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Marked for Death: A Rational Naruto Quest

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Eisenhelm said:
yes!, it makes me so happy that Gaku gets the recognition he deserves even among ninja.
of course that is dangerous because it makes him a target for kidnapping/assasination but still.
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Gaku and Honoka are the two characters I would flip the table for. If they die, the fate of their killers should make Orochimaru queasy and cause Hidan to question our sanity.

For his birthday, we should commission the Nara to calculate how many civilian lives Gaku has credibly saved (e.g., how much more Uplift has been accomplished because he saved our ass so many times) and get him something representative.
 
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FaintlySorcerous said:
I think it would be a good idea but it won't get my vote. (No shade - I think that your plan has good ideas but I have other priorities right now, and I think some of what you're trying to do is better suited to a Velorien update.) Adding a sanity-check with Mari seems like a good idea, too - she might nix the idea altogether. (She was the one that caught us the first time we tried to handle Dogs travelling etc.)

My desired approach for this is bringing it up when we're having another conversation with Cannai as a single bullet point and then proceeding to Noburi once we have a green light. My opinion (maybe wrong!) is that you're putting the cart before the horse by having that much of the plan constitute talking to Toads, albeit indirectly.

I think the as-close-to-optimized-as-possible approach would be something like...
  • Sanity-check with Mari.
  • Tone: genuinely respectful. Trying hard not to make the same mistakes again.
    • Seeking to understand Dog culture/politics as much as anything. (Understanding helps us be a productive member of the pack.)
  • It would be of tremendous value to us, personally, to have a Toad in Dog territory.
    • Explain Noburi's abilities.
  • Would you be open to this?
    • What value would it have for you? What costs?
    • What could we offer to make this attractive?
  • Could the Toad stay with the Pangolins near Dog?
However, that's both long and probably a full scene with Cannai, where you have Noburi stuff and a substantial meeting going on, too, so I think it would kill any chance of QM-had-fun XP.
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Good news! We actually got permission from Cannai the first time we tried to do this.

RandomOTP said:
  • (if Mari, Cannai, and Gamabunta approve) Have Noburi ask around for a Toad Diplomat to Dog Territory
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FaintlySorcerous said:
[x] Action Plan: Surreal Estate

General Dog and Toad theming would be cool and possibly a draw for Summons. Pulling Arachnids in for architectural consults would be cool, too.

KEI took the approach of having its members contribute to the decoration - we can do that, as well.

I worry a bit that we shouldn't advertise our Uchiha blood (that's a clan secret, credibly?) and that some of this could be seen as stealing valour. The sanity-check with Mari should catch that, though - maybe add the finances bit under it, so it's more obvious it's a general sanity check?
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Edits made. I think the Uchiha thing isn't a secret? And we can plausibly frame the art as as "long lost relative came home and is proud of his roots".
 
FaintlySorcerous said:
If you can link to the part of the update where that was confirmed, my stance changes. (Things have made their way into winning plans previously that didn't happen.)

Alternately, @eaglejarl and @Velorien, can we assume we have the green light?
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Here you go boss! Hope that works for you

Velorien said:
Noburi is going to ask around the Toad Clan, but he is not optimistic that any toad would be interested in undertaking the epic journey to Dog without a compelling reason.
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Velorien said:
The man stared at Mummy. "How do you know that… oh. Oh."

He frowned, and suddenly looked an awful lot more intimidating.

"You're the whore who made Satoshi try to betray the clan. He could have had his pick of any girl in the Fire Country, but no, you had to come along and ruin everything for him."

Mummy turned pale.

"What did you think would happen?" the man demanded. "Did you think we'd just let you steal the Sharingan, here across the sea where we had no control over what you did with it? Were you that stupid? Well, a lot of shit went down, and all of it was your fault, and now Satoshi is dead. And if I didn't care about starting a blood feud with the Kurosawa, I'd send you right there to join him."

Satoko closed her eyes as they began to burn. Uchiha Satoshi was Daddy. He was a dragon, mighty and unstoppable. He couldn't be dead. It wasn't possible. It was a lie.

"He's not dead!" she screamed. Her eyes snapped open.

For some reason, everything looked different. It was as if she'd needed glasses before and now she didn't. Everything was sharp and clear, just like the pain. And… there were fires inside people's bodies, shaped like skeletons only not, and Mummy's and the man's were different colours. And none of it mattered because the man had said Daddy was dead.

The man looked down at her in shock. "That can't be… Look up, child. Let me see your eyes."

He leaned over towards her… and then suddenly the fire in his body flickered and disappeared like a candle flame in the wind. She jumped back as he nearly collapsed on top of her.

Mummy pulled her kunai out of his back.

Satoko blinked, stunned and confused and hurting, and then her eyes stopped burning and everything looked normal again.

"Satoko," Mummy said in a shaky voice, "run to Minamimoto-sensei. Tell him there's an emergency at Hōmura's and he needs to come as fast as he can. Don't say anything to anyone else."

Satoko nodded, still confused, but aware that she'd been given a mission.

"Go!"
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I express concern that the Uchiha would not want to associate too closely with us in this regard.
 
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faflec said:
I express concern that the Uchiha would not want to associate too closely with us in this regard.
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This interlude is historical and may not reflect current-day Sasuke's views toward Hazou-the-leaf-nin. In fact, I'd say the evidence suggests that he'd consider putting up busts of honoured Uchiha ancestors to be a step in the right direction for Hazou learning to be a "proper" clan head.
 
faflec said:
I express concern that the Uchiha would not want to associate too closely with us in this regard.
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I doubt the Uchiha even remember.

MadScientist said:
Edits made. I think the Uchiha thing isn't a secret? And we can plausibly frame the art as as "long lost relative came home and is proud of his roots".
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I think it's just safer to avoid the Uchiha thing, especially since the Uchiha are long distant cousins.

The Goketsu should emphasized their achievement, acceptance, and new beginning. And not rely on past history, unless it concerns a founding member(Jiraiya).
FaintlySorcerous said:
I worry a bit that we shouldn't advertise our Uchiha blood (that's a clan secret, credibly?) and that some of this could be seen as stealing valour. The sanity-check with Mari should catch that, though - maybe add the finances bit under it, so it's more obvious it's a general sanity check?
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Sanity check shouldn't be used as a catch-all for all dangerous things.
 
Kiba said:
I think it's just safer to avoid the Uchiha thing, especially since the Uchiha are long distant cousins.

The Goketsu should emphasized their achievement, acceptance, and new beginning. And not rely on past history, unless it concerns a founding member(Jiraiya).
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I'm trying to emphasise connections to Leaf here. This is a prominent one. If people really hate it I'll remove it, but otherwise I'm leaving it for Mari-check.
 
[x] Action Plan: Surreal Estate

Sounds like a fun plan. What do we think about getting Arachnids to contribute design ideas? The Orbalorium(?), the Arachnid capital is apparently a marvel.
 
I'd personally be down to spend a FATE point to Declare that we've actually been soliciting suggestions/feedback on compound plans for a fair while and Hazo is now implementing them.

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MadScientist said:
[x] Action Plan: Surreal Estate
  • The Gouketsu compound badly needs an upgrade.
    • Use MEW/ES to sculpt it into something beautiful and unique.
    • Hire architects/builders/artists/doton users to help out.
      • Offer reasonable favours to those who go above and beyond (personal recommendations, adoption of civilians, invitations to Gouketsu events, etc.).
      • Maybe negotiate with another clan head or two to hire their workers.
      • Maybe also have Gouketsu members make their own contributions a la KEI compound.
    • Style some reliefs to resemble 3D sealing work.
    • Solicit feedback/suggestions from Goketsu nin, estate nin, and Goketsu civilians.
      • Encourage them to contribute as directly as they're comfortable. Goal is for it to be their compound.
      • e.g., Hazo's personal touch - style some reliefs to resemble 2D/3D sealing work.
  • How's the sanitation project coming along? Are we ready to start building an aqueduct and sewer into the compound yet? Do it, if so.
  • Work with Mari to manage our compound's image and social signaling. We want "Beautiful, exotic, and unique… but Absolutely Part of and Respectful to Leaf".
    • Statues of heroes of Nagi Island?
    • Hazo's Uchiha ancestors?
    • Jiraiya's teachers?
    • Dog clan, Toad clan? (Their histories with Noburi/Hazo, but also Kakashi/Jiraiya?)
    • Invite Arachnid design consultants? Teach anyone who wants Earthshaping in exchange for help with weaving/silk construction.
  • IMPORTANT:
    • Don't break our finances with this.
    • Sanity-check all with Mari.
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ProperAttorney said:
[x] Action Plan: Surreal Estate

Sounds like a fun plan. What do we think about getting Arachnids to contribute design ideas? The Orbalorium(?), the Arachnid capital is apparently a marvel.
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Good idea. Added:
MadScientist said:
[x] Action Plan: Surreal Estate
  • The Gouketsu compound badly needs an upgrade.
    • Use MEW/ES to sculpt it into something beautiful and unique.
    • Hire architects/builders/artists/doton users to help out. Offer reasonable favours to those who go above and beyond (personal recommendations, adoption of civilians, invitations to Gouketsu events, etc.).
      • Maybe negotiate with another clan head or two to hire their workers.
      • Maybe also have Gouketsu members make their own contributions a la KEI compound.
      • Maybe an arachnid architect?
    • Style some reliefs to resemble 3D sealing work.
  • How's the sanitation project coming along? Are we ready to start building an aqueduct and sewer into the compound yet? Do it, if so.
  • Work with Mari to manage our compound's image and social signalling. We want "Beautiful, exotic, and unique… but Absolutely Part of and Respectful to Leaf".
    • Statues of the Heroes of Nagi Island wouldn't go amiss.
    • Neither would art of Hazou's Uchiha ancestors (comission via Sasuke?), or of Jiraiya's teaching lineage (comission via Asuma/Tsunade?), or of the Dog clan's history with Kakashi and Toad's with Jiraiya.
  • IMPORTANT:
    • Don't break our finances with this.
    • Sanity-check all with Mari.
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Oneiros said:
[X] Action plan: Paving the way
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I would suggest a Sanity Check with Mari to take care of unexpected blind spot, but it has Scroll Hunt, so i'm gonna vote for it.
[X] Action plan: Paving the way

FaintlySorcerous said:
A planning meeting with Kei sounds like the sort of thing EJ would do but probably wouldn't have fun. Apologizing to Noburi is hopefully fun fluff, and I'm optimistic that the Kagome section (ft. Harumitsu!) will be fun. Talking about the scroll hunt next Vel update has my vote.
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We could put it offscreen and deal with preparatory meeting off-screen, so that we can directly go for the Scroll Hunt the next update. Personally i feel the Scroll Hunt was delayed so many times i want to put something on it now, before the momentum shift and some other Kaijus hits.
 
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MadScientist said:
[x] Action Plan: Surreal Estate
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  • The Gouketsu compound badly needs an upgrade.
    • Use MEW/ES to sculpt it into something beautiful and unique.
    • Hire architects/builders/artists/doton users to help out. Offer reasonable favours to those who go above and beyond (personal recommendations, adoption of civilians, invitations to Gouketsu events, etc.).
      • Maybe negotiate with another clan head or two to hire their workers.
      • Maybe also have Gouketsu members make their own contributions a la KEI compound.
      • Maybe an arachnid architect?
    • Style some reliefs to resemble 3D sealing work.
  • How's the sanitation project coming along? Are we ready to start building an aqueduct and sewer into the compound yet? Do it, if so.
  • Other functional/quality-of-life improvements that aren't just beautification.
  • Work with Mari to manage our compound's image and social signalling. We want "Beautiful, exotic, and unique… but Absolutely Part of and Respectful to Leaf".
    • Maybe carvings/statues of...
      • The Heroes of Nagi Island
      • Hazou's Uchiha ancestors (comission via Sasuke?)
      • Jiraiya's teaching lineage (comission via Asuma/Tsunade?)
      • The Dog clan's history with Kakashi and Toad's with Jiraiya
      • Kei and Shikamaru as a couple
      • Notable Gouketsu civilians born in Leaf (Chancellor Gaku, the engineering teams, etc.)
  • IMPORTANT:
    • Don't break our finances with this.
    • Sanity-check all with Mari.
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I remembered something!
You i think we have a way to get chakra metal.
Is long suspected that in the swamp of "not so deathly nowadays but still quite dangerous" have chakra metal on its centers that probably became a core of a golem.
Well golems are dangerous and all but we could use dog summons to heard them into a skyslicer. And havest his magic ninja gold cores.
Hazõ will get a new pair of gauntles baby.
 
MadScientist said:
I'm trying to emphasise connections to Leaf here. This is a prominent one. If people really hate it I'll remove it, but otherwise I'm leaving it for Mari-check.
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It doesn't really feel right and there are much better way to emphasize our connection to Leaf than blood. The Goketsu is explicitly is a found family. Take advantage of that.

And don't forget to incorproate fish gutters into the design of the compound.

Scratch that. It isn't so much of a compound as it is a district.
 
Gotta say, I really don't want to leave Leaf again so soon and ditch Harumitsu again.

I feel like we should finish our time with him before we leave for what may be months.
 
MadScientist said:
  • How's the sanitation project coming along? Are we ready to start building an aqueduct and sewer into the compound yet? Do it, if so.
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From an engineering/project management perspective, the redesign should wait until the teams are ready, and even then it required the teams to work together so that the sewer won't contaminate the aqueduct system.

Otherwise, if you redesign the estate before the tech are ready for implementation, what will end up happening is that you will need to tear up the Goketsu estate and redo it, and that will be more expensive.

Also, don't forget the gutters for fishes. Basically, they showcase the engineering talent of the Goketsu, and it's very nice to see fishes swimming in transparent water right next to the street.
 
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Velorien said:
Not that Yūma was going to share any of this analysis with Lord Noburi, in case those who ranked women on looks and dateability weren't the kind of person the Gōketsu wanted in their clan.
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Somehow I don't think that'd be a huge problem with Noburi.
RandomOTP said:
Yuma is an idiot and a flirt... but his problem mostly seems to be emotional immaturity.

He doesn't have the charisma to successfully pull off being a casual flirt, and comes across as scummy (note: I'm not a fan of how Noburi internally ranks women, either). I could see Yuma creating a minor social scandal for the clan.

Still, he's pro-civilian rights and pro-Uplift. He's dealt with KEI in good faith, and genuinely believes in the ideals of the Goketsu Clan. Yuma genuinely wants to serve his community in the only way that he's able to (chakra beast hunting).

I suppose that emotional immaturity is something he can be made to grow out of. Kei's already taught him a little bit of respect, just have Akane beat some sense into him during training.

Not an entirely hopeless cause. Just needs to grow up a little. I look forward to when he says something... impolite in front of Mari. It's bound to be a show :p
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He's a hotblooded teenager, and a natural true believer in uplift. He's the sort of guy who'd be trying to do what we do even if we didn't exist, but he'd be a lone ninja with few resources trying to make a difference with what little he has. Maybe even the sort to get in over his head and make some enemies about it because, well, hotblooded teenager.

Given some time and experience, he'll grow from hotblooded teenager to passionate adult, a believer of Uplift who really gets it, who thinks it's as self-evident as the fact that water flows downhill. We just need to give him room to grow and the tools needed to survive that long.
Cariyaga said:
Gotta say, I really don't want to leave Leaf again so soon and ditch Harumitsu again.

I feel like we should finish our time with him before we leave for what may be months.
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Yeaaaaaah. I'm pretty set on the scroll hunt being our next big outing, but after being reminded of Harumitsu I'm feeling like we should take some IC time on the homefront.

[X] Action Plan: Surreal Estate
 
Can we spend a fate point to declare that the sewer/aqueduct teams are done with their project and ready to have their systems implemented and integrated?
 
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