Aye, let me get some talking done.
First of all, as I said, I'm back to my normal work schedule. Getting used to arriving home from work and then writing when I can will be odd, after a full month of being able to write whenever I wanted, but I'm sure I'll get back to that routine once again soon enough. That said, yesterday (as you may have noticed) was one of those incommunicable days, and today I'm simply in no condition to do anything but prepare for tomorrow.
I'll close the votes, update the character sheet and say a few things then.
While I like both, I agree. it's really all about the slender appearance. It makes her look more elegant, kinda like Fleur De Lis
Yes, Fleur De Lis is definitely the kind of body type she has, that less used "slender mare" that we see in Canterlotian unicorns every now and then.
She is indeed quite the catch.
Of course I don't mind! I'm more of flattered x)
Just pasting the link works for me.
Here's the link:
https://privnote.com/JfzbfIR6#09yeqG3F8
Ah, thank you!
The link seems to be dead, though, but I think I'll be able to use the one you posted earlier! (Edited so the image isn't here without need)
I'll get to it shortly!
@BirdBodhisattva can we have some financial world building? I would be willing to help work things out if you don't feel comfortable with this.
Thank you kindly for the offer, but as of yet it feels "unnecessary". If you wish to follow through with it then sure it'll be expanded, and I'll ask for help if I feel that it's not adding up, but many actions can be handled by Velvet herself due to sheer competence from her. So many financial actions will really be summed to her competence and capacity to do so.
Nobody:
Not One Person Ever:
ABSOLUTELY Nobody:
My brain: you know, that would've been a horrible time to get a nat 1!
Me: ...but why tho
Why terrible?
You would have met a puppy!
A servant action might be problematic if she's got occult paraphernalia lying around. And, possibly, even if she doesn't; our servants are noted gossips.
I rather hope they have the decency to keep quiet about this. Gossip about a strained marriage is one thing but Jade's house is quite another.
She has at least one
Lantern artifact you know of lying around somewhere.
And a noble? Hoping the servants "will have the decency" to do anything?
(Laughs in phrygian)
Even after the description came up in-story, I still imagine Jade Whistle with a sort of avocado color scheme - light-ish yellow eyes, green coat, dark green mane and tail. That's why it's so important to describe a character's appearance the first time they show up - otherwise, a placeholder appearance will be imagined by the reader that may become difficult to dislodge.
The same thing happened with Windy Flakes - I'd been imagining a white coat/sky-blue mane/tail/eyes recolor of Mr. Cake, and then when he was finally described with a fiery color scheme I experienced an odd sort of dissonance in the part of my mind that generates images from descriptions.
I can't remember if Comet Feet has been described beyond "big", but I've been imagining him with a dark blue-grey coat, a very light blue mane and tail, and olive-green eyes.
On that note, I somewhat agree, however...
You see, a first description is indeed important, but to be extremely honest I (and this is a personal opinion, of course) never really thought that physical descriptions actually "stick".
As in, you remember characters by what they
do or by
how they are described.
So if I have a... say, a very
Grail character, and she frequently is described to "elegantly shake her head, waving her long crimson mane in an eye-catching movement" then people are more likely to remember that said character has a "long crimson mane".
But if characters are described only once, physically, and then certain things really become unnecessary or inconvenient to be repeated, then... well, I believe it is natural for the physical part of them to be somewhat left to the side. It will always be there for reference, but you are more likely to remember "The strange smile about Windy's face" or "The bored tone of voice with which Jade spoke" then the fact that Windy looks like a bonfire, despite being a
Winter adept, or anything else. You are more likely to remember Comet Feet as "large" and "dangerous" than anything else, because that's what Comet Feet usually
does.
And that being said, I personally don't very much mind people having certain mental images. I even think it makes the reading more fluid. Each person has their own interpretation of events, so they can envision the scene more accurately. Being reminded this or that physical characteristic might be a "blow" that will off-balance some readers when it's mentioned, but not long after it will be forgotten in favor of each person's own mental image of things, and reading will be fluid once again.
But of course, that's just my take on things!
I think Sensation involves major body changes not because transformation is one of Grail's aspect, but because you can't be immortal AND unchanged.
But Birth is the First Torment, and while the Enticements of the Grail outnumber its Torments, its Torments are its final nature.
Book quoting is always virtuous.
Random thought, but I wonder if the ritual we're making might be used to find specific kinds of books or artifacts. Like, if we could aim for level five Heart or Edge artifacts instead of having to just hope we get them on a search action, that would be quite useful for when we get around to bringing Luna back, since we do need those specific kinds. Or better yet, if we could get powerful Forge and Grail artifacts we could even get rid of our scarred trait, which would be nice.
It'll be elaborated on later, if the ritual is successfully designed this turn.
