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"Got some nerve on ya to assume we were all before we even got here, doll,"
"we were all..." what?
"Oh, is that so?" Aoko then smirked and let out a chuckle, "Tell me, do you none of you take pride in your work? I wouldn't dream to be so careless with a corpse, so I don't imagine Albini would be so with a tank."
"What this? Do my ears pick up a Split Opinion in Court?!"
"What's this", possibly?
I'm also aware a 'rule' of murder mysteries is to not reveal information (in-text) that the readers couldn't have figured out themselves beforehand. And yeah, I think I may have been breaking that in this trial by having other characters reveal things based on info they have but Tsubasa's POV doesn't
Where? I thought you mostly did it in response to readers bringing those points up. Momoko's alibi came into question, as did the reason why her radio was chosen (you disclosed she had several prior to the update, but that's the point we'd have to clarify anyway). What else was there?

This is an interactive murder mystery, and one has to take advantage of the format.
>Momoka's Alibi?>>---X Momoka killed him
Is this a miscolor, or are there such things as partial Bullte Truths?
"Grr, that's dumb, you're dumb!" Etsuko hissed out, "Just forge your name on your own noisebox and leave it at the crime scene, much easier, don't gotta steal anything," she then huffed.

>Cracks on the Radio>>---X Don't gotta steal anything

"That's not true!" I said in time, "Whoever planted that radio would need to steal their own back later, so they could present it if questioned. Else, they'd be left with a shattered radio, giving them away."
...yes, but this is exactly what makes the act non-sensical. The murder was discovered at 10 AM almost immediately after Yudai's death. Momoka's lab was closed. The only guest there since 10 AM was Kanji. Meaning that if we ask everyone to present their radios, they are busted just as surely as if they never did the switcheroo... unless it was Kanji, I guess.

What would be the point, then?

It was foreshadowed one can break into another's lab without them noticing (like we did with Simeon's), but then it makes the entire point about interviews into a giant red herring.
"Hah, not only do you match up with both the tank and the radio show, you cannot produce solid defence for yourself," Fuhito smirked, "This case might as well be closed."
Fuhito may be the Ultimate Detective Wannabe, but he surely is the worst prosecutor. What kind of reasoning is that?
Total Influence: 22 vs Total Influence: 21
21 + Roll d20 (18) = 39
"This is our answer!"
How does this work? Which side of the equation gets a d20 roll to boost it? Is the boost completely random?
Wait, what determines the score? How are the values of 22 and 21 derived?

Between her amusement by chaos and how there seems to be some friction between her and the religious contigent of the cast, she's also the one person I can see putting the pentagram there just cuz', while the attempt to find a more practical reason for the pentagram didn't really go anywhere.
Wait, hold on... Aoko was coming to my aid? Even though if Dejan was innocent, that'd make her culprit status even more likely, being one of Momoka's guests?
No, this... didn't add up with what that Voice had told me. Only if Aoko wanted to be found out as the killer, for whatever reason.
The only reason I pointed at Fuhito for tampering was that it makes no sense for Aoko to draw even more attention to herself. If I have to deny her even that much reason, all bets are off.

[x] What the deal was with that pentagram.
[ ] Who'd tampered with the crime scene.

I think I'll go with either of these two, but before we try to figure out who messed up the evidence we might as well try to decide what evidence there was. We thought the pentagram could possibly be drawn to hide something. Was this really where Yudai died? What's up with two radios on the scene? What was used to draw the pentagram? Blood is not easy to wash out of most things.
 
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How does this work? Which side of the equation gets a d20 roll to boost it? Is the boost completely random?
Wait, what determines the score? How are the values of 22 and 21 derived?

22 and 21 were the sums of the characters of each sides' Influence stats, 22 being the sum of the side accusing Dejan and 21 of the side defending him. The idea is that the MC's side in the Scrum Debate wins if their total Influence plus a dice roll (I used a d20 off-site and got 18, in hindsight I probably could've used a smaller die) is higher than the opposing side's total Influence

I thought to introduce partial Truth Bullets to act as a way of presenting hypotheses, which is no worse than V3 where certain parts require you to commit perjury
 
So, I have been thinking about this. I did mention before how Columbird didn't really have to give the cast any motivation to provocate the first kill. That does imply the murder was either for personal reasons, or for the sake of the murder itself. We haven't really been together long enough for anybody to form strong grudges against Yudai. However, if you just want to play the murder game, killing him actually makes a decent amount of sense. Not only is he the one person that had decent chance of making the escape, but he's also the one person giving everybody else hope for said escape, so without strong personal bonds yet, he is the one canidate that would get a strong reaction from everybody involved.
Isn't that a motive that has more to do with Columbird and the organizers or the murder game, but not the murderer themself? Killing Yudai makes sense from the perspective of kickstarting the game and having it go on, but the murderer doesn't have to plan so far ahead because their game ends with the murder they commit, one way or the other. From that viewpoint it makes no difference who gets killed, and one should pick either based on opportunity or the likelihood of discovery, getting rid of those you'd think would be more likely to figure it out.

However, if the Columbird were to provide the right opportunity (by, say, ignoring an attempt at escape that leaves a character isolated), he might have you target a specific person while letting you think it was your idea all along.

...I don't think any of us had a strong personal motive for this kill.
 
22 and 21 were the sums of the characters of each sides' Influence stats, 22 being the sum of the side accusing Dejan and 21 of the side defending him. The idea is that the MC's side in the Scrum Debate wins if their total Influence plus a dice roll (I used a d20 off-site and got 18, in hindsight I probably could've used a smaller die) is higher than the opposing side's total Influence

I thought to introduce partial Truth Bullets to act as a way of presenting hypotheses, which is no worse than V3 where certain parts require you to commit perjury

What happens if something we're pretty sure is true loses in the scrum debate?
 
I'm also aware a 'rule' of murder mysteries is to not reveal information (in-text) that the readers couldn't have figured out themselves beforehand. And yeah, I think I may have been breaking that in this trial by having other characters reveal things based on info they have but Tsubasa's POV doesn't, but I do have an excuse for that. I wanted to make it seem like the other characters were working out the mystery on their own, rather than the MC and one or two others be the only ones actually trying to solve the case, as it an feel like in DR games
The only thing I can spot in the update itself it getting somebody to collaborate Momoka's alibi, which might as well have been done before the trial, but isn't exactly a big deal as far as information goes. Hildegard still is working on some kind of theory in regards to Yudai and the tank, so she might have a big reveal, but that's hard to judge without knowing the exact details.

Generally speaking though, I'll say that I don't mind a curveball thrown at us here and there.
Isn't that a motive that has more to do with Columbird and the organizers or the murder game, but not the murderer themself? Killing Yudai makes sense from the perspective of kickstarting the game and having it go on, but the murderer doesn't have to plan so far ahead because their game ends with the murder they commit, one way or the other. From that viewpoint it makes no difference who gets killed, and one should pick either based on opportunity or the likelihood of discovery, getting rid of those you'd think would be more likely to figure it out.

However, if the Columbird were to provide the right opportunity (by, say, ignoring an attempt at escape that leaves a character isolated), he might have you target a specific person while letting you think it was your idea all along.

...I don't think any of us had a strong personal motive for this kill.
Yes and no. "Yudai might manage an escape, so if I want to kill somebody I have to act quickly" and "If I kill somebody, it might as well be Yudai as he'll give the best reaction" are two seperate points and I'll agree that neither of them make for a strong argument. It's really less evidence in its own right, so much as it's a way to answer the question of a motive without contradicting what the voice told us. The fact that there was an opportunity due to him being isolated certainly helped as well.

Although, I'm not sure how much of a chance for escape Yudai ever had, really. If they had no way to account for the Ultimate Jailbreaker, it's not like anything would have stopped Columbird from removing him before the game even started. Meanwhile, gambling the entire killing game on the early murder of this one specific person seems questionable.
 
What happens if something we're pretty sure is true loses in the scrum debate?
My idea was that I'd actually keep rerolling until your side won. While that does sound like an easy way out, keep in mind at the end of the trial you'll be rewarded with Birdcoins based on how well you did. Reroll too many times, Tsubasa could risk getting zero Birdcoin for the whole trial
 
And here I hoped we'd get to bribe convince the jury. :whistle:

Same mechanics of losing money / favors to get them to listen... but I suppose it depends on whom you are trying to flip.
 
...when you put your life on reasoning along the lines of "the man is guilty because he went to a radio show once, and a radio show is a work of the Devil"... then yes, I imagine flipping them shouldn't be that hard.

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I am mostly concerned that we are trusting an important stage of the trial that involves convincing people to a random roll. The opinions about Dejan were split in half, but the roll made us gain almost twice the number of points out of thin air. What does it represent, where does the extra persuasiveness come from?

Admittedly, there is a situation we'd like to avoid where a few Influentual people are stonewalling the investigation.

Ultimately both are gaming conventions, but I already expressed my opinion that whatever makes stats more important is good in my books.
 
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Chapter 1: Class Trial - Resume
[X] What the deal was with that pentagram.



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"Hold on, there's something fairly noticeable we haven't brought up yet. Who drew that pentagram with Katsu's blood, and why?" I pointed out as soon as we resumed.

"I shall take this," Simeon was quick to speak up, "I see two possibilities. Either someone in league with Satan, at least in their own mind, trying to conjure his unholy spirit, or someone who realised too late the extent of their sin."

"Well, I certainly cannot imagine any citizen of Japan being a Satan-worshipper, our beliefs don't hinge on that sort of dualistic thinking," Toranosuke began, before his accusation came, "Therefore, this would narrow it down to one of our foreign students, Albini, Chevalier, or Schulz! And likely the first two, given what they've said about Catholicism."

"What the-!" Dejan blurted out, "Have you gone full Imperial, ya teacher's pet? I ain't taking no religious opiate, upstairs or downstairs!"

"Indeed! My France is a secular nation, much as some fanatic would mistake zat for Satanism," Jeanne snapped back at Toranosuke in turn.

"Not necessarily a foreigner, just someone in contact with foreign ideas enough to pick that up," Simeon then said, before turning at Genpachi, "Like one who made his name smuggling in the Devil's Music!"

At Simeon's words though, Genpachi laughed then said, "Cute, real cute. What, ya think in my travels I went and sold my soul at the crossroads? Feh, least I know enough about foreign stuff to know that a pentagram ain't just a Devil thing. It's also known as the Star o' David, ain't it?"

"No, that's wrong!" Hildegard shot out, "T-the Star of David's a hexagram! The pentagram's the stamp of Jerusalem."

"Now that sounds like an awfully specific thing to know," Fuhito said, then leaned in closer at Hildegard, "That, combined with your prior knowledge of Killing Games in Germany, well, one can only wonder..."

At those words, Hildegard's voice went ice cold, "Don't- you- ever accuse me of being a Nazi! My friends, my family, they'd all still be alive if not for them!"

"Hildegard... you are Jewish?" Jeanne had to ask, "S-sorry, I did not know."

Hildegard needed some time to compose herself again, but finally she said, "It'sokay Jeanne, it's only natural you wouldn't know. I... owe to my whole survival to disguising that very fact. Well, more correctly my mother was Jewish, my father Romani."

"And Hildegard's no killer, she's put in too much effort into solving this case for that to be just an alibi," I told everyone.

"But it also proves the perp wasn't trying to pin this on her, they'd have used a hexagram for that," Genpachi pointed out.

"And yet thou thyself couldst not discern whether the Star had five or six sides but seconds earlier," Yoritsune stated.

"Yeah, I dunno about any Demon Music, but you're still suspect, Mr. Sakamoto!" Etsuko then called out, "You were one o' the ones who weren't at class, wemember? That'd give ya heaps of time to pull this off!"

"Hah, ain't my style, doll-face," Genpachi said to her, "Ya think I'm gonna bring that much suspicion on myself by icing a guy this early in the game?

>>Blood Pentagram: Tampered>>---X ain't my style

"That's not true! The pentagram was tampered with on your watch, wasn't it?" I pointed out.

"Pfft, you'll wanna accuse the mortician broad of that, not me," Genpachi said, "The shrine dame and I, we just found the pentagram like that."

"I didn't lay a finger on that pentagram, my whole profession is about respect for sites of death," Aoko said.

"I can confirm. I was with Mori at the scene the whole time she was there, she had nothing but precision care for not disturbing a thing," Fuhito came in with, him being the last person I suspected to defend anyone.

It was those words that suddenly flared Simeon up. "Your attempts to defend that Reaper will only condemn the rest of us! Are you all blind to the fact it was obviously her?" he fumed.

"Oh? Do go on," Aoko had to chuckle at him.

At opposed to Aoko's bemusement, I had to say to Simeon, "I... think you might be jumping to conclusions here."

"She fits both the strange fluid that rusted the tank moorings and the radio interviews!" Simeon said, fire in his eyes and on his tongue.

[CROSS SWORDS]

"She's only in this for her amusement!"
"How to ensure more deaths? Kill the one best suited to getting us out of here!"
"Her entire livelihood revolves around death! What better way to drum up business and please Mammon?"

[ADVANCE]

"What? This Killing Game's far too elaborate for anyone to arrange just for profit," I brought up, "That's too much of a reach."

"Well, are you prepared to admit Dejan may be guilty?"
"Because Kanji was interviewed too late!"
"And as a man of the faith, I would never draw blood!"​

o=|Glass Shards!>>

"If you had to classify a radio as a weapon, it'd be a blunt instrument," I told him, "That means the glass shattering and blood spilling may not have been the intended cause of death, assuming it wasn't the tank anyway."

"And in the heat of the kill, moral codes tend to be easily forgotten," it was Yoritsune who spoke up, "History shows this."

"Yeah, as its shows there's been a whole bunch a' holy men who killed. The Crusades, the Inquisition..." Dejan went on.

"You dare insist I was the killer?!" Simeon lashed out, before he restrained himself and asked, "Alright, then tell me, how would I have even known the Ultimate Jailbreaker's Lab was down in the basement?"

"Because I told ya, preacher man," a smirking Genpachi then cut in. "Yudai boy was lookin' for accomplices ta help pull off his great escape. He said to meet me in the basement, but then when the holy fink caught me not headin' to 'class', I told him where the Lab was to explain where I'd been hangin'."

"...That does add up," I confirmed, "Katsu asked me in class if I wanted to help plan an escape, makes sense he'd seek out more than one person."

I expected another retaliation from Simeon, but instead he merely slumped back. "I... I can't avoid hiding my sins any longer, can I?" he said.

"Wait, no! Simeon, w-what are you saying?" Kagura spoke up.

"I knocked out Katsu with the radio I stole from Sakakibara, wielding it on one of my chains to not leave fingerprints. It was a radio I originally stole just to spite her, before any murder attempt entered my head," he told us, "And just before the tank came down to finish him off, smeared his blood to form that Satanic pentagram," he told us.

>>Actress Poster>>---X before the tank

"I can confirm! Well, some of what you said, anyway. That poster had already been thrown to the side, out of the tank's path," I said, "And I doubt Katsu would've treated it like that, since he'd need it to hide his lab entrance again."

"Huh, hold on? Then who set the tank loose?" Etsuko piped up, her eyes swirling around.

"Katsu himself, possibly," I spoke up, "We found him with a chisel and file in his hand, and well, there'd be a whole bunch of strange liquids down in a drain. And Simeon already knew of Katsu's escape plan from Genpachi."

"You've got that entirely wrong!" Kagura blurted out, "Simeon would never draw anything Satan-associated, n-no holy man would!"

"A holy man would if he was trying to pin the blame on another," Manami countered that.

"Or... he no longer believed he was so holy," Hildegard muttered, "When he looked down at Yudai's corpse and realised just what he'd done."

"I suppose I owe you my motive," Simeon then said, "I had to know whether this Killing Game was in God's plan, or if He meant for us to escape. Why else would He have appointed an Ultimate Jailbreaker among us if not for that? If Katsu lived, then I'd know this Killing Game wasn't what God meant for us, but... if he died..."

"Genpachi..." Jeanne then muttered, "You baited Simeon into doing this, did you not?"

"Damn right I did," Genpachi chuckled, before he went into a full-on ramble, "Listen, Jazz is everything! That improvisation embodied in Jazz is what allows us to break free of the society, nay, fate itself has set for us. It's our choices who define who we are, what we mean, meaning a world where some God decides everything for us, where nothing really happens because we say so, is a world without a meaning.
Yeah, simplest thing to do to get back at Simeon would just be to bump him off myself, but where's the artistry in that?" Genpachi kept going on, before his laughter started to build up, "No doll-face, you want a sucker to question fate and free will, you trick him into becoming a killer, see how his religion-addled mind handles that!"

I knew Genpachi wasn't the most trustworthy guy. Possibly from the moment we'd met, but definitely since Jeanne and I had overheard him and Simeon talking from that window.
"Genpachi, do you realise what you're even saying?" I had to get through to him.

"Frankly, sweet-cheeks, I don't, and I hope never to find out," Genpachi told me, seemingly having quietened down, "The moment you know everything, that takes away any reason or desire to know. Why break with fate if you know just what'll happen if you do?"
I couldn't tell if that was some longwinded way of him explaining why he just didn't tell us everything about the case in the first place, or if he was fully lost in his own musings. Either way, that Simeon had stolen Momoka's radio before his proper conversation with Genpachi wasn't contradictory, since he'd first stolen the radio for a whole other reason.

"NO! No no no no!" it was Kagura who then screamed out, "Simeon's innocent! If you have to blame anyone, blame me! I tampered with the pentagram so people couldn't trace it back to him, I'm the guilty one!"

"Kagura," Hildegard tried to say, "Yes, you were truant that day, and... I know you formed an early bond with Simeon. But still, no other evidence points to you."

"I'm the one who did it!" she blurted out, "I killed him! I killed Yudai!"

Was Kagura saying all this to protect Simeon, that she just didn't want to believe it was him? I had to get through to her:

[Battle of the Breakdown - Start!]

[Kagura's Forces: Paper shikigami and monstrous oni, armed with longbows and swords, and led by a taiko drummer]
[Tsubasa's Forces: A swarm of fighter planes, protected by clouds and wind, and fronted by a zeppelin]​

"Simeon's innocent!" [1d10 Roll: 10]
"Why he'd ever do something like this?!" [Roll: 9]
"It's totally Aoko!" [Roll: 6]

Tempo Up! Drum bursts!

"Or blame me, I was there too!" [1d8 Roll: 4]
"I tampered with evidence, that makes me the bad guy!" [Roll: 8]
"Just stop accusing Simeon!" [Roll: 1, Use up 10]

Tempo Up! Swords shatter!

"It's all my fault!" [1d6 Roll: 6]
"You can't- you can't execute Simeon!"[Roll: 3]
"Why couldn't it have been me?"

THE|IN|BUILDING|WRONG
IN | THE | WRONG | BUILDING!​


"We met in the South Building that morning, remember?" I told her, "You never came to the North building, Kirigiri would've seen you enter if you did. I mean, no offence, but you're not exactly that stealthy."

"S-Simeon," Kagura blubbed out, "Please... don't tell me it really was you".
The Miracleworker said nothing, he didn't need to.

"Let's... let's just try to get this whole case in order," I said, as all this had made me feel about ready to collapse.

*CLOSING ARGUMENT*

"Katsu Yudai, the Ultimate Jailbreaker, used a corrosive liquid to gradually rust the moorings keeping Albini's tank secure, then headed back to the class Ishimaru was giving just before the tank would be set free.
The killer knew the tank would roll down to the lowest point of the school, the basement, where Katsu Yudai's Lab was located, being told of its location by Genpachi.
Having exchanged radios earlier with Momoka after an interview, without her knowing, he tore down the poster in front of Simeon's lab before swinging the radio at him on a chain, to not leave fingerprints.
But the radio broke on impact, causing unintended bleeding. The killer, wanting to further frame on another, or possibly overcome with guilt, smeared the blood to make an occult pentagram shape before fleeing, a pentagram further smeared by Kagura in a rushed attempt to hide the killer's identity.
Katsu Yudai was doubly wounded when he fell on his own radio's glass, and if that didn't finish him, being unconscious when the tank crashed in did.

The killer being-
[ ] Aoko Mori, the Ultimate Undertaker!
[ ] Dejan Albini, the Ultimate Tank Commander!
[ ] Genpachi Sakamoto, the Ultimate Jazzman!
[ ] Kagura Amano, the Ultimate Miko!
[ ] Momoka Sakakibara, the Ultimate Radio Broadcaster!
[ ] Simeon Omura, the Ultimate Miracle-worker!
[ ] Katsu Yudai, the Ultimate Jailbreaker! (NMS Write-in)
[ ] Write-in
 
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[ ] Katsu Yudai, the Ultimate Jailbreaker!

I kind of want to vote for this under the logic that the tank was the killing blow and he was the one to set the tank loose.

And none of this explains why the mysterious voice in our head was certain Aoko was the killer.
 
If anyone's wondering what's up with the whole 'Battle of the Breakdown' thing, it's me trying awkwardly to work rhythm game mechanics into dice rolls.
Most DR Trials end with a rhythm game segment against either a mid-breakdown culprit or someone desperately defending them, so what I did was roll 3d10, then 3d8, then 2d6 off-site, the goal being to roll 5 or over each time, with Max Rolls able to undo Nat 1s. Again, the better the rolls, the more birdcoins at the end of the Trial

Also, that RaveDJ link I posted with the Closing Argument? Yeah, only found out recently that RaveDJ deletes mashups if they've been on the site too long (that one's still fairly new, at least)
I kind of want to vote for this under the logic that the tank was the killing blow and he was the one to set the tank loose.

And none of this explains why the mysterious voice in our head was certain Aoko was the killer.

I'll allow it, but even with the tank, Yudai still wouldn't have died if the radio didn't knock him out first. Tsubasa also acknowledged the possibility that the shards from each radio could've killed him before the tank came in

Edit: It'd also be hard to bring The Voice in the middle of a Trial, given Tsubasa hasn't said anything about them to anyone else
 
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[X] Simeon Omura, the Ultimate Miracle-worker!

Heh, figure the jokes on me for feeling like I shouldn't jump immediately on the guy for disliking him when "pentagrams are Christian" felt on the same level as Momoka's name being on the radio. Well that and the fact that Genpachi's taunt didn't happen until after his Interview with Momoka, so the window of opportunity didn't seem to match. Which makes sense if the theft and the murder had separate motives, but yeah, obviously didn't figure that part out.

Much more importantly, seems like the voice goes on the unreliable pile alongside Genpachi. Kagura too, really.
 
[x] Simeon Omura, the Ultimate Miracle-worker!


I'll be honest, I was thinking the pentagram was going to be a misdirection.
 
"I tampered with evidence, that makes me the bad guy!" [Roll=[COLOR=rgb(128, 255, 0)]8[/COLOR]]
"Just stop accusing Simeon!" [Roll=[COLOR=rgb(255, 0, 0)]1[/COLOR] Use up 10]

Tempo Up! Swords shatter!

"It's all my fault!" [1d6 Roll=6]
"You can't- you can't execute Simeon!"[Roll=[COLOR=rgb(255, 0, 0)]3[/COLOR]]
The parser doesn't understand "[Roll ... [tags][/tags] ... ]", requiring at least a space between the square bracket and the first letter. "[1dx Roll ...]" works fine.
"Because Kanji was too interviewed too late!"
I know the idiom "too little too late", but this one is new to me. :V
Katsu Yudai was doubly wounded when he fell on his own radio's glass, and if that didn't finish him, ebign unconscious when the tank crashed in did.

"I can confirm. I was with Mori at the scene the whole time, she had nothing but precision care for not disturbing a thing," Fuhito came in with, him being the last person I suspected to defend anyone.
Fuhito, how much is "the whole time"? You clearly weren't there when it got tampered with, so I can grant you either "with Mori", or "at the scene", but not both!

I suppose I never entertained the idea of Kagura and Genpachi both lying, because it only makes sense if the suspect is Simeon; Kagura would do it to cover for him while Genpachi would allow it to sink him deeper. But I didn't consider Simeon a suspect because...
"And as a man of the faith, I would never draw blood!"​
Well, no, not because of that. As I said before, his religious beliefs are not evidence of anything if he already violated them by committing murder. But let's examine our rebuttal.
"If you had to classify a radio as a weapon, it'd be a blunt instrument," I told him, "That means the glass shattering and blood spilling may not have been the intended cause of death, assuming it wasn't the tank anyway."
[...]
"I knocked out Katsu with the radio I stole from Sakakibara, wielding it on one of my chains to not leave fingerprints. It was a radio I originally stole just to spite her, before any murder attempt entered my head," he told us, "And just before the tank came down to finish him off, smeared his blood to form that Satanic pentagram," he told us.
How does this work? Does it have to be an "intended cause of death" for it to count as breaking a Catholic taboo?
We have to reach for "unintended bleeding" to reconcile that, and expecting a clean hit from something never meant for that purpose is like being surprised hitting a man with a car could make them bleed.
Then we have to believe that one would interact with the blood despite a strongly held (?) personal belief against it. It's not like an aversion covers a single specific action of drawing blood, and once you do everything is suddenly free game.
And what purpose does a pentagram serve? It would only narrow the list of suspects to people who could reasonably know about this stuff, which has Simeon himself at the top of the list. Whether it's an attempt at misdirection or repentance, it's very lacking.

Voting for Simeon would leave a bad taste in my mouth. It's like we have to ignore half the things we were told about him to make the facts fit.

The killer knew the tank would roll down to the lowest point of the school, the basement, where Katsu Yudai's Lab was located, being told of its location by Genpachi.
Eh, first off, would Simeon even know the tank would roll down before it is intercepted by the team sent precisely for that purpose?
Second, what does the tank have to do with Simeon's plan? He wanted to whack Yudai personally redardless of the commotion, allegedly to check whether he'd live.
 
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Simeon said:
"And just before the tank came down to finish him off, smeared his blood to form that Satanic pentagram," he told us.
...with what, your hands?
Evidence said:
(No Fingerprints at Crime Scene(I>
If the radio was the murder direction, the killer wouldn't have held it directly, rather swung it around on some sort of pole. This is probably what they used to draw that pentagram.
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I knocked out Katsu with the radio I stole from Sakakibara, wielding it on one of my chains to not leave fingerprints.
Your chains make for rather poor crayons. :V
 
Then we have to believe that one would interact with the blood despite a strongly held (?) personal belief against it. It's not like an aversion covers a single specific action of drawing blood, and once you do everything is suddenly free game.
And what purpose does a pentagram serve? It would only narrow the list of suspects to people who could reasonably know about this stuff, which has Simeon himself at the top of the list. Whether it's an attempt at misdirection or repentance, it's very lacking.

Okay, I double-checked with some raised Catholic about whether this makes sense from a Catholic perspective, and it does. The aversion is specifically about drawing blood, not just blood in general, with probably the most famous example being clerics not using edged weapons in D&D.
Now yes, many have argued that breaking bones is hardly any better than spilling blood, but that's a broader contradiction within Catholicism (or at least D&D), not just this Quest
The same guy I talked to said Simeon drawing that pentagram made sense, and that the proper name for doing that out of guilt is an 'act of contrition'

Your chains make for rather poor crayons. :V

Keyword here is 'probably'

Anyway, was gonna close the vote in an hour or so
 
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Chapter 1: Execution
[X] Simeon Omura, the Ultimate Miracle-worker!


[Class Trial - End]
[Score: B = Birdcoin! x16]
"Alright, ya ground-bound homo sapiens! If ya have a suspect, time to get votin'," Columbird squawked out from atop his perch, calling the trial to an end, "Oh, and don't think ya can just wuss on outta votin', unless you wanna join the culprit in their grave."

I looked down on my podium at the buttons before me, and given what Genpachi, Kagura, and Simeon all said, everything pointed to the Miracle-worker. But then... why would the Voice say it was Aoko, did they just get it wrong too? But then why would Kagura and Genpachi act up like that for her rather than Simeon, I couldn't recall Aoko being at all close to them?

But regardless of whether it was Simeon, Aoko, or anyone else, could... could I even press that button for anyone? I mean, I'd been in a war, so even if I never saw an enemy's corpse from up in my plane, I knew I would've killed at least someone before.
No, that was it, it was because I'd already killed that I didn't want to kill someone again, or be responsible for their death in this case.

I gave in and pressed Simeon's button anyway, knowing someone was about to die no matter what I did, be it the killer or the rest of us for guessing wrong. As soon as everyone pressed, I saw a series of what looked like film reels whirring Columbird, each stopping on eight frames of Simeon, four frames of Aoko, two frames of Genpachi, and one frame of Dejan.

"Well, lookie here. Seems you juvenile whelps aren't as ass-backwards when it comes ta the great tradition of democracy as I thought. Yep, the Ultimate Miracle-worker's the perp, the trash most responsible for the Ultimate Jailbreaker's untimely demise!" Columbird proclaimed, "And I might I say how glad I am, I knew You-Die was gonna be trouble from the very moment I spotted his Talent on the enrolment list. But ain't nobody worming their way outta this Killing Game on my watch; hell, the little upstart got what was comin' to him without me even needing to issue Motives!"

"Wha- w-wait! You knew who the killew was all along?!" Etsuko exclaimed.

"Course I do, what sorta Trial would it be if I didn't?!" Columbird shot back, "And I better not hear 'Why didn't you just say so?' I ain't here ta give ya stuff for free, ya mangy ingrates!
Though I have to say, my American feathered heart is somewhat torn 'bout having to execute O'Mural here, given he took out the biggest thorn in my side... but then I remember he's Catholic and not Protestant, so he can burn in un-American hell for all I care!"

At least Simeon had enough time for last words. "...It is not dying I'm afraid of," he began, even if the shaking in his voice indicated otherwise, "The Lord Christ, his Martyrs, the Twenty-Six especially, all went with grace to their deaths, knowing God's Light shone brighter. What I fear is... where I'll be sent next.
Had I died earlier, it would've been with certainty that I'd ascend to heaven for my Martyrdom. Now... I can no longer say if I'll be welcome there. And, and I fear what will happen to everyone I leave behind," he finished, looking around one last time at all of us, but especially Kagura.

"Ah, enough of ya sob story! It's PUNISHMENT TIME, son!" Columbird announced.

It was then a beam of light shone down on top of Simeon as he said his final prayers, the beam somehow lifting him upwards, with a crying Kagura trying to leap up after him but to no avail. It was then a cinema-sized screen flickered on, its caption stating:

[SIMEON OMURA HAS BEEN FOUND GUILTY. TIME FOR THE PUNISHMENT!]


View: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FDBa1rb94qY


The screen showed somewhere high in the skies, with shining gates of pearl resting on a stair-shaped cloud. Simeon, having levitated up here, tried to approach... only for Columbird there at the gates to give him the thumbs down, sending Simeon falling.

[ Ultimate Miracle-Worker in: The Harder They Fall! ]

Simeon then fell back to Earth so hard that he crashed right on through the ground and into what looked like Hell. He proceeded to be flung around by full-force winds, fall into cold water, be knocked around by golden boulders, crash through city walls, become trapped in a flaming coffin, fall into lava, be caught in a cauldron only for it to tip over a cliff, and finally be eaten by by a three-headed Satan animatronic above a frozen lake.​




All of us were speechless at the Execution that'd just unfolded, the only sound being Kagura's continued cries. Even the most resolute or unflinching of us, like Toranosuke, Fuhito, or Manami, had a downcast look or needed to step back.

I don't know what it said, that the Ultimate Jailbreaker and Miracle-worker were first to die, the two who from their Talents alone should've been our best bet to get out of this game before it even began.
For Simeon, I'd at least say he didn't have much reason to fear Hell. Given this was an underground facility designed to psychologically destroy its captives, what was the difference between hell and this Killing Game anyway?

"Oh right, I mentioned Motives, didn't I?" Columbird, the last person whose voice I wanted to hear, then said, "I have here several of yer 'Prized Possessions', you could call 'em, letters home, keepsakes, inheritances, that kinda crap. Would've brought 'em up before, but since Cat-Sue got flattened anyway, I didn't need to. Who knows, kill again and not get caught, and I might so generously give ya yours back as a going-away present. America rewards hard workers, after all."

Columbird had a curtain lifted to briefly show us these 'prized possessions', and I nearly collapsed when I saw a certain a letter among them, but not one of my own...

"H-Hokuto..." I mumbled out.

Aoko, still alive even though the Voice had called her the culprit, then asked me, "Enoshima, who to do you mean by Hokuto?" I expected a mocking tone from her, but she actually phrased that delicately.

"Friend in the Air Force," I told her, "Komaeda Hokuto. He gave me his letter to deliver to his family, since he was worried the editors would take it off him."

"Yeah well, better get ta killin' again if ya don't want me to scribble all over it!" Columbird then said, before he had the curtains dropped.

"I...I need to be alone," I muttered, continuing to clutch at my head.

"Enoshima..." Aoko said again, as she turned to me with a somber gaze, "It's my profession to help those who mourn. I can tell this has been... hard on you, hard on us all, so please, know you can always share in your grieving. You don't have to suffer alone."

At first I planned to head all the way back to my room, but instead I decided to just walk till I was far enough out of earshot from everyone else. I had... questions to ask. Privately.

"Hey, helping me survive the Killing Game. Was that a lie?" I hissed, waiting to see if the Voice responded.

"Well, to the best of my abilities anyway," the Voice promptly came back into my head.

"So it was a mistake on your part?" I asked, "Because the alternative would mean you tried to get me, and everyone except Simeon, killed."

"Hah, shows how grateful you are," the Voice said back, "Columbird, or rather the Mastermind behind him, could've switched things around to throw me off, for all you know. It's not like a Killing Game referee to play fair."

"...Columbird knows who you are?" I had to ask.

"He might, he might not, I don't have access to his or his Master's thought-signals," the Voice told me, "If I did, I would've taken them over already. Keep talking to me like this when his security cameras are on, and you could risk him finding out. Why else do you think I don't talk to you 24/7?
Look, Tsubasa,"
the Voice just had to say, "If I just wanted you dead, do you think I would've gone to such roundabout measures to get inside your head?"

I couldn't think of anything to respond with on time, and those lingering words ended up the last I heard from the Voice that day. But not the last I heard right then.

"E-Enoshima, are you okay?" someone else called, as I turned around to see it was Momoka.

"Oh, Sakakibara, i-it's okay. I'm... fine, fine as any of us are right now," I tried to tell her.

"T-that's good to hear, Enoshima," she said softly and bowed, "We all assumed you'd headed back to your room, so it was worrying to see you just standing here, not moving or anything."

"What? Oh, that's nothing," I tried to tell her, "I just have... a whole bunch of thoughts to process."

Momoka nodded, "It'd be good for us to rest up anyway, it's, well, been an awful long day," she said. "B-but I was wondering, Omura talked about going to Heaven or Hell. I didn't know what to think about that, but ah, maybe you have thoughts on where he is now?"

I sighed, "Sorry, Sakakibara, I don't know much about, well, any religion's afterlife really. All I can say is... at least Omura and Katsu aren't here anymore."

But... at least we still have a chance to escape, as long as we live...

Chapter I End

Fourteen Students Remain
Tsubasa | Genpachi | Toranosuke | Yudai | Momoka | Hildegard | Fuhito | Jeanne | Dejan | Aoko | Kagura | Simeon | Manami | Etsuko | Yoritsune | Kanji​

The Next Day:

[ ] Spend time with Aoko, I may have gotten her wrong...
[ ] Spend time with Dejan, make sure that tank's now stable
[ ] Spend time with Fuhito, I might need to insect his detective credentials...
[ ] Spend time with Genpachi, I ought to keep a close eye on him...
[ ] Spend time with Hildegard, she exposed a lot of herself during that Trial...
[ ] Spend time with Kagura, see how she's dealing with Simeon's death
[ ] Spend time with Toranosuke, he's the next best persobn to place our trust in, with Yudai gone...
[ ] Write-in student

{Current Birdcoin: 30}
[ ] Cryptic Diary, Cost 6
[ ] European Cheese, Cost: 8
[ ] Imported Record, Cost: 8
[ ] Machine Parts, Cost 6
[ ] Meatloaf Rations, Cost: 5
[ ] Movie Tickets, Cost: 8
[ ] Traditional Incense, Cost: 7
 
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Okay, so I have something to say about writing this last part, that I wanted to wait until after it'd ended to do so, once the mystery and trial could be judged in full

This was actually my first time ever (or at least in memory) that I've written a murder mystery, except the one in Persona: The Beautiful but that mostly wasn't the focus of the plot, as well as a court trial. So while yeah it was a little rusty around the edges, I personally think I did a good job overall, achieving a nice mix of not being too obvious but also not being completely out of left-field either
 
[X] Spend time with Aoko, I may have gotten her wrong...
[X] Movie Tickets, Cost: 8
[X] Traditional Incense, Cost: 7

I do feel bad for suspecting her and as mentioned, I have taken a liking to her behaviour. Might be worth it to take her up on her offer to help mourning as well.

As for the present, we've got seven options and seven reccomended meet ups. However, one of those is the movie tickets, which have previously been mentioned as a high cost general option, so they might not divi up that cleanly after all. The Incense does seem like the best bet for Aoko though. Although, I can also see them being for Kagura, or both of them. Anyway, seeing how it's only a one coin difference to the movie tickets, I'm really fine with either.

The vote aside, it occurs to me that with the voice currently suspect, we might want to keep an eye open for signs that they're speaking to somebody else and they just haven't spoken up about it either. It's not some big thing that I'm convinced is happening, but it can't hurt to keep an eye open.

Also, man, it's not a pretty sight, but I have to give it to Columbird that he put in the work for the execution's practical effects.
Okay, so I have something to say about writing this last part, that I wanted to wait until after it'd ended to do so, once the mystery and trial could be judged in full

This was actually my first time ever (or at least in memory) that I've written a murder mystery, except the one in Persona: The Beautiful but that mostly wasn't the focus of the plot, as well as a court trial. So while yeah it was a little rusty around the edges, I personally think I did a good job overall, achieving a nice mix of not being too obvious but also not being completely out of left-field either
To give my two Cents, I do think the set-up works as a mystery in terms of the reveal making sense with what has been forshadowed. As a trial meanwhile, I do think we could have used at least one more piece of solid evidence incriminating/exonorating Simeon/Aoko once we got to the stage where it was between the two of them from the list of Momoka's interviews to help us put together a solution.
 
Hmm, it could be said that not having one more piece of evidence to convict/defend could work in the Quest's favour, as it gives an air of uncertainty when it comes time to vote

About the Voice, I never really expected anyone to find them trustworthy, if anyone did. Aside from their existence being a bit too convenient, their initial inspiration was Atlas from BioShock

While I don't have any strict system for awarding E to S Ranks after a Trial, I figured since we mostly got good rolls with only a couple of bad ones (some of which were fixed by previous good rolls or stats), a B to me made sense. The Birdcoins you received at the end of Trials go up by 4 each Rank, e.g. E is 4 and A is 2
 
"Enoshima, what to do you mean by Hokuto?"
[ ] Spend time with Fuhito, I might need to inspect his detective credentials...

[x] Cryptic Diary, Cost 6
[x] Spend time with Fuhito, I might need to inspect his detective credentials...

He's a librarian, he must know a thing or two about diaries. :whistle:

I said my piece already. Besides that... Simeon's attitude appeared inconsistent to me. He drew the pentagram because he was contrite, yet not so contrite as to avoid pinning blame on others. Granted, it wouldn't be much of a trial if he outright admitted his guilt... but then he did exactly that when we haven't even begun to corner him properly. I am unsatisfied that the solution was given to us rather than reasoned out; had Simeon not confessed to drawing the pentagram I would have little evidence to pin it on him given the other factors I thought were exonerating him.

You said that you were afraid the killer may have been too obvious, and that rankles too because I couldn't connect most things until after he spelled it out for us. What was the logical train you expected the readers to follow?

There was talk about the swap happening because the killer would need to produce their radio if asked... yet the option to actually go through with it wasn't there. Ironically, it would have exposed the killer on the spot because he didn't have time to get the radio back. I mean, it would probably be cheating, but it does seem like a major murder-plot hole.

Would you allow this kind of thing, or would it be against the spirit of the game?

The setup with triple death causes was pretty clever. However, Katsu's own radio never featured as a potential cause for death or injury (limiting us to Momoka's radio and the tank), even though one of the options suggested it was meant to be. Would work much better -- as far as my own sense for fairness of a puzzle is concerned -- if Momoka's radio didn't draw blood (i.e. Simeon succeeded in knocking him out bloodlessly just as he intended) only for him to get injured when falling on his own radio, something that Simeon couldn't reasonably have predicted.
 
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