank you so much
 
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    • Change: [-] The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals."

    Add: [-] The further one is silver and pink, a barren dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. A broken ruin of ancient machinery is lodged deep beneath it's surface, almost reaching to it's core. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals


    Things move within the pink moon. At first, it was just the crystals. Within the ravine, they grew in every aspect. Size, power, and abundance.

    And then....and then- Something is wrong. rips begin to appear in the fabric of reality and then, though there can be no proper explanation for it, an ancient work of machinery appears to have been shoved into the ravine, filling it and even cracking it further. The whole thing appears to be almost city like in structure, and nearly reaches the core of the moon.

    "There are smaller celestial bodies in the orbit of the first planet. Smaller, but able to exude a force upon the world below. The water on the planets surface begin to move as gravity fluctuates according to which moon is where. There are two of them, with one being closer than the other. There is much possibility here for creation. For now though, there is very little on these moons.

    The closer moon looks to be silver and green, its surface is barren and rocky, with patches thin green crystaline structures in fractal growth, almost appearing to be vegetation. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals.

    The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. In most of these cracks, the presence of crystals is such that they appear to even be spilling out onto the surface. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals. However, one ravine is filled with a mechanical wonder with no known origins. "

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    What do you guys think of me setting up a discord for my quests and stories? That way you guys know whats being worked on and why I might not be active. Like this last was was because of a lack of laptop, but i could still communicate by mobile discord
     
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    • [X] Change word: The closer moon looks to be silver and green, its surface is barren and rocky, with patches thin green crystaline structures in fractal growth, almost appearing to be vegetation. There appears to be no weather, not plants, and no animals.

    There are many mysteries, but one thing is for certain whatever that that is it is NOT a tree on that hill.
     
    Huh, seems interesting. I'll join and see how this goes. Let's add something silly to the mix.

    [X] Add sentence: "The closer moon looks to be silver and green, its surface is barren and rocky, with patches thin green crystaline structures in fractal growth, almost appearing to be vegetation. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals. That appearance is merely an illusion produced by a highly intelligent Emerald Space Octopus that feeds on the green crystals."
     
    The Octopus sentence provides is a nice spin on the word Appear.

    I'm moving my idea of NOT to the pink planet to prevent potential conflict with my idea.
    Don't be fooled those are NOT animals living on that planet with mechanical wonders.

    [X] Change word: The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. In most of these cracks, the presence of crystals is such that they appear to even be spilling out onto the surface. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and NOT animals. However, one ravine is filled with a mechanical wonder with no known origins. "



    [X] Add sentence: "The closer moon looks to be silver and green, its surface is barren and rocky, with patches thin green crystaline structures in fractal growth, almost appearing to be vegetation. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and no animals. That appearance is merely an illusion produced by a highly intelligent Emerald Space Octopus that feeds on the green crystals."
     
    [X] Change word: The further one is silver and pink, a bountiful dustbowl with ravines carved deep into its solid stone core, and fully lined with large chunky crystals that would hum with their own energy, if there was sound out there. In most of these cracks, the presence of crystals is such that they appear to even be spilling out onto the surface. There appears to be no weather, no plants, and NOT animals. However, one ravine is filled with a mechanical wonder with no known origins. "
     
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